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Reviews for Prize of Victory 1.5

By : NovaAlexandria

From ANON - snowflower on November 20, 2015
i dont know who to feel sorry for lol.szay or pineapple XD
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From ANON - gollumsfriend on November 12, 2015
Uh, for the record....my review I just posted...autocorrect changed Yammy to Yummy without me noticing. I just want to clear up any misconceptions that I think Yammy is yummy. No. I do not. So gross. LOL

Ok, everything is spelled correctly so let's see what happens...
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From ANON - gollumsfriend on November 12, 2015
Found this new 1.5 version a couple days ago (you had the first five chapters posted) and was thrilled to have new material from the PoV universe to read! Loved the detailed extra-long first chapter the most, even after reading Grimmjow's chapter tonight.

After you post intro's for Szayel and Yummy, I can't wait to see where you go from there. It just occurred to me that maybe we'll see things that happened during the 5 year time skip early on in PoV? Ooooh the possibilities! Thank you for continuing to write for this story, and doing such a great job!
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From Karmira on November 07, 2015
Unfortunately, this is only a short review because I can't seem to figure out how personal messages works on this site. I just found this collection of snippets and read the first chapter in its entirety, and I am thrilled you came back to this universe. Your beginning with Stark made me adore him even more. He offered Juushiro every option, even death to escape Aizen. That is saying something about his honor, and I love how even if he has been alone that the grief/love Nanao felt for Shunsui is palpable enough that he knows when to leave. You did an amazing job exploring all the details that came with Juushiro choosing to live. I love his line. "I don't need a day. I can't protect anyone dead." Such a noble creature, Juushiro!

I could only skim the other chapters tonight, but I loved the comparison between Rangiku and Neliel with Nnoitra and your explanation of Yumichika's adapting to his horrendous situation.

Keep it up. I will review later.

I am finally on this site because I am posting a fan fiction version of a Bleach RP I am in. Your Prize of Victory was a part of shaping the beautiful, crazy monster it's become. If you're curious, look up Bleach Unrated or look me up here. The name of the fan fiction is Masquerade Between Hell and Justice. It will be VERY long. Thank you for inspiring us!

http://bleach.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600013032&chapter=1
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From ANON - Kain on November 04, 2015
*Sets up camp outside of Bunker*

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While I should have known what too expect given that it was about Nnoitora and his first claiming of Rangiku, the scenes of all the carnage going on with the other soon to be killed or enslaved shinigami and seeing her try so hard to fight and escape even in her condition and knowing she is going to fail killed me.

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-Hah at the thought of Nnoitora actually thinking he could claim Kenpachi. Even if he somehow succeeded he would have had to grow eyes in the back of his head and been on guard 24/7. Claiming a powerful LT is one thing, but Kenpachi is on a whole other level.

-Well Tesra was certainly more brutal than I thought he would be. Gonna go out on a limb and assume that this is something Tatsuki never talks too him about as too not pop her little bubble.

So next up is Karin and Grimmjow. And given that Grimm has no taste for rape or pointless cruelty and we know that he didn't lay a hand on either of the girls and simply kept them as bait I'm gonna assume the angst will be a 'little' less in that one.

So how many chapters are you shooting for?

-waits patiently for next chapter-

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From ANON - Raw on October 28, 2015
I am so glad to see you writing for this universe again! I love it so much and refer it to anyone who likes this sort of reading - bleach fan or no. They can just learn the characters from you as far as I'm concerned.
I'm wiggling in my seat for more Nnoitra! I love how you do him and just didn't get enough in POV. Every scrap I get makes me happy. :D
Luvs and well-wishes.
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From ANON - snowecat on October 21, 2015
I've never been much of a reviewer. I have enjoyed your writing a great deal. I hope you never get discouraged and keep writing.
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From ANON - Kain on October 21, 2015
Well this is a harribel chapter.....so next to Starrk, the least shitty of the arrancar I suppose. At least she felt regret at having not been able to keep Rangiku out of Nnoitora's grasp. Speaking of which, I just know that chapter is gonna anger me. Given how recent the battles have been, curious as too why the Captains and LT's are so banged up yet the arrancar seem to be fresh as daisy's? I suppose it makes sense that Harribel would have preferred Lisa seeing as how the woman had a bit of hollow in her and was reasonably powerful

"His anger inevitably gave way to despair as he realized just how hopeless the situation was and how few options lay before him." OWW

-Feel for Toshiro realizing that he wouldn't have gotten very far if he had tried to save her in his current state.

