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By : NovaAlexandria

From HollowedRose on January 23, 2014
Great chapter! I loved reading more about Ulquiorra's feelings and thoughts. To answer your question, the change in Grimmjow and Ulquiorra was gradual ( completely believable ). You did a great job at writing these two.

I can't wait for the next chapter when Diaemus wakes up... that should be interesting.
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From ANON - gollumsfriend on January 22, 2014
Loved the update, thank you!

Absolutely, I feel Grimmjow and Ulquiorra have changed considerably since the start of POV1. Was the change gradual? Yes. That's what makes it more believable and such a good story. If the changes in each of them had NOT been gradual, I would have had the reaction that you mentioned and wouldn't care for the story half as much as I do.

Thanks again for the update, keep up the great work!
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From Kain on January 22, 2014
Hopefully nothing is wrong, get well soon.

Chapter 48:

Lovely chapter and for once I don't have a whole lot to say in terms of a review, I think I burned myself out with that triple update review I gave lol. Glad to see the kid got home and despite my opinion of Ulq, it was heartwarming to see him so affected by his son's return. Will be interesting to see how the talk with Aizen goes.

This weeks Question: Well you know my opinion on Ulq, so I will primarily talk about Grimmow for this weeks question. From my perspective when it comes to Grimmjow, it's less to do with "changing" and more to do with him just showing what has always been there. Let me explain, the Grimmjow of old, even at his worst was at most a battle loving thug, but he was never a monster. He only went after a foe who could defend themselves and put up a reasonably decent fight and lived for battle but wasn't anywhere near as sadistic as his fellow hollows. His transition in this story feels very believable since even in canon he was never really evil guy,and here he has just been softened so too speak from having a family around him. Karin helped his attitude out a lot and she and Ajuga make him a better man. He is still the same person he has always been but his priorities have changed.

Now Ulq....I will admit over time he has noticeably changed in a few ways and has started to show more emotion and it is obvious that he cares deeply for his mate and son, but beyond that he is still a bit of a dick to most people lol. He still see's the bulk of the Shinigami(who he helped fuck over btw)as fodder and if Unohana wasn't Aizen's "wife" he probably would not show her even a tiny bit of the respect he does now. I am a bit biased when it comes to him so forgive me if I am overly harsh with my assessment over him but his were the more subtle changes as overtime he afforded Orihime(bless her ever forgiving soul)more freedom and and regretted how he treated her and started to lose his fanatical faith in Sosuke "douchenozzle" Aizen.

But I have a question of my own.........could you imagine how frighting Orihime would be if she had some killer intent and could actually hold a grudge? With her abilities bleach would be over soooo quick. Pity Kubo doesn't utilize her more.

And holy shit the Emperor is one scary mofo, Aizen gained his god complex over time, Yhwach was essentially born with his. I would love to see those two throw down.

Again, I hope you get well soon.

-waits patiently for next chapter-
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From ANON - Darkstar on January 17, 2014
@Chapter 47: In response...

I'm glad to see from all the comments that I wasn't the only one thinking this. I was almost afraid to admit that I've been shipping these two for a while since I began reading PoV2. For me, there's a very 'fire and ice' dynamic between them.

I love the complexity of all the different relationships running throughout this series, and uniting the Cifer and Jaegerjacquez bloodlines would make for a powerful clan that NO ONE would mess with. I mean, Grim & Karin are already allied with the Stark-Ukitake household, and Ulqui & Hime are linked (by way of Orihime's friendship with Tatsuki & Ran) with Nnoitra's pack, not to mention that Szayel and Tia's families are aligned with Karin's family through their mutual interests. So the more the merrier, I say!
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From HollowedRose on January 16, 2014
... and now I'm totally shipping Diaemus/Ajuga. xD
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From MudbloodMalfoy on January 16, 2014
I've had the thought a few times that, as antagonistic as Ajuga and Diaemus are, they'd make a cute couple. Not sure if that's where you'll take them - and I'm not asking, promise - but it would be pretty neat. Haha.

Anyways, loved getting the glimpse at the two of them. Can't wait for the next chapter! :)
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From ANON - Darkstar on January 16, 2014
@Chapter 47: Damn, that was an awesome chapter! I really appreciate that you found the time to update, given how busy you've been. I loved the triple chapter updater before this. I'm so happy for Toshiro and Halibell, I couldn't help but want to send them my congratulations- along with a bottle of champagne! I was so relieved that you and Blackfox didn't bother with the typical Hollywood movie gimmick of blowing the misunderstanding out of proportions, and instead had them both acting like grownups- ie, talking it over.

As for the latest chapter... I have to say that I really enjoyed the interplay between Ajuga and Diaemus, the combination of the chemistry and the friction between them was quite interesting. AND, am I wrong, but was there just the faintest hint of sexual tension between them? I'm sorry, but I couldn't help but get that vibe, especially given how intimate the nature of him feeding on her was. And while it's not overt, circumstances have really forced the two of them to get closer in a short period of time. It was interesting that Diaemus' reaction to her blood/reiatsu was so different from what we've seen so far.

And come on, I can't help but love the idea of how annoyed Grim and Ulqui be by a relationship between their kids. It's funnier when I think that Karin and Orihime would probably be relieved, in spite of the fathers. Seriously, comedy gold!

I loved how dedicated Diaemus was in the last scene, pushing himself to limit- he's such a dutiful and caring son, the Cifers should be proud of their boy!

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From MudbloodMalfoy on January 13, 2014
Awesome chapter, as always. Although, in the first Prisoner's Dilemma chapter, I got confused on when Szayel told Harribel about Karin's Royal lineage. I didn't see it in the dialogue and may have missed in another part, but it took me a minute in the next chapter to understand how she knew about it.

