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From JOler on December 13, 2011
I hope you don't mind my reviews ... Observations and comments, followed by questions and occasionally musings ...

Hope you did well in classes ... and hope you get a bit more time to write over the mid-winter break (or mid-summer if you are south of the equator).
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From ANON - Modaf1 on December 10, 2011
Glad you passed your class and got the compie fixed.

Happy to see Shunsui so excited about Nanao's pregnancy.

It looks like Szayel is going to definitely be possessive of his harem until the babies are born at least. Of course he could see Chojiro as a second strong alpha male in his territory as opposed to the more fragile Ukitaki. Haven't seen him around Shunsui yet. I'm sure he at least somewhat enjoyed the little lingerie session he walked in on. As for Masumoto, I was under the impression that she and Toshiro were not yet intimate ... but I could be wrong (sigh). That lingering gaze he gave Isane ... wonder if it is a hint of interest or if he senses something else ... Or is he wondering if either/both women are interested in both teams in bed (i.e. Having male and female partners). I wonder if Byakuya joined them to ensure everyone was safe from Szayel or if he had simply appeared to give the impression of a threat in the last chapter.

I'm wondering if his attitude towards Ukitaki has changed any now that he's been able to observe him and see his somewhat fragile countenance. It would be a bit interesting to see Isane and the others get together for that 'slumber party' Rangeku mentioned, only for Yumichika to arrive because he's escorting Kiyone to the place since she is also expecting. (Bet he'd enjoy seeing that little grey nightie ... wonder if Szayel or any of the other men would be peeking in as well ... As far as that goes would Szayel have to do a double take when he saw Yumichika for the first time or would he know for certain that Yumi was a male?

Still can't get the image of a stunned Byakuya suddenly finding his arms full of new-born infant and being told "there's the big bad threat you've been worried about ... so go deal with it" then him looking down at the baby as it snuggles into his arms and coos at him trustingly. Could be in the delivery room or a short time after the birth ... but sooner or later you know he'd see one of the babies even if we don't see him seeing it. So now we've seen the expectant mother's quarters ... what about the staff and the men? The other facilities? Any more candidates going to show up now that there are confirmed pregnancies? Will we see SoiFon or her current daughter soon ... maybe a curious daughter wandering into the containment area with a panicked SoiFon searching for her ... only to find her with Szayel "mama mama a big bad growlly fuzzy thing tried to eat me and the pretty man saved me" little girl running to mama then shyly peeking from behind SoiFon's legs and blushing cutely at Szayel ... SoiFon snarling icily "what are you doing here?" ... Szayel "I ... Just disn't want to see the child hurt ... But, if you must know we were all moved to that old bunker over there until the experiment is concluded" ... now wouldn't that go over well ... lol (ok just my imagination running amok again).

Can't wait to see the rest of the company and what happens next. I will admit I'm fond of Byakuya and would love to see him become convinced to be a supporter in some way ... even though I know it will take time. It might also be nice to see all the males interacting for a bit with each of them having a chance to interact with Szayel and him getting a chance to know them a bit better and decide how he feels about each ... who he trusts and who raises his suspicions or gives him subliminal danger warnings. Will any of the opposition be permitted to monitor the proceedings in an attempt to reduce the risk of hostilities? I'm guessing paternity tests will take place after the babies are born.
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From ANON - Mofaf1 on December 03, 2011
Peek ... Whimper ... Whine ... Ok gonna try to settle down and refocus. Finals at various schools over the next three weeks ... Maybe she'll post once the semester is over ... Good luck on finals.
Peek again just to be sure I didn't miss a chapter.
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From ANON - Mofaf1 on November 17, 2011
I must apologize. In the last review I wasn't trying to dictate ... It is just the image that keeps going through my mind when I read the interaction between Byakuya and Szayel. Byakuya being an arrogant and opinionated jerk who's trying to get in the way ... and Szayel who is trying to keep things calm and organized while maintaining a caring and relatively professional demeanor. Szayel seems to be trying to be helpful despite the fact that the species are historical enemies. I could just see Szayel handing Byakuya a potentially half hollow baby in the birthing room and daring him to do something harmful to it in front of all the other shinigami ... including the mother (but offering him a second course of action if he so chose). Of course Byakuya would not be expecting such an action to take place or to suddenly find himself holding a tiny and helpless newborn who could potentially be an enemy ... hence his stunned reaction. He'd have to do some serious quick thinking ... and Szayel would probably be watching out of the corner of his eye in order to protect the baby in any case ... he seems to care about the mothers regardless of paternity.
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From ANON - Mofaf1 on November 16, 2011
Sorry ... I just can't get this image out of my mind.

