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Reviews for Grimmjow's vengeance, Starrk's Folly

By : Killermuffins
  • From whitetiger on February 11, 2013
    Both stories were FREAKING AWESOME!!!!!!!!!! I laughed, I lusted, my nose bled, it was perfect.
    I never knew Stark had such a perverted side, but I really loved it. I agree it is always the quiet ones you need to watch out for. Hehehehe. And Grimm (swoon) I knew he'd be rough but damn! Dudes got skills.
    Thank you sooooo much for your wonderfully perverted nature. The world would do well if we had a few more people like you. :D
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  • From FicticiousDelicious on January 18, 2013
    Oh boy oh boy oh boy! You did write a sequel, this is gonna be sweet! You are very welcome, remember you earned that review with your awesome story!

    Grimmjow wandering around...naked...?! *takes a page from Ulquiorra's book and 'observes'* Ha! His pride still follows him despite his encounter in the last story; what an iron-will...or maybe just a thick head.
    Whelp! Aizen's plan was only designed to take care of one of their annoying habits. Not only did it not work on Grimmjow but now Starrk is asleep again! Man... "fuck head"... *snickers* and Grimmjow's kettle has started to boil over... He really doesn't take too well to being ignored, does he?
    Grimmjow realizing amidst enacting his plot that he's cold and going to get clothes, good detail! *snickers* "stark-ass-naked"...still just as funny as before! Using the same restraints and technique as Starrk had before, what a satisfying thought. Kitty see, kitty do! I BET Aizen would use BSDM gear for his sexual activities. It seems like his cup of tea considering that "rape" was an acceptable punishment for an underling in his mind.
    And so Grimmjow LITERALLY beats Starrk's ass! *gets bored of the whip and tosses it* Hmmm! What other goodies are there to play with...? Ah vengance, why dost thou taste so frickin' sweet? I must say, reading that 'thwack' was pretty satisfying. It made me grin (I think my face'll be stuck like that for a little while).
    I especially love reading Ulquiorra's parts, he's amusing yet erotic. Such a perfect character to exhibit voyeurism.
    About Grimmjow; in your story he's so blunt and vicious that instant gratification would fit his needs best, taking the time to inflict mental trauma probably wouldn't satisfy a person (or thing) like him. (now that you mention "not very good at math" I think that really drives the nail in, mental games are not his cup of tea - too much effort) Hard and fast are good enough! And he's how many inches?! *blink blink* Lordy...
    No wonder why Aizen likes Ulquiorra, Mr. Cuatro seems to have his share of kinks.
    So Starrk thinks "fuck" is a stupid word. Hrm...and then he asks for a repeat offense?! *stares skeptically* Alright, I'll bite, he seemed to have like it but...after being brutalized...I'm about as shocked as Grimmjow. I think Ulquiorra should have a part in this next bit if you continue this series.

    I think this was excellent! Wonderful and entertaining. Your word choice is still gritty and delicious! It's nice to read something that isn't written just like your typical Joe would type it out. You still have zest. As for the fact that writing yaoi fics is still practice for you: I'd like to be cute and cuddly and tell you that "practice makes perfect" but then I'd have to buy a lead hammer the size of Grimmy's dick and let you hit me with it. If we could actually achieve perfection do you think we'd still need phrases like that?! Course not. Now before I get going on a full blown rant here's my point. While you practice aim for the best, not the perfect (because perfection will drive you mad). 'The best' being the best you can write while still enjoying your writing. 'Perfect' is such an ambiguous word and 'the best' is...well...it's ambiguous too but more fulfilling. Besides, some imperfections turn into successes. (not sure if you share my same thoughts but eh, I'm just trying to keep your writer motor runnin'!)
    1. The detail is great. Don't worry about the length of the scenes as much as how they are written. The length of the scenes in your fic are just fine I'm just trying to give a bit of advice. I've read a lot of long crap and short crap (some of it is even stuff I've written) which people type out worrying too much about the word-count and less about the sentences they're creating. [Since I'm going to make a request for you to write a fic at the end] Remember this with any and everything you write: Quality exceeds quantity. (Maybe that's a smidgen cliche but it's useful.)
    2. Prey and Predator...me wanna see you use the word 'pounce'! *nibbles the closest person's leg* Really bad! (but only if you want to!)
    3. Actually I see Ulquiorra as a rather shy, receding type of fellow. He seemed fairly well portrayed.
    *tries to feed you copy paper for some reason* Feeding...feeding. I'm feeding the writer! :3

    *grins wildly* I HAVE A REQUEST! *clears throat* Could I have a FULL COURSE of some Grimmjow/Ichigo/Nnoitora/Renji action all rolled into one hot fic please? (Just makin' life tough requestin' a foursome but...hee hee! That's my request!)
    Keep writing! I'll keep reading!
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  • From ANON - qwerty on January 15, 2013
    I think your next one should have both Grimmjow and Stark having Ulquiorra... as punishment for his voyeurism! :P
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