Can't wait for the next chapter! :)

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From ANON - HardlyFatal on January 11, 2014
Very intriguing plot development, I'm so happy to see we're finally edging toward the inevitable mutiny! Thanks for a compelling story. I share your frustration in working hard to put out a quality story and getting little feedback when others are crapping out garbage and drowning in reviews. Keep plugging away! Your hard work is appreciated!
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From ANON - leanne on January 09, 2014
That was AWSOME!!! X3 very good chapter.
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From ANON - gollumsfriend on January 09, 2014
Was thrilled to see the triple-chapter update I got to read when I checked in tonight! Really looking forward to seeing the next update with Ajuga and Diaemus as well ~ thanks for all your hard work!
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From ANON - Anon on January 08, 2014
Sorry I haven't reviewed recently. Holidays & company were taking my time up.
Love what you are doing in the story. Glad things are looking up for Soi-Fon. Hope Barragan, Yammy, and Aizen end up in the place Satan sends souls that he wants to punish to.

Boring cliches?
All females who are given more than a passing glance are either:

1. A brainless bimbo
2. A trampy slut on the prowl or available to all
Or 3. Gay & on the prowl

Can't a normal female friend be in the fic who isn't riding or being ridden by one or more other characters in the fic?
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From ANON - yukihana hitsugaya on January 08, 2014
great chapters!
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From Kain on January 08, 2014
One tab open to write review, another open to read chapters.

Chapter 44:

Before I begin.

�I�ve turned off the recording equipment and the cameras, and no one will bother us while I prove to you that we who were once Vasto Lordes might have made a bad bargain in our choice of leaders� not that Aizen truly gave us many alternatives when he recruited us.�

I though the top 4 Espada were the only confirmed Vasto Lordes and considering Grimmjow was an Adjuchas prior to becoming an Arrancar it would be odd that he is higher ranked than Szayel if that were the case.

True review-

Well, looks like another has saddled up with the rebelion but it amuses me to no end that the Arrancar are constantly surprised by the levels of Aizen's depravity. I mean, here are beings who are as far from saints as you can get and yet it boggles them that he can be that evil? This is a man who already showed how little loyalty he has when he betrayed his OWN people, murdered those who adored and respected him, wiped out an entire city of millions(which they helped him do, ahem) and sold the SS to the hollows. At least when he was still a captain he maintained the illusion of a benevolent and loved by all man.........the Arrancar saw his real persona from the get go. And yet they are constantly floored when he pulls shit like he has been lol. Some of them have obviously been around him for about a century and yet NOW they start to see the cracks?

Sweet Jesus, when members of a race that enforces survival of the fittest and dabbles in rape and pillaging and devours human souls thinks you're too evil.........you are REALLY fucking evil. Glad at least that Harribel pointed out that even if they all rushed him, he could wipe the floor with them. I have said it before, but hate and fear him all you like.......the man was a walking cheat code even before his ascension. The Espada killing off the other captains sure as shit didn't give them any favors and now comes to bite them in the ass since that is less manpower.

Impressed to see Szayel still has the stones to put that kind of base in his voice when talking to someone far more powerful than him.

happy to see it's going to be a triple update and will post all reviews in this one setting

now I am on to the next chapter!

Chapter 45-

Harribel steadily continues to rise in the list of likable characters for me. Happy too see that she addressed the Elephant in the room of the fact that even if they succeed in putting down Aizen, they will have A LOT of bitter and vengeful shinigami to deal with. And now matter how much she may refer to him as a mere 'pet', she obviously loves Toshiro and his reaction was understandable but it was a breath of fresh air to see them have a fight. Now Toshiro knows he is going to be a daddy and I could imagine that is a lot to take in and given how taxed he is due to his workload, his patience would obviously be very thin.

At first I was confused at the start of the chapter when Harribel mentioned Nel since i could have sworn she wasn't told that yet and then I got down to the passage with the flashback and it all became clear. It might be best if she does stay out of the fight since Hiyori would probably have her sights on her given that unless you changed the fight lineup, that Harribel killed Lisa in their fight and the two were close. Hopefully Yuroichi and Hachi can curb the worst of Hiyori's hate(although I will admit that she is my spirit animal in this fic lol) towards their potential Espada allies. Glad to see she has already decided that no matter what happens, that the old fuck Barragan needs to die.

Found this very interesting:

�I guess she�s going by her Master�s last name now, Lloydght, but Michiko informed me that she�s due in about six months or so and asked to be transferred to the Kido Corps. Then she got a bout of �afternoon� sickness in the middle of gushing about how happy she was, how much she loved her �mate� and tossed her cookies in my wastepaper basket. I�m beginning to pity my Fukutaichou, since I had to leave him with clean-up duty while I oversaw my Sixth and Eighth Seat and the accounting reports.�

'how much she loved her �mate�'
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'Love' eh?

I take it she was the woman shown last chapter exiting the building and sucking face with her 'master'?

......*stares directly into the authors soul*.......

Love...........

Don't you go poking holes in my hatedom of a certain literally 'bone headed' race lol. For shame....I survive off of my hate while other mortal beings need things like "Groceries" or whatever the fools call it nowadays. I have been committed since Part 1 of this epic story to despising the majority of the Arrancar. There are like a total of 4 or 5 that I hope survive and it only got to that number after a certain level of genuine repentance and character development was met. If you chip away at my hate......then what am I damn it!!!??!?
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Now don't get me wrong......I love that you have started to show even in small cameos, these lesser characters relationships and I LOVE that some of the claimed have found happiness and to the woman who is apparently stoked about her pregnancy, all the kudos to