A very icy and stern Byakuya at the birthing center refusing to leave while one of the women is screaming while in hard labor ... she's having twins and is having a difficult delivery. Szayel is trying to help while Byakuya is just standing more or less in the way. Szayel finally snaps at him "Just what is your business in here?"

Byakuya's icy response "I am here to contain any possible threat."

Szayel turns back to the woman briefly then turns back and shoves a bundle in a wide-eyed and stunned Byakuya's arms. "Good, make yourself useful and contain the danger by diapering it..."

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From ANON - Mofaf1 on November 16, 2011
DuE to mismanagement at the start of the experiment the paternity is in question, however it is possible that Szayel is indeed the father so until the paternity is determined I suppose the women must be monitored as if the babies are his. If the fathers turn out to be the shinigami partners then the added security and extra precautions and monitoring will not do any harm. If Szayel is the daddy, much to his surprise, the mother(s) and child(ren) will be safer and away from the general populous. This fact should be pointed out to Byakuya since there is a chance the paternity is shinigami. (Personally I'm hoping Szayel gets surprised in a big way but that is in the hands of the author). The only two guaranteed paternities are Nanao since she didn't actually go through with it with Szayel, and Nemu since Szayel has been her only partner. Soi-Fon, Kiyone, and Hinamori all admit there is a second potential father. Rangeku hasn't said anything, at least not that we have heard about other than before she and Szayel were together and she didn't say there were any intimate relations between her and her friend. As it stands I believe Hinamori mentioned Chojiro as a possible father and he is there to help (maybe because he does know there's a chance it could be his) and captain Shunsui, whom Nanao named as her partner, is also joining in the observation and protection force. I'm sure if pressed for a reason they will both admit they could be the daddies too. I wonder if Szayel will be willing to 'share' each respective female with the other perspective father or if he will still be possessive of all the women. The possessiveness is his instinct in his staked out territory but he does know that the other males are equally likely to be the fathers (and are if his hypothesis is correct ... Doesn't mean he's correct though). I'm still hoping Szayel is so surprised that he's blindsided by happiness and pretty little cuties to dote upon. I'm also hoping that the as yet unseen second espada is female and manages to snag a few of the guys who are against the experamint and manage to change their minds.
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From ANON - bleachfan7 on November 15, 2011
what i don't get about story so far is how could the men that slept with the now pregnant women not even think its possible they were the fathers rather than szayzel? can they not tell time & realize its a 50/50 shot the baby is theirs? seems like the men would have to be extremely clueless. same w/the 4th division, do they even ask if there was another partner in the fertilization time frame? when will the babies be able to show they are pure shinigami & not part shini part hollow? there seems to be a whole lotta ignorance going around, including byakuya.
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From ANON - Mofaf1 on November 15, 2011
LOL ... Oh Byakuya ... An outbreak? You make a bunch of potential babies sound like it's a contageous disease or epidemic that could physically infect you. Is your pride injured because Szayel has successfully become a daddy (from the look of it at present) several times over with minimal effort (one tumble = one pregnancy ... can't say bent because it is unknown if any multiple births will occur). Or, Byakuya, are you so unsure of your fighting skills that you feel incapable of defending SS from half a dozen or so diaper clad squalling infants who can't do any more than crawl at best and don't know the first thing about the old rivalries? I mean get over it ... the kids are being born in lockdown and you have several months to build barriers to contain them if necessary. Are you afraid the babies might out cute you? Are you jealous because you've discovered that Szayel's rumored prowess with and caring treatment of the women participants has moved him ahead of you in the 'giggled and whispered' popularity polls among the women? Or is it that you heard the rumors and want a turn but you aren't eligible because you're a guy too (LOL) and he just brings out that ... deeply buried curiosity?

