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May 29, 2008 at 12:00 AM
You have a lot of run-ons, and comma splices. Otherwise, though, I love the premise.
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May 29, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Nice! update soon
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May 29, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I like this, but for a story where the first chapter had rape in it, this hasn't been delved into very much.
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May 29, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Wow! I can't wait for the next chapter. I want to know who these people are and why that guy raped Ichi.
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May 28, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Wow, he really has gotten over his rape rather quickly, huh? Does this mean that there is a serial rapist from Soul Society on the loose in the human world? Looking forward to the next update :)
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May 27, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Don't let your brain stop!!! I need more of this story. I just hope your fingers can keep up with what your brain is telling it to write :)
This is really good and I hope you update soon.
This is really good and I hope you update soon.
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May 27, 2008 at 12:00 AM
thank you. I totally agree, a chapter is as long as a chapter needs to be, it's as simple as. Can't wait for your next chapter, this is getting so good.
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May 27, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I LOVE it so far. Keep updating please. ^_^