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Reviews for a slave fit for a king

By : fullbloodartist
  • From on September 30, 2008
    OoOoOoOoOo!! ^^ What's gonna happen!?! :0 WRITE MORE SOON PLEASE!! ^^
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  • From ANON - Anon on May 10, 2008
    it would be funny if the king was hichigo you know the hollow ichigo because it would be a reverse of there positions.
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  • From Staphanie on May 24, 2007
    more please.

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  • From on February 25, 2007
    I loved now Ichigo was kissed with out warning. I wonder who is the man that wants Ichigo? I canx't wait for another chapter.
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  • From Brightside on February 23, 2007
    I must say, the first chapter wasn't particularly good, but it does just seem to be getting worse. There are spelling errors and all sorts of terrible mistakes - plus the formatting is terrible. I'm sure if you cleaned this up, it would be alot better. Try getting a beta, perhaps?

    --R.A.Z.B
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  • From barara on February 23, 2007
    Haha! LET US SEE SMUT! or not or atleast sexual tension? lol Who's the king? WHO OWNS ICHIGO! haha post new chappie soon! XD
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  • From on February 23, 2007
    Aizen? ^^ I'm takin' a wild guess actually
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  • From on February 23, 2007
    Rawrrrrrrr!! Can't wait for the new clothes! Rawrrr, Rawrr, RAWRRR!! Zeer kinky leuk hoofdstukje! Ik hoop echt dat je weer snel update, want GAWD; ik vin dit verhaaltje zo cewlll! En ik ben zo curious naar Ichigo's new 'master' *wiggles eyebrows*
    Please update soon!
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  • From Vampircia on February 23, 2007
    I have time today so I decided to make a list of your mistakes (not all of them):
    notist - noticed
    an headach - a headache
    greeded - greeted
    reanji - Renji
    finaly - finally
    ‘’Baka, ya wanna spit ya own head or wa? Damn and here I thought the ol’ man had a good taste...damn idiot tryin’ to play ‘crack tha freaking melon’ - can somebody explain to me the meaning of this sentence?
    Ofcourse - of course
    sences - senses
    stomac - stomach
    emtyed - I assume you meant "emptied"
    and he fell the his knies - and he fell to his knees
    atleast - at least
    ichigo’s - Ichigo's
    struggeling - struggling
    mans - man's
    wich - which
    Befor - Before
    Atleast - At least

    My conclusion: you don't give a damn. You don't give a damn how this fanfic is written. Because I can understand many things. I can understand that some can have problems with spelling, but many of these mistakes you could correct just reading this fic to yourself. Not to mention there is a spellcheck in Firefox. If you don't use Firefox, maybe you should, because your spelling is hopeless. There are also other mistakes: commas hardly ever appear, some sentences don't start with a capital letter, and in some places there's no space. You have good idea for a plot, this fanfic could be really good, if you put more effort into it. It'm not flaming you. I want to help you. I hope you will think about what I wrote.
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  • From BrucesGirl on February 22, 2007
    This would be an excellent story with wonderful description and plot.

    Just one thing: Please work on your formatting. Maybe a Beta could help you?

    Good luck!
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  • From on February 08, 2007
    come come! Update further my dearest!
    Pretty please with a cherry on top... *pouts*
    Dit verhaaltje od Stalkerloverrrrr, pweaseeeeee
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  • From on January 28, 2007
    You made it longer! Yay!
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  • From evilchild on January 25, 2007
    It seemed a little too hurried for my tastes. That fact that it is an AU came as a surprise though. I suggest slowing down a bit in the next chapter and explain things better with more detail if possible. Why did you change Shuuhei's number to 96? And I can tell you are using single quotes instead of double quotes by how they look. You also need to work on your spelling.

    Overall, I thought the story has potential but it needs work. Ah, don't look at this review in a bad way. I'm just pointing things out that you may want to take into consideration. I like the idea of Ichigo as a slave so I really do want to read more.
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  • From on January 25, 2007
    (PS) But mannn, ben jij psychic ofzo? Ik heb in mijn verhaaltje ook al Ichigo's hele familie uitgemoord!
    Wat kan ik zeggen; Genius minds think the same, neh? XP
    ~Yaoi is in the air~
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  • From on January 25, 2007
    Yay! nu nog een awesome verhaaltje! Maar niet Stalker lover verwaarlozen, neh? want dies ook awesome
    Ik denk dat ik ut nog un x ga rereaden XP
    Update soon! ~Yaoi is in the air~
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