Now the question is ... who will mutter that type of comment and who will hear it? You know at least one of them is thinking it during or after his rant.
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From ANON - Mofaf1 on November 14, 2011
So ... Fifth or Sixth division captain?

Not wanting to critisize because I'm loving the story and want to see more, but the language and grammar errors are a bit distracting and confusing at times.

On a story note... I'm honestly surprised that Szayel didn't point out to Byakuya that he (Szayel) had been forced to participate beyond the initial relationship he'd formed with Nemu, the women had acted as called upon by their commanding officers, and that the person he should direct his anger to about the entire experamint would be the shinigami captain in charge of the Twelvth. All of those facts could be corroborated by many individuals and probably by recordings and reports. Again, this may help to change his views of the situation; especially if he witnesses how caring and respectful Szayel is toward the others.
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From ANON - Mofaf1 on November 14, 2011
It's nice to see Szayel is concerned for the health and well-being of all the pregnant females. I don't know yet if I trust Chojiro, too little real interaction. Byakuya should take note of how Szayel is treating everyone ... especially the pregnant and ill women. His stance on the situation is obvious but if he is asked to simply provide protection to the currently defenseless and more fragile women, since he is an honorable, strong, and healthy male, he might make prolonged observations concerning Szayel's treatment of and behavior around the women. Of course Byakuya would not be willing to protect Szayel but if a pregnant female, say Hinamori for example, was in danger he would probably step in to at least keep her from harm. Szayel would probably risk his life for each of his 'harem' and their unborn offspring. That risk of his own life to protect the women might cause Byakuya to grudgingly admit he might not know the Espada as well as he believed. I wonder what Byakuya would do if he did accompany them and saw a badly injured Szayel be more concerned for the women and even the other (non-alpha 'pack member') males than he was for himself; refusing treatment until the others ~ including Byakuya ~ were tended to. Of course I doubt he'd be too concerned with the males in general but having their help during the move would make things much easier. After getting to know him a bit better Szayel might have included Ukitake in with the women from some perspective due to his more fragile health. If Unohanna can convince the two of them to be civil to each other this might actually be a good opportunity for them to talk, Ukitake can join in and act as a 'social' buffer to some extent.

Can't wait to see the new place and how things progress.
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From ANON - Mofaf1 on November 13, 2011
Yep, Szayel sounds possessive of Nemu. Now the question is ... does that same possessiveness extend to the other females in his territory? And, if so, then to what degree? Would the possessiveness only extend to the women he actually mated with? Or would it include, to some degree, Nanao, Isane, and Unohanna as well? What about Kyone? She and Soi-Fon are the only two preggers females not in confinement. Will Kyone be brought in soon to live with the others? I'm sure no one will approach Soi-Fon yet.

Will there be another round of participants for Szayel to 'sigh and suffer through'? Or have they called a stop to any more mating since fertility and conception do not appear to be an issue in this case, though paternity is yet to be determined.

