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Reviews for Prize of Victory 2

By : NovaAlexandria

From Kain on December 03, 2014
To Darkstar,

My response to a few of your comments will have too wait as I got called back into work to handle a project.

Responses will be in at some point tomorrow though k.
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From ANON - whiteShadow on December 03, 2014
ahhhh...that was mind splitting.Planning and all that stuff -politics,is not my forte.But i think you made it an easy way to understand.I think.^_^
Now,humor between Grimm and strawberry is cool,refreshing in all those serious planning that's happening in that room. Orihime and Ullquirra help too.^_^ Its sweet.
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From SeresNorth on December 03, 2014
@Kain:It seems lately we've more or less been in agreement on how things have been playing out. I expected Marenoshin to attack Sementall, but I thought that Nova did a good job of his continued presence- by basically turning him into Unohana's Fraccion, since he has a power that now makes him valuable and gives a practical reason to keep him around, thanks to his "Fascination" ability.

As for retaliation by the Shinigami... The dialogue seems to imply that she rank-and-fire Shinigami will answerable to the Espada in the same way that the Arrancar will be answerable to the elite Gotei Captains (sort of 'quid pro qua'). And I personally don't get the feeling, at lease from the dialogue, that Ichigo is really interested in staying around to handle the long-term management of the Seireitei. In all likelihood, Unohana will probably be the next Supreme Commander of the Shinigami. After her, there's Ukitake and Hitsugaya and Nanao. While the Arrancar have Stark, Lilinette, Halibell, Ulquiorra and Szayel to represent their interests in disputes.

You mentioned the possibility of a holding center... I could be wrong, but I think the only place capable of containing Hollows is the Twelfth Division. I can't remember where I read that, or if it's even cannon, though...

On a different note, I think Yumichika and Orihime should be declared Saints. Do you have any nominations for Sainthood?
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From SeresNorth on December 03, 2014
@Chapter 102: Not as much to say this time... First, I'm glad that the issue of Szayel's mask was finally addressed, since they don't need him reverting in the absence of Karin's claim. Though I'm still very curious about what was happening with Vindula's hands. I liked the idea that they're going to work on a way to try and make mutual claims between the Arrancar and Shinigami who want that.

Aw, Stark is so adorable, thinking about Nanao and their possible cub, about his reluctance in breaking his claim over her and Jushiro. And then, Orihime shows up and promptly clomps Karins in her "Healing Hug: it heals all your injuries with the power of Feels". Then, she agrees to have her claim broken on the condition that it be recast later, and saunters over to Ulquiorra to cuddle up to him. I'm sorry, but only Hime could be so cute and adorably sweet at any given time, especially when Ulqui is trying to be all serious an stoic in front of everyone... The fearsome mighty Cautro Espada, standing there, with his perky smiling redheaded mate smiling happily and snuggled up against him. Lol!

I did smirk at the fact that Karin wants to basically implement joint-custody parenting as a way to handle some of the cases. Plus, it was pretty cool when Unohana suggested that they start issuing maternity leave so the Arrancar can 'den up' with their mates. And in-lue of how helpful Sungsun has been around the Fourth, she wants to formally hire her on. I'm still looking forward to seeing Ajuga and Diaemus, now that the rebellion is over.

I'm glad that this chapter answered so many lingering questions I've had on my mind. Another great chapter, I can't wait to see what happens next.

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From Kain on December 03, 2014
Hmm it's a little late where I am and I have work in the morning so this review will be broken up into a few parts that will come when I have time and have gathered my thoughts on certain things about this chapter. Forgive me if it jumps around a bit at times.

-It's awesome that the Shinigami are now "free" and there is a fairly iron clad system to hopefully protect them but it is also bittersweet since those who were abused have in a sense been denied there vengeance while there former jailers are sent back to their home. Understandable since the realms are still out of whack but that anger is going to fester with no other outlet but the arrancar who were allowed to stay. The Captains can't be everywhere. I am also concerned for the shinigami's who defended there claimers since that could put a target on there back by people who view them as traitors. Again I say there will be a great need for some therapy. Doesn't the SS still have special prisons they could just use to punish the worst of the Arrancar? Since I figure there will still be some fall out to come on this decision and shinigami/arrancar issues, I will leave things on this subject here unless something comes to mind.......OR 'Darkstar' gives me some good debating material lol.