-And damn Aizen's broken ass shikai, I mean that's just cruel to make it seem all the exits are blocked off for the soon to be attacked shinigami. At least Harribel had the mercy to try and make sure Toshiro was shielded from what she knew was going to happen. Doesn't make her helping cause the current situation any better but at least she tried.

"it wasn�t as if her participation was directly linked to the consequences of Aizen�s Victory."

Whatever makes her feel better about herself I suppose.

�How many of my Division are dead?�

-You are killing me with these lines. Can't imagine how hard it must be for someone in his position too feel so powerless and being unable to do anything for the men and women in his squad.

-Claiming or at least one sided claims still seems like a pretty scary thing. I mean nothing can be hidden from the one who holds the claim, you have no control over your own bodily functions and are essentially a living, breathing marionette doll.

-1 taboo eh? Everyone needs standards I suppose.

-Interesting how you have some of the Arrancar remembering there lives when they were still human.

I love these chapters, and I dread these chapters. I love your writing style and the plot.......but the PAIN, so much soul crushing pain.

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From ANON - bright on October 16, 2015
Good to see you back!
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From ANON - Penryck on October 15, 2015
Where...where do I even begin...

Nova. Dear sweet cruel overlord Nova. That is the hardest thing I have ever read. And I've read some wicked shit in my time. I am going to be fucked up about this for a long time. But I have to thrive on POV for a long time as my #1 weekly thing since SU is on hiatus till 2016. No matter how you hurt me, it seems I am reliant on you to the full extent. I also rely much on reviews Kain leaves. Damn you both and damn BlackFox for this series that won't let me go. Just as SU announces a hiatus you come back with this mess. I'm in hell with no intentions of leaving. Damn you all so hard. But it ain't a party without Darkstar too...

Anyway, you kill me. So hard. Repeatedly. Yumichika is a literal Divine angel sent from the frickin gods I swear to Glaux. He always looks out for those who are in deep shit and I owe him greatly for it. Withstanding this madness...I am in awe. That beautiful peacock harpy bastard deserves a medal and sainthood. Now I want to know how he worked his devil magic and fixed things between Soifon and Ggio. I'd give anything for that tale to be told.

Speaking of the untold...the situation with Nirgge. Thank you for putting that together bed. It was eating at me for so long. But as far as that whole six man Fraccion band goes, I would also give my life to flash back to the times when they chose to protect Ggio. Because by not telling him what was up, Ggio never learned to be decent. Good intentions were there but it seems they fucked up by never telling him the truth. I miss them.

Soifon though? That there is my child. She means so much to me. Remembering that she dies in the end kills every bit of my heart. You are the most merciless god I have ever known. And trust me, I've known some malicious gods in my time. I never wanted to read a rape scene of my favorite pairing yet here it is. I will never be the same. You have destroyed part of my soul as if with a Quincy arrow. It will never grow back. Yet I continue to read as if I am under hypnosis and can't look away. Months later even and here I am. You are crafty and I'm shocked. But I needed this so bad. I need every tale of Soifon during this set of 15 years that you want to weave for us. Please Nova. I'm begging on my knees. It is all I have.

A final note, Ggio. That feline bastard. I would love to wring his neck right now and forever. But it is hard to stay mad because I KNOW he is better than this. Damn you! Damn your epic storytelling skills! He is so much, both good and bad, and I love him to bits. This display is appalling yet I still call him like a son to me. What have you done. What atrocities have you wrought? You monster. I love every agonizing second.

Fun fact: because of the first fic in the series, I gained so much love and respect for Findorr because he was the main victim at first. Every little detail of this pain train fic gets to me. Amazing. I'm floored.
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From ANON - Kain on October 14, 2015
Hope your feeling better soon.

And here we come to the second verse in this song of tragedy and heartbreak. I mean, I KNOW whats coming, I KNOW that it is going to kill me and make me wish death upon fictional characters and yet here I am, reading and raging/crying. Your writing is just that damn good that it keeps pulling me back despite what it does too my soul.