I still don't trust Akon or Mayuri or the move. I won't be too surprised if lots of pitfalls happen on the way to the new site and if it isn't just an empty shell of a building still. If her sanctuary is near the building, I'm sure Soi-Fon would be aware of what the Twelvth is actually doing. I wonder if she would actually side with Szayel and the other pregnant women he'd be protecting if she had to make a choice. I'm sure Szayel will work out an understanding with Ukitake and Shunsui and any other males supporting these proceedings just to reduce tensions among the protectors of the women.
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From ANON - Mofaf1 on November 05, 2011
Actually, Byakuya and a few of the more honorable captains might back down a bit or at least reconsider their thoughts of the espada in this given situation if Szayel makes it clear that he is seeing to the care, well-being, and safety of the women with whom he has mated and who are now with child. If he remains relatively non-combative unless he perceives a danger to one or more females and willingly puts himself in harms way to protect her while any opposing captain is around, especially if he ensures the female received no injury afterwards, it could go a long way with him gaining at least a small amount of respect from them. I'm pretty sure Byakuya would see him in a more honorable light in this given situation if he became aware that Szayel sees to the welfare of the women he has been paired, with due to the experiment, and puts his own safety and needs second. I wonder if Ukitake, and later Shunsui, will find time to casually intermingle outside the 12th and mention how it has been such a pleasant surprise to discover that the espada is quite caring and protective of the women. How the rare times he makes requests it is for the well-being of the women and not himself; and he does have a territorial boundary set up around the women that acts as a buffer zone so he can evaluate the threat of anyone entering it in regard to the safety of the women. Byakuya and some of the others might agree that they would do the same if the situations were reversed. If Mayuri does return (shudder) his treatment could easily be contrasted to Szayel's and bring about several conflicting thoughts among various shinigami. Even Akon's icy and uncaring attitude could be enough to start some debates concerning the stereotyping of the espada as monsters and the shinigami as the honorable ones in all situations. Since Szayel has made it clear multiple times to various individuals, the fact that he originally resisted the experamint and multiple pairings only to be forced to participate by the shinigami in charge, Mayuri. That should also help with any change of attitudes since I'm sure most believe he is/was a very willing participant in all of this. Of course as a reader it is great seeing Szayel's more caring side and seeing him with an adoring harem.
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From ANON - bleachfan7 on November 02, 2011
i'm guessing all these positive preg tests have shinigami fathers, yes? including rangiku. glad ukitake was able to get an un-whitewashed glimpse into what szayzel has been put thru along with the women that are pregnant. also love szayzel's open hostility to akon, as he deserves it for the jerk he's been all chap (& i started out liking akon).
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From JOler on October 26, 2011
I'm suspecting that Akon and Mayuri might actually be behind the anti-experiment movement and working from the inside ... based on words and actions from both. I'm sure Szayel is picking up on their negative and potentially threatening subliminal signals. Ukitake however has no such subliminal signals and is perceived as less of a threat unless he makes an obvious move on any of the females which might be taken as an attempt to usurp Szayel's position as head male of the group ~ I suppose Ukitake touching Nemu could be seen that way ... or Szayel might be mulling over Unohanna's observation about Hinamori and Rangeku both behaving similar to Nemu. We don't know about Kyone's symptoms because she hasn't been brought in ~ though I'm sure that will change soon; nor do we know SoiFon's symptoms due to her self seclusion ~ though one or both could be similar to Nemu's. It is nice to see Szayel is concerned for Nanao's mental and emotional well-being even though he knows he has no way of being the father of her baby (though he could be somewhat responsible for it ~ and she is being grouped in with the ones who did mate with him).

It sounds as though the girls who did mate with Szayel are showing similar symptoms ... even if he is in denial. I wonder what his hypothesis is concerning the much greater fertility of the group since both races are known to have very low birth rates. (Another thought/realization that might be crossing his mind ... ). Just a comment from any passing individual about how amazing it is that ALL the candidates got pregnant given how rare pregnancies are in general ... it's like the hundred year quota of babies are all being expected in less than one year ... and if Isane and/or Unohanna start having morning sickness and other symptoms ... then test positive ... it would be a reasonable basis to hypothesize that prolonged contact of any type (not just sexual) with a male arrancar to espada level hollow could be a stimulant to the female shinigami reproductive system (something else for him as well as Unohanna to look in to). I'm sure such a possibility would occupy his mind to some degree since he could be responsible for pregnancies occurring even without mating with a female. Still hoping he was Rangeku's first and only (if she hit him with that info then he's possibly still trying to accept that his initial theory was totally wrong and that it is possible he has several cherubs on the way ... and a harem who seem to be starting to value and welcome his companionship/visits in favor of companionship/visits with some members of their own kind (i.e. Akon or Mayuri). Even if he is in denial I think he enjoys having and is possessive of his harem and territory. Just not sure if his thoughts are distracting him or if he is upset about Nemu allowing Ukitake to have even minimal physical contact with her.

