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Hm-hm, very smutty indeed. ^^ Still, you might want to break it into more paragraphs so that it's easier to read, and check for grammar mistakes and grammar mistakes because I saw a few. ::shrugs:: Will you be adding on to this? Just curious. ^^ Oh, and one more thing: you might want to refrain from using the word "tits", simply because it just killed the mood for me and I don't quite see Ichigo saying that. << (Lol) Just a suggestion. :) (:

Oops, I typed "grammar" twice when I meant for one of them to be "puncuation". My bad! ^^ ::sweatdrop::

YIKES!! Please change the formatting of this story! No wonder you don't have any reviews, you're killing your readers eyes with this one continuous paragraph story!!!