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February 19, 2009 at 12:00 AM
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December 12, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I'm glad to see some yuri on Bleach!AFF - sadly most of the writers these days seem to be of the yaoi-loving variety. :(
As for the story, I have to admit I was thrown at first by the first person POV, but you seem to have pulled it off nicely. You do a good job with the details without getting too much into them as well. I do have to admit that the third chapter was a major curve ball, though. My sense of time for this story was a tad bit skewed - I'd have to double back to find exactly where that took place, but for some reason the images were a bit disjointed between Chapters 2 and 3. Also, from a plot standpoint, I wasn't entirely sure about Tatsuki's reasoning for including the infamous Bleach lesbian in the scene.
Beyond that, well done and well written! I do hope we can pry more Bleach yuri out of you - it is something the community could really stand to have more of. ;)
As for the story, I have to admit I was thrown at first by the first person POV, but you seem to have pulled it off nicely. You do a good job with the details without getting too much into them as well. I do have to admit that the third chapter was a major curve ball, though. My sense of time for this story was a tad bit skewed - I'd have to double back to find exactly where that took place, but for some reason the images were a bit disjointed between Chapters 2 and 3. Also, from a plot standpoint, I wasn't entirely sure about Tatsuki's reasoning for including the infamous Bleach lesbian in the scene.
Beyond that, well done and well written! I do hope we can pry more Bleach yuri out of you - it is something the community could really stand to have more of. ;)
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November 2, 2007 at 12:00 AM
That was the most greatest sexiest yuri story i've evr read your wonderful at writing and whoever hates it is just a hater.
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October 9, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Whoa, this is one of the best yuri stories I've ever read! No way anyone could hate this! (Unless they hate yuri)......
That's all I can say pretty much.......
That's all I can say pretty much.......
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October 5, 2007 at 12:00 AM
This is a very good story and I am looking forward to more of it in the future. Thank you!
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September 30, 2007 at 12:00 AM
There is no way in hell that anyone could possibly hate this story, you did a hellava good job and just keep up the good work.