-I know she did not have a part in this chap but my god I am so dreading the moment Yuro finds out about what happened to her little bee. And this is a question I had meant to place in a review for the previous chapter but why are Tatsuki and Tesra still refered to as the adoptive parents for Soi and Ggio's kid? I mean he is free now so wouldnt full parental rights return to him? Liked

-Points too Ichigo for asking the good questions about why someone who might not have had a choice in the matter be saddled with parenthood or have to share rights with a being they would probably rather see gone. I have grown to love her but for someoen who seemed so adverse to the thought of having Aizen's child and ecstatic that it was not the case you would think Karin would have a little more sympathy for people who are not so lucky.

-Damn I know that not every thing can make the final cut but I would have loved to see some of these background talks between characters that keep getting mentioned and will there be any interaction between Ulq and Ichigo given that last time they spoke/fought/tried to equalize the other? And while I don't ship them in this fic I was really hoping for a Orihime and Ichigo reunion.

-Ulq has honestly faded from this story in the past like dozen or more chapters and is no longer really central that I was a little floored by his developement, a SMILE and giving Orihime the choice of having the claim placed back on essentially in a way starting things the right way as they shouyld have been the first time.

-Karin is running on fumes at this point, anyone else would have passed out a long time ago. Say or think what you will of her but the girl is made of some seriously tough shit and brings pride to her kurosaki namesake. Less than 24 hours after getting brutally raped and with no sleep and low reiatsu she is still going.

Excellent chapter.

-waits patiently for the next chapter-

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From ANON - Shelygirl on November 29, 2014
100- Grimm/Karen situation is what interests me the most, personally. The Unohana perspective was interesting. Thanks for the update.
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From ANON - Penryck on November 27, 2014
Damn Nova, kudos for this chapter for sure.

My first concern is Yoruichi. Not only does she still have to find out but it has to be from Ggio. Poor, poor Ggio who has lost so much. This is going to be tough for them both. He doesn't even have Yumichika for emotional support in this, like he usually would. I think it might be best to hold off on telling her right away. Ask her to mind Avispona while he goes to retrieve the body. Everyone will be informed at the same time. This is gonna hurt like fuck.

SO SO SO GLAD to finally get the confrontation with Sementall. Was waiting for that for so long and you didn't disappoint. Marenoshin ain't fuckin around with that horse's ass. Haha.

Iemura, buddy. Not the time for that. I love ya dearly but please Do Not right now. I'm sure Sun-Sun would have been w little upset with him if she was there to hear it.

I'm also not looking forward to Orihime hearing about what happened to Soifon. This is what she wanted to be on the front lines to prevent. Sadly, you can't save em all.
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From HollowedRose on November 27, 2014
Is it strange that I got mad when Starrk called Jushiro his pet? I think that's the last time I felt the need to punch him. That aside, wonderful chapter, as always. I kind of liked how Starrk managed to calm the agitated Arrancars. While I agree that many of them were scumbags deserving of death, I think some were nice too, so it wouldn't have been fair to kill them all.
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From MaliceBlackPaw on November 27, 2014
I can just imagine Yoruichi's massive heartbreak once she learns her little Bee is dead :C
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From Kain on November 26, 2014
Hmm curious to see how the council functions and what will happen after sem's power starts to fade. Good too see that omeada got to thrash sem all the same and quite surprised about the sudden revelations about the circumstances to his daughters death and what his other son was getting up too. Felt kind of out of left field though but that's more to the fact that mareyo has had only a few scenes throughout the story. Poor Gin, guy has gone through hell and more than atoned for his "betrayal" and yet still might not get a happy ending. Stoked to see how these interviews go and was Starrk referring to Ukitake as his pet more for the sake of the Arrancar to keep them none the wiser? Stoke to see who passes there one on one interviews and who gets the boot.....grumblegrumbleexecutionwouldhavebeencooltoothoughgrumblegrumble.

