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OMG so sad! Wow I really, really liked this story. Awesome! It totally made me cry, and that's the kind of story I love. :)

(Before reading the chapter) Yahoo!!!! An update...
(Reading chapter) Bwahahahaha. Shunsui you idiot. Bwahahahaha. (Big ass tears)....
(End of chapter) Noooo Ju-chan, please don't go!!!...
An excellent chapter as always. I agree with you, this chapter was definitely needed.
Finally Shunsui pulls his head out of his butt and comes to see his friend. It is good to see that Shunsui realizes what he felt for his dear friend, I still find it priceless that Zaraki is the one to focus him. :) I also feel you chose well with Retsu Unohana's actions, you know the NOT slapping an injured man for being a complete moron. (I however would have gave him a thorough smack-down.)
I am waiting for the next chapter as patiently as I can. (Squirms in seat). Lots of Love and keep up the good work. :)

please tell me there will be more chapters??? I loved this story! I even like how Kenpachi of all people is the one to knock some sense into Kyoraku, That fight scene was just epic! and I do hope things go right in the end

The battle was well done, my heart was racing through the whole thing. I could almost feel the power the two captains wielded as they clashed. If I had been present in their world, I would have been one of the weaklings passed out on the ground, probably drooling in my comatose state.
I think you did a good job with the characters, they did not seem to be OC at all under the circumstances. It is nice to see Zaraki portrayed with the caring heart we all know he possesses. It is also good to see Shunsui so enraged over the insult of his dear friend even though he is confused over his feelings. I can only hope Zaraki was able to get through to Shunsui before our dear Jushiro passes on over a broken heart.
Thank you for the update, I look forward to the next chapter.

Well, I'm on a bender of reviews, right now, trying to get caught up. I really love this story, as well as "Hymns", but I've been putting off responding, even though I have been reading. So, I reread Chap 6 along with this chap.

Chap 6: Yep, Shunsui is locked into his anger, confusion, and shock. He's immobilized himself. He's angry at his own deficiencies for not seeing this all along, and for not knowing that Jushiro needed him to see it. He is confused about the feelings Jushiro has had to suppress, and not knowing his own feelings about it. He's shocked that the world he depended on is not what it seemed. Not knowing, Not seeing. The very antithesis to WHO HE IS. No wonder his existence is called into question, his universe collapsing. No wonder he can't get out from under the weight of it to do what he should. The bigger (prouder) they are, the harder (deeper) they fall. I'd say he's always thought pretty highly of himself and Jushiro. Their connection bolstered him, each other. He doesn't even know if the connection is still there!

That's was really well written. If my interpretation is anything to go by, I'd say you got your intent across. Intensely satisfying.

Chap 7: I've not had the pleasure (or torture) of writing a battle scene, but I fully intend to and the more I read, the more ideas I get. So, I'm very pleased at your description. I was able to follow the action easily (some other writer's fight scenes are quite confusing), and the dialogue made it much more enjoyable than strictly fighting. Of course, it needed to be there to further the plot. I think your characters are still intact, no danger of losing to OOC-ness. My pride swells for Zaraki's meddling, giving him so much more depth than the manga shows. Big bear, big heart. Kyoraku needed exactly someone like him to break through his self-imposed isolation barrier. I guess we won't know until next chapter if he succeeded.

nice job writing the battle scenes i rekon you did a good job. its weird seeing Zaraki been concerned about someone but cant wait to see what happens next.

I think that last chapter is exactly what we the readers needed - an insight into what Shunsui was thinking. I think you choose the right chapter to post. So yay, good job! Looking forward to the next chapter!!

I kind of can sympathize with Shunsui - I have the same problem sometimes with not picking up on emotions even though I'm usually really good at it - but at the same time....
And Kenpachi arrives! Hahaha, oh, I'm looking forward to reading the rest of their confrontation! xD
*raises brow* From your 'phew' at the end, I take it this chapter was troublesome to write? You did well with it. :)
May the words just flow,
Cuzosu

I couldn't wait on the other site and came here instead. Can't help it, I love this story so much. The angst and hurt...

Awesome chapter! Hope somebody (maybe Kenny?) could knock some sense into Shunsui soon and that perhaps he realizes that subconsciously he had also bottled the same (unrealized?) feelings for Juushiro.

Hope your moving runs smoothly and please update soon and promise you won't ever ever abandon this fic! Take care and happy writing!

I was very exited when I saw you updated this story, and thank you very much. It is WONDERFUL!!!! I am angry at Shunsui but I also feel bad for him too. I know what it feels like to have so many emotions bouncing around inside and trying to sort them out. And Zaraki! - "Is that yers" "No." "I was hopin' you'd say that," I can see the gleeful smile on his face as he drew his sword (Shivers in delight). I can't wait to see what you do with the next chapter.
As for any errors, the only thing I noticed was a couple of the words were switched around early in the chapter, but the flow of the chapter was well done. I agree with the other reviewers, this chapter fit so well with the story and as readers we needed to know what was going on with Shunsui. You did very well. :)
I wish you luck with your move and will hope for a speedy update. Thank you.