Isane sounds like she likes to live on the verge of panic attacks and is easily influenced by hints of possible problems no matter how unlikely or how unsubstantiated the premis. Wonder how Ukitake would react to Unohanna getting pregnant ... and Umichika's reaction if Isane told him the rabbit just died (old pregnancy test reference ... means she's pregnant).

Maybe we can hope for a new espada to arrive as a Christmas or Valentine's gift?

Great chapter
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From JOler on October 24, 2011
*Wails* ... Noooooooo *kicks computer* How could you! That's her GRADE we're talking about! *stomps to the other side of the room to review*

*grumbles... Freakin' self-centered computers that trash perfectly good school work ...grumbles*

Ok, ahem, the review ... SQUEEEEE A NEW CHAPTER!!! Captain Ukitake sounds reasonable and it seems as though Szayel is willing to give him the benefit of a doubt when it comes to being fair and non-threatening. Szayel seems to be getting more at ease with him after the talk and was able to get a small amount of information concerning Shunsui. I get the feeling he will be fine with the two new captains so long as they don't try to usurp his alpha male position and prove to be there to support him and promote the care and well-being of the women and offspring. I get the definite feeling that he does NOT like or trust Akon. Akon doesn't seem overly pleased with the introduction of the new captains (whether it is because they are siding with Unohanna and in some ways with Szayel or simply because they are males is still subject to debate).

Now that Masumoto has come back positive all the participants are accounted for. Since we haven't heard them talk much yet ... I'm still going to cross my fingers and hope Szayel was her first and only actual 'gone all the way with' partner and therefore the only possible daddy. I seriously want to see his reaction to finding out his pet theory is wrong and the female shinigami CAN get pregnant with him. (Also want to see Masumoto be the victim of her naturally endowed figure and the rumors of those she told no ... and her one early love ~Gin~ being totally gay). Szayel saying something about being an adequate first for her to prepare her for being with her special friend ... Only to be told her friend has been away on a mission and she hasn't been with anyone else... (get the feeling Szayel would feel like he was mentally blind-sided by a double decker bus). Can so see her as a flirty virgin tease ... and Szayel being both surprised and honored at having been her first. (the girls from the first round spoke so highly of his caring and concern that she felt he was worth it, if he didn't turn out to be as caring as they said ... she could say it was because he was 'an enemy' and a beast by nature). I get the feeling that he does care for her some though ... maybe a close second to Nemu. I'm sure he cares to some degree for Himamori and Kyone. I think even he is surprised that he cares for and is concerned about SoiFon. Nanao might not be carrying his child but he is concerned for her well-being as well and will probably tell Shunsui as much, possibly even enlightening him on the truth of the situation and the paternity of her baby. I wonder what he would do if any of the females, including Isane and Unohanna, we're attacked or mistreated by Akon or another division male when in his presence ... Provided he isn't restrained, sedated, or otherwise hampered from acting on his preferred course of action. (don't want him endangered or punished though).

Wonder if Isane is going to get that added rest (perhaps Unohanna too) for similar reasons to those of Nemu. Ukitake and Shunsui might find they are more needed than originally anticipated.

Can hardly wait to see them moved. Still nervous about the return of Mayuri.

Will be interesting to see if another arrancar is introduced, who the next round of candidates are if the experiments resume with additional tests, and if Soi Fon and possibly first kid appear in the future. Ok, enough of my ramblings and wishful hopes.

Hope you can survive the corrupted report. Will be looking forward to further updates as you have the time.
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