-Yumi ya should have listened too those instincts and gotten the hell out of dodge or at least made as good a run for it as ya could. If only ya knew what was coming.

-Gotta keep reminding myself that this is 'still loyal to a monster' pre-torture Ggio......and try not too wish too much death upon him.

-Damn Soi must have gotten really wrecked if a fraccion is able to subdue her with ease, broken arm or not. Losing to Barragan is one thing but the fact that Ggio and the other fraccion seem to have not suffered any damage is a little out there. Although I am typing this out in a separate tab as I read so maybe I am getting ahead of myself.

-Poor Yumi, doing what he can too survive, and hopefully keep barragans attention on him alone no matter how humiliating it is. At least there was no one left in the hall to witness what was done to him besides Soifon. Small comfort.

-Well damn, those old skills of Yumi's are certainly coming in handy, playing to Barragan's vanity and trying to make things as easy for himself as he can.

-Ah so Ggio was the one who found the estate......and helped slaughter most of it's occupants...including the ones who tried to flee...of..his own will......*takes a deep breathe*....OKAY moving on. And holy god poor Yumi being forced to help kill innocent people due to the claim.

-On the bright side of things, we know from later chapters in part 2 of pov that Nirgge gets killed by kukaku while looking for a pet, so there's that at least.

-......okay 'that scene' made me wish once again that you had killed off Ggio instead of soi in part 2. Regardless of what he goes through in future events, this is an eternal black stain on him. AND he personally took her to the kennels that would be her home for the next 15 some odd years.

-the final lines of this chapter kill me because we the readers know that Soi and Yumi are in for a loooong imprisonment and that Soi will eventually be stripped of her voice and that she will die not long after getting revenge on Barragan.

-You just loooooove torturing some of these characters. If the soi/yumi chapter was this painful then I am dreading when you get to Yammy's chapter.

-waits patiently for the next chapter-

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From ANON - Penryck on October 06, 2015
Okay thinking about what Kain said regarding next chapter... I feel like this is going to be the most painful ride of my disgusting life. Because it was just the beginning. With all the malice and bitterness intact. That, and this is pre-disability. That's going to take so much getting used to. But I'm already prepared to yell at Ggio. So bring it on.

Most curious as to the deal with the fact that both Ggio AND Nirgge survived that entire war. Would like to see the entire thing there, please and thank. It has been eating at me for months.
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From ANON - Kain on October 06, 2015
Welcome back!!

Ah something to fill in the gaps from the main story,I am sure this won't hurt my soul*weeps in the distance*

but seriously I love that you are continuing this.

alright lets do this

-So were starting out with Stark eh? Well at least stark owns the fact that shit is about to get 'unpleasent' all though that's the understatement of the century. Since this is the early stage of their interaction and she is still technically an antagonist, Lilinette's attitude is not a surprise.

-I keep forgetting Aizen's shikai lol, figures that's the reason more of the shinigami didn't get away or were caught off guard by the invading Hollows.

"If you are concerned about your subordinates, abandon any idea of trying to help them. They will survive or fall depending upon their strength."

Damn, can't imagine what that must feel like to be told that you can't help those under your command, especiially with what is happening to them.

-Okay in all honesty, for the Captains, is being told that it's either 'rape or die' really a choice? On one hand if they choose death, they can escape the hell there world has become but on the other hand it would deprive their subordinates and loved ones of what little protection and comfort they could give. It's alose/lose situation in that sense. Asking it just feels like a poor attempt by the perpetrator to give the illusion of choice when their really isn't one, especially for people like Ukitake who adore those under their command and still have people that matter too them too look out for.

-Gonna suck when Ukitake finds out that his two 3rd seats have been killed....Unless I really missed something in the main POV story line.

-Well at least his fist time wasn't painful. Mortifying and humilating but not painful.

*Stay tuned for chapter 2, where we will see Barragan, Yumichika, Ggio and Soi Fon.*

Okay despite how much I loathe Barragan and am dreading the beginnings of his enslavement of Soi and Yumi I am curious how he manages to get her to submit to a claim by Ggio. Given her pride and mentality as the leader of the stealth forces I wonder how he manages to prevent her from making a run for it, Aizen's shikai messing with her senses aside.

Again, happy that yo will be writing snippets filling in the blanks. I was always so curious about these things.

-waits patiently for the next chapter-
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