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From ANON - Jinks on January 27, 2012

>> just wanted to say thanks for up dating x3 I really
Enjoy this story, and to know that you still write it and are trying to finish it make
Me really happy xD and I recall on on your other story which I love,that you were pregnant..I wish you the best of look and hope you have a healthy child
And life ^_^

~I suppose Im your otaku now XD lol
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From JOler on January 27, 2012
Guess the shower scene was ok... Figure that is what you want the opinion on most.

Hmmm ... was hoping Ichigo would figure out a way to bind and gag H'Tsu with his (H'Tsu's) own soul ribbon ... just to put him in his place (and wishfully get a laugh out of Zangetsu ...) Though if Ichigo offers Szayel the choice of 'refreshing his markers' with H'Tsu or Zangetsu and Szayel chooses Zangetsu ... that could be hillarious too (including a furious H'Tsu's response as well as a completely flabbergasted Zangetsu's response ~ since Ichigo didn't bother informing Zangetsu his attentions would be offered so that Ichigo could 'remain true to Grimmjow').

Really gotta wonder what Szayel is writing now ... and if Ichigo is gonna tell Grimmjow that his reason for being so 'close' to Szayel earlier was because Szayel was tutoring him in Science ... and for all his awesome magnificence Grimmjow just doesn't have what it takes to tutor him in Science ... (yer hot Grimmjow but ya just ain't got the brains to take care of this little need ... and Szayel does).
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From writeaddict on January 27, 2012
Nice chapter. It seems that Grimmjow is starting to identify with the omega even if it's because Ichigo got mad at him first. If Ichigo can materialize Zangetsu can he do it to H'tsu too? Is there more to what H'tsu did to Szayel? It seems like more happened. I can't wait till the egg is hatched. I want to see what their child will be like and Ichigo's friends and family will react.
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From JOler on January 25, 2012
Hugs hon. Love the fic so far ... Hope ya like the two furry little monsters I tossed to ya over the last few months (and the rare pair request).

So glad Grimmjow is having a change of heart toward Szayel (Szayel is a scientist and curious by nature ... and curiosity is something a cat should more or less understand ... ). Ichigo's gonna have to point out his homework and how little time he has to get it done ... tell Grimmjow he has a tutor in the human world to help him with it but that person isn't here obviously ... so Grimm has two choices, either help Ichigo himself, or get over it and let Szayel take it easy and tutor him while Grimmjow enjoys hunting (Ichigo needs the help with his lessons and the tutoring might help Szayel heal some of his non-physical injuries ... a win-win type of situation).
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From ANON - gollumsfriend on January 24, 2012

Absolutely loved the new chapter! So much emotional stuff going on, even for Grimmjow! ^^

Thanks so much for the update and keep up the great work!
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From ANON - Kristin on January 23, 2012
Awesome new chapter as always. I went ahead and reread chapter 4 and Grimmjow states that after a month of the DNA and reitsu swirling around is his stomach it forms into an egg and is expelled from the body. Anyways keep up the great work, Ilove this story and update soon, please!
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From JOler on January 23, 2012
Hmmm ... Quick note ...reread the first four chapters ... Two months until hatching is stated but the timeline still doesn't seem to add up right when reading the series of events.

Also, Grimmjow states all his previous mates died, not that any miscarried, yet later in the fic he sadly reminisces about some of his mates miscarrying.
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From Quetzalcotal on January 23, 2012
fantastic as always!!! update soon i can't wait for the egg to hatch ^-^ will it be a kitten like grimms Adjuchas form or be a human looking child? i would think that the panther kitten or something like that would make more sence because you were saying that the child would generally have to fend for themselves right? I see that being more reasonable as a cat then a human baby. update soon!!!
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From ANON - Chess on January 22, 2012
I first started reading this story a long time ago, then, admittedly, forgot about it for awhile. I came across it again a few days ago by accident, and read through the entire thing, beginning to end. I have to say, I'm glad that I did. I actually detest m-preg stories, and this is literally the only one I've ever come across that I've enjoyed. You gave a plausible explanation for it, and you've made sure to keep talking about the reason behind it instead of just throwing up something quick and then forgetting about it. You also keep the story interesting with unforeseen plot twists. The sex scenes certainly aren't anything to frown about either. Overall, I really like this story. It got my attention enough for me to spend several hours reading it, and I look forward to seeing the next chapter.
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From ANON - NightXIV on January 22, 2012
Yay, a new chapter~
Poor Syazel. I hope things turn out better for him soon and I wish Grimm would stop being such a jerk to him.
I laughed so hard when you added the dramatic music XD
Can't wait for the next chapter~ Mmm, makeup smex. The best kind of smexing out there XDD
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From ANON - KyuRyu on January 21, 2012
Aww, Grimm-Kitty grows a conscious! I must say I can't wait for the nxt chapter, I really didn't expect the turn of events you took with Sayzel-but I LOVE how its turning out.

