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Reviews for Forged Confessions

By : BookMaggot
  • From ANON - Azure on May 12, 2015
    OK. I was hoping for some steamy action. BUT I'm super impressed. I love how you used Zaraki too, very clever. I've never left a review before. But this deserved one. Thanks for the read.
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  • From ANON - Juu on March 03, 2015
    This has to be my very favorite fiction with these two of all time. I can read and reread it, and can't get enough of it...from beginning to end, and especially the satisfying ending without making someone die. I'm so glad you decided to share this!
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  • From AriaDream on July 07, 2014
    Awww, what a beautiful story! I'd hoped for some smut but it's still lovely. :) Such powerful emotions. Thanks!
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  • From Vyper on April 14, 2014
    I loved this story. It was so heart wrenching and beautiful.
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  • From ANON - rachel on July 23, 2013
    I loved this story, such a sad and sweet story
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  • From ANON - Anon on May 21, 2013
    Yay! Finally! :D Thanks so much. There were some problems with punctuation, but that was really all I noticed.
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  • From Raymy on May 20, 2013
    Ah, the kiss of true love brings the heartbroken back from the brink of death and despair. It's a Fairytale, but it's very ... comforting, the way you expect it to be. The build up of anxiety and fear melts away when two green eyes restore the balance. I had a big smile and sense of well-being at the end of this chapter. I'm almost tempted to say that you could leave it there but I would have to spank myself for such thoughts. I need to know what they say to each other, I need to know how their relationship changes.

    I didn't feel the revelation was rushed in the long view, meaning, if I read the preceding chapter together with this one, the arrival of Shun's confession comes in time to still my squirming need for resolution. The fact that you separated the scene into two chapters for a cliffhanger, might make this one look like it happened too fast though, because the tension you built in the last isn't readily present in the reader at the beginning of the new chapter. You know what I mean? My emotions had time to calm and couldn't be built back up to the same degree with only this chapter, so I had to reread the preceding one to get there again.

    I'm not a big fan of cliffhangers in general for the reasons I describe above. I'm not able to sustain the same level of interest and emotion from the cliff to the ledge below. I still want to find out what happened, but my investment is diminished. That is not the same as waiting for plot development. That can make my curiosity soar to create much excitement at the beginning of a new chapter. The key difference is probably when the scene is cut. I'm no expert as to timing and I may be guilty of my own cliffies, especially when urged on by readers who like it.

    I guess, having expressed my thoughts about this to you, I've reaffirmed my position in my own mind. I'm grateful that your story made me think about it in depth. I don't want you to think there is anything wrong with the way you unveiled your pivotal moments. That is for you to decide as the writer. My enjoyment of your stories continues to be at a higher level than most. I can feel the difference in my appreciation and I only hope I can convey some of it to you, to fill your own sea.
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  • From whitetiger on May 19, 2013
    It did feel a tiny bit rushed, however, in situations where someone is on the verge of life and death the feel of time changes. A minute can seem like an eternity or an hour can feel like no more than a second. All that mattered was the feel of desperation Shunsui had in what he felt would be Jushiro's last moments.
    This was a good chapter and thank you for updating. As for not getting the chapter up because of laziness, well, I can't really say anything because I'm procrastinating on one of my stories. So, instead I'll pray for a speedy update. :)
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  • From ANON - qwerty on May 19, 2013
    I was just thinking about this story today! Glad to see that you updated and the confession finally happened!! Can't wait for the next chapter.

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  • From Raymy on May 02, 2013
    Chap 8: I read this as soon as you posted, and now when I come back to read and review, you have an edit. I'm not sure where but ... am I mistaken? Did you have Shunsui think, "I love you too" at the end? Or was I imagining that? It could be from another story, you know. Anyway, Shun ultimately said, "It didn't matter anymore", I don't think it matters, either, because I like the ending. It's like you're putting off the moment when he reveals his feelings, maybe for when Jushiro is recovered? I know you're trying to worry us that the possibility of Ju dying is real, but I just can't accept that. Not from you. If you let that happen, I would have to give you twenty lashings! Looking forward to how you bring them back together, even if it's just to reconnect as best friends.
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  • From ANON - MagicMau5 on April 29, 2013
    OMG so sad! Wow I really, really liked this story. Awesome! It totally made me cry, and that's the kind of story I love. :)
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  • From whitetiger on April 28, 2013
    (Before reading the chapter) Yahoo!!!! An update...
    (Reading chapter) Bwahahahaha. Shunsui you idiot. Bwahahahaha. (Big ass tears)....
    (End of chapter) Noooo Ju-chan, please don't go!!!...
    An excellent chapter as always. I agree with you, this chapter was definitely needed.
    Finally Shunsui pulls his head out of his butt and comes to see his friend. It is good to see that Shunsui realizes what he felt for his dear friend, I still find it priceless that Zaraki is the one to focus him. :) I also feel you chose well with Retsu Unohana's actions, you know the NOT slapping an injured man for being a complete moron. (I however would have gave him a thorough smack-down.)
    I am waiting for the next chapter as patiently as I can. (Squirms in seat). Lots of Love and keep up the good work. :)
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  • From Kefira-chan on March 19, 2013
    please tell me there will be more chapters??? I loved this story! I even like how Kenpachi of all people is the one to knock some sense into Kyoraku, That fight scene was just epic! and I do hope things go right in the end
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  • From whitetiger on February 11, 2013
    The battle was well done, my heart was racing through the whole thing. I could almost feel the power the two captains wielded as they clashed. If I had been present in their world, I would have been one of the weaklings passed out on the ground, probably drooling in my comatose state.
    I think you did a good job with the characters, they did not seem to be OC at all under the circumstances. It is nice to see Zaraki portrayed with the caring heart we all know he possesses. It is also good to see Shunsui so enraged over the insult of his dear friend even though he is confused over his feelings. I can only hope Zaraki was able to get through to Shunsui before our dear Jushiro passes on over a broken heart.
    Thank you for the update, I look forward to the next chapter.
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  • From ANON - Athrun434 on February 10, 2013
    nice job writing the battle scenes i rekon you did a good job. its weird seeing Zaraki been concerned about someone but cant wait to see what happens next.
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