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Reviews for Unforgettable

By : Ultimania
  • From bandgirlz on March 23, 2011
    I'm guessing the 5th Division Captain is Orihime. Although that would be way too fast (5 years??). And it couldn't be Masaki, because that just wouldn't make much sense. Or maybe Karin, if she died first? Nah. I have no idea!
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  • From bandgirlz on March 23, 2011
    I really like this idea, even though I'm not necessarily an IchiRuki fan. I'm excited to read the next chapter and see where it goes.

    At the same time, I feel the need to point out a few things that really threw me off. Mostly, it was the age thing. If Ichigo lost his powers 70 years ago, he was about 85 when he died. Inoue was about the same age as him, right? So it's just not possible that their kids were 20 and 25 unless they were adopted, or Ichigo was cheating at the age of 60 with a much younger woman. Since I doubt either of these outcomes were intended (because the kids apparently look like their parents), you might want to make these his grandkids, or make them at least 40.

    I also was a little thrown by the idea that Rukia gave the locket to Ichigo expecting him to still have it after he died. All I could think was the old adage, you can't take it with you. Unless this is because it's a "soul locket" or something, so it stays with the soul, in which case I would have her explain that so the readers aren't thinking Plot Hole, Plot Hole! Don't get me wrong, I actually like that it goes with him, and I think you've done a good job of making sense of why it does because of the choice and the memories of the heart thing, etc., but I just don't think it's reasonable for both of them to EXPECT that to happen from the outset.

    Anyway, with the exception of those things that jumped out at me, I think the story is great and I'm excited to see where it goes!
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