This is really one of the most unique stories I've ever read with the two. (It doesn't help that there is a very sad lack of Semi-Ichi/Uke-Grimm
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From blueflame125 on January 21, 2012
I'm glad Grimmjow has come to some senses. It'd be lovely to see the cubs getting along in the future. I'd also love to see prideful Grimmjow trying to make up to Ichigo. XD
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From JOler on January 21, 2012
Hmmm ... So it takes 60 days? ... Can see that being about right for Szayel's egg to hatch since he should be less than a week along due to the miscarriages; but since Grimmjow says it will only be 15 more days until hatching it means the egg was laid 15 days ago. And if Ichigo told his teachers he'd be back in 1 month when he got his assignments, that would indicate Grimmjow laid very soon after they arrived and Szayel would have only 'caged' him a couple of days ... unless Ichigo perhaps said 6 weeks instead of 1 month ... allowing for a couple days travel time, a couple days setting up den and nest, then a week or so for the 'caging' before H'Tsu gained control of Szayel and Ichigo and Grimmjow got away. Which would also mean that Grimmjow was only 2 weeks along when they arrived in Hueco Mundo ... think that is the timeline confusion that has been mentioned ... though Grimmjow might amend his time estimate by saying that based on Szayel's species the average pregnancy for a butterfly (insect - bug) type is 60 days ... while Grimmjow, being a large mammal type, tends to have an extra 2 to 4 weeks of development. (would also give Grimmjow a chance to give the excuse that he really doesn't like eating insect-types and therefore Szayel is low on the desirable eats list ... but if nothing else is available ... ~ allows him to talk himself into putting up with Szayel for however long).
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From JOler on January 21, 2012
So glad Grimmjow is finally getting a clue ...

Hmmm .. Ichigo can manifest Zangetsu at will? It would be great if Zangetsu appeared to focus on caring for and comforting Szayel (to punish H'Tsu, calm and comfort Szayel, and give Grimmjow some security that he isn't 'sharing' Ichigo). Of course if Zangetsu is there it probably means that Ichigo and H'Tsu are having a battle royale where ever they are ... it also means that H'Tsu might be able to manifest as well (either with or without Ichigo's permission).

Would still love to see ...

1. Grimmjow's cub bond with Szayel or Szayel's egg/cub (gets image of Szayel cowering in terror as a clumsy kitten toddles over and "mew?")

2. Szayel have an impending miscarry scare that even gets Grimmjow concerned. Maybe getting them back to the human world to seek help or dragging Kisuke and/or Ishen to Hueco Mundo to care for the stricken mama and egg.

3. Grimmjow reluctantly agreeing the are formally a pack ... so long as Szayel remembers that Ichigo is Grimmjow's private property (even if Grimmjow is 'just' the beta). ... might make use of Zangetsu's manifested form (lol ... imagine Szayel's glee at being part of the first Hollow/Shinigami-Zanpacto mated pair), or if Szayel gets to meet Kisuke and/or Ishen he might happily cuddle up to one of them. (could you see H'Tsu having a fit at being tossed aside for any of those options? Heck, after what he just read, Grimmjow might be willing to try to be both Ichigo's beta and Szayel's alpha at the same time ... could you see Ichigo's expression at the mention of that option?

4. Hope Ichigo gets it through to Grimmjow that as far as Ichigo is currently concerned Szayel is "earning his right" to be part of the pack by being Ichigo's tutor so he won't be swamped with homework when they do finally return home (giving Ichigo more time to cuddle with Grimmjow and be daddy to the cub).

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From JOler on January 19, 2012
Half wonder if Grimmjow and Ichigo will have a heart to heart about the memories Ichigo got from H'Tsu and the treatment of Szayel ... if the memories are distressing enough to obviously bother Ichigo for a while. Also wonder if Grimmjow and Szayel might talk some while Ichigo is out getting food, supplies, and maybe more bedding (figure Szayel will bleed through on occasion and the nesting materials and uniform will need occasional replacing until he's more or less healed). Just figure that cats are curious creatures ... and for all he is, Grimmjow is nothing but a huge cat filled with innate curiosity ... and he'll at least want to know what H'Tsu did to shut 'Pinky' up so quickly and so effectively. Kind of wonder if Szayel's recounting (confirmed by Ichigo's memories) will actually bring about some compassion from Grimmjow (especially if Szayel has a scare or two concerning another possible miscarriage ~ H'Tsu did a pretty intense number on Szayel psychologically in regard to another miscarriage and the consequences of it happening again). Grimmjow would also see Ichigo's concern and distress in that situation.
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