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Interesting concept. While I have nothing against where you are taking the story so far, it is hard to reconcile your portrayal of Ichigo with the Ichigo that storms the Soul Society fighting off shinigami and captian class shinigami to save Rukia. The story does little to address this discrepency. On one hand, you have a character that can fight at a captian's level, but who also turns into a simpering mess. Are you changing the back story and making Ichigo's role in Rukia's rescue less, or was Ichigo able to overcome his fear or hide it? There are also a couple of places where you lose the reader because you switch ideas abruptly. The one that sticks out is when Zaraki is told to leave Masaki and Ichigo and yet he is still there. The reader gets the impression he left, and it is confusing when you switch back and he is still there. Now after all that is said, thanks for sharing the story. I hope you continue it. It is allot easier to criticize than to actually write a story and post it. I hope my review helps.

Let me just say that that was the saddest thing I've read in a long time. I was literally crying through the whole thing. One of the things I like is that you put in details but just enough to keep the readers interested, so thanks for not being detailed obsessed. I like how Hichigo is beginning to show, but does Kenpachi know about Ichigo yet? And what's going to happen to Isshin? I would really like to see him pay. Poor Ichigo but I would like to see more Kenpachi and how he helps Ichigo. Do I see some healing sex in the future? Well anyway, just wanted to say it's a great story and please update! Thanks!

I'm glad I could help. Yeah, sometimes its not easy to forget those lessons we learned as a kid but that's why we practice or we have betaers to help us out. Again I like where you seem to try to be going but then again I'm not sure where the story is heading. If I were writing this, would have several very pissed off captains track the traitor down and ensure he never hurts anyone again.

Great chapter I can't wait to read more. Thanks for the quick update. Till next time

More I demand MORE

I am glad to see a KenxIchigo fic though it had me crying a few times. Overall I like it but to be honest, your writing styles is amatuer at best and you could really benefit from a beater or at least someone to look it over. While the plot is admirable but way it flows is rather blan. You use no descriptions, everything happens too quickly, and you don't even give the story time to breathe before you immedaitely charge into a new scene. I'm not saying this to be mean but to give constructive critism. I do like you're story and will continue to read it.

Well, this is interesting. I always find it amusing when I read Rukia cursing. heh and poor Ichigo. T_T I feel sorry for him. I'll be looking forward to the next chapter. ^^

I read all three chapter and I just love this so much!!!! It's so sad but I like sad fanfics. You need to put make more chapters!!!