Wonder what new laws are going to be passed.

huh......short review this time eh? Then again I am currently preparing for thanksgiving.

I wish both you and black fox a happy Thanksgiving Nova.

-Waits patiently for the next chapter-
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From SeresNorth on November 26, 2014
@Chapter 101: Wow, you packed a hell a lot of storytelling in this chapter! What can I say, other than that I really enjoyed this. As to the actual events of the chapter... Well, I was glad to a see a number of issues finally getting addressed, now that the other shoe has dropped, as it were.

I'm not really surprised that Marenoshin tried to beat Sementall to an inch of his life. Rather, it was the flood of revelations that followed in the wake of Mareyo's intervention that threw me. First, I never really got the impression (from the characters' dialogue) that Sementall massacred the family, just that he took over the household. Then next it's revealed that the other brother (I can't recall his name) was a pedophile- and presumably, that Sementall killed him out of disgust (especially when considering Mareyo's second, even more sinister implication).

I smiled when Sementall commented that he's basically now Unohana's Fraccion. And then... Oh Franque, how I've miss you. I knew it was just a matter of time until Franque, Michiko, and Watanabe (aka, the "Loydth Family") showed up, and in just the way I'd expect them to, lol. And of course, he just struts out with a smile- and even winks at Unohana! I liked the way Unohana had Sementall use his powers to relax the Arrancar. Plus, it was cool to see that the people in attendance (for the Espada's bid announcement) could still had a sense of humor.

It was also pretty funny when Iemura asked Renji if they should restart the Shinigami Men's Association. Poor Renji just groans at the idea, while Rukia lays there and laughs at the suggestion. And,sigh, poor Ggio-kitty...

We got our next bit of information from Ulquiorra, when he explains that no single person will be in charge- rather, there'll be a council comprised of the remaining Captains and Espada. And, there will be a set of laws in place, somewhat as I predicted. Well, this chapter certainly answered a fair amount of my questions. Though I hope that Yumichika can get his face fixed- since it's the least he deserves after everything he's done for others.
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From ANON - Lilibet on November 26, 2014
Thank you so much for the update. I thoroughly enjoyed the chapter. Every Wednesday I look forward to reading a new chapter. Thank you for updating before the holiday. Have a Happy Thanksgiving!
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From ANON - Aviary on November 24, 2014
Aftershock

Another great chapter! Great work Nova and Blackfox. I am curious though and I hope Gin being secretive right there and then leaving doesn't mean that he's leaving for good! I hope he's not because I bet Ran would love to see him! Keep up the great works hope you both are doin well!
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From ANON - Anon on November 23, 2014
I'm hoping the survivors are all able to be healed, inc. Byakuya's voice. I'd like to see the rebirth of those who lost (or imprisonment in hades in the case of Aisen, Yammy, & Baragan). The last act/thoughts could be used to earn another chance at life such as in the case of Nnoitra. I'd still see Rangeku being a 'guardian angel' sort in regard to reincarnated Nnoitra or Ggio in the case of SoiFon; both understanding they won't be seen or remembered in the way they were. It would be great to see the Big Bad Three on trial at the entry of hades and seeing the others getting another chance because of their recently changed views and the love/caring for others that they learned.
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From SeresNorth on November 20, 2014
@Chapter 100 (Continued): This something of an addendum to the review I posted. I just want to reiterate what an amazing chapter this was. The closing scene was fucking poetry, beautiful! It had everything, it was tragic, yet also hopeful, and I loved how it paralleled the whole situation.

We have Toshiro, as the sort of everyman character in the scene, and he's on the verge of breaking down from the massive burden he's been carrying for the last decade and a half. At first, the destruction of the tree represents everything they've lost. But then, it becomes a symbol of hope and the future when Gin suggests he plant something new in its place, and suddenly it's about possibilities and something better. And when I pictured the whole exchange between between Toshiro and Gin now, it's like a scene right out of a Robert Altman film... fucking amazing.

And then, Gin leaves in the best way possible. He gives Toshiro the seed of the idea, which leads to that amazing coda, and disappears... Goddammit, that was such a poignant moment, and he goes out in style. Just perfect, Nova, perfect.
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