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June 8, 2008 at 12:00 AM
The story seemed to be going very well. Are you planning on finishing ?
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April 4, 2008 at 12:00 AM
This fic is the best RenjixIchigo fic I have ever read... Hell, it is far better than most of the fics in bleach fandom...
I am awed with the plot...so original and well thought and I loved how in character Renji and Ichigo are...It gave me thrills when I read some of the parts...and I liked how you developed the relationship between the boys, so believable and beautiful...
It is a shame that you haven't been updating this story for so long.I hope you will continue this... since this fic is magnificence manifested in words...
I am awed with the plot...so original and well thought and I loved how in character Renji and Ichigo are...It gave me thrills when I read some of the parts...and I liked how you developed the relationship between the boys, so believable and beautiful...
It is a shame that you haven't been updating this story for so long.I hope you will continue this... since this fic is magnificence manifested in words...
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December 8, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Great story :) read your notes, hope things are going okay for you D: *hugs*
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November 6, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Hey;
The story is good so far - I'm reading chapter 3 at present. You said you had had the story beta'd and the grammar and usage checked. Unfortunately, I think your beta readers need beta readers - there are a few places where a sentence doesn't make sense, and there are some instances of incorrect usage, and typos.
The problem with these things is that they pull the reader out of the story; as you know, when you read you are in a state called the "willing suspension of disbelief" -- this state is that which allows a person to go into the story and be there; typos and grammar and sentence structure errors generally yank one right out of that state and detract from the enjoyability of the story.
Otherwise well done - my suggestion would be to really clean it up where it needs it, try to get someone who has a good grasp of the language, and you, yourself, can proof-read it as many times as you can. You'll catch quite a few of the errors, and those you don't catch, someone else should be able to catch for you.
It's not an editor's job to correct misspellings -- it's the writer's responsibility. A writer has to have a very good grasp of the language in order to write in that language. I have seen a few fanfics (not yours) that have had truly awful spelling and grammar, such that it was unreadable. The author merely prefaced the story with "I don't have a beta reader" - well, okay, but that doesn't excuse him from even the most rudimentary read-over. Or software with spellcheck, or even grammar check if one isn't sure of sentence structure.
Try to find someone good - if you can't, email me back and we'll see if I have some time to correct the errors I've seen. I am not referring to editing for content; merely for structure. Editing for content is a much bigger job.
Take care.
The story is good so far - I'm reading chapter 3 at present. You said you had had the story beta'd and the grammar and usage checked. Unfortunately, I think your beta readers need beta readers - there are a few places where a sentence doesn't make sense, and there are some instances of incorrect usage, and typos.
The problem with these things is that they pull the reader out of the story; as you know, when you read you are in a state called the "willing suspension of disbelief" -- this state is that which allows a person to go into the story and be there; typos and grammar and sentence structure errors generally yank one right out of that state and detract from the enjoyability of the story.
Otherwise well done - my suggestion would be to really clean it up where it needs it, try to get someone who has a good grasp of the language, and you, yourself, can proof-read it as many times as you can. You'll catch quite a few of the errors, and those you don't catch, someone else should be able to catch for you.
It's not an editor's job to correct misspellings -- it's the writer's responsibility. A writer has to have a very good grasp of the language in order to write in that language. I have seen a few fanfics (not yours) that have had truly awful spelling and grammar, such that it was unreadable. The author merely prefaced the story with "I don't have a beta reader" - well, okay, but that doesn't excuse him from even the most rudimentary read-over. Or software with spellcheck, or even grammar check if one isn't sure of sentence structure.
Try to find someone good - if you can't, email me back and we'll see if I have some time to correct the errors I've seen. I am not referring to editing for content; merely for structure. Editing for content is a much bigger job.
Take care.
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November 6, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Nex - you're wrong. The people who write fanfiction usually want to improve their writing skills. It's not a "complaint" to point out grammatical errors or mistakes of syntax and usage; it does the author a favor, improving his or her ability to write well.
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September 18, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Hi!!
Had read your story and I love it!! Don't ya dare to let me wait!!
Won't wait any loger for chapters, looking at these site only for your story! So go on!! ^-^
Had read your story and I love it!! Don't ya dare to let me wait!!
Won't wait any loger for chapters, looking at these site only for your story! So go on!! ^-^
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September 11, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Ah wow! This story is so awesome~! :3
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September 11, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Great chapter! Loved the end.
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September 10, 2007 at 12:00 AM
awww the fluff. that was cute. keep up the good work
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September 6, 2007 at 12:00 AM
holy shit. that was good i can't wait for the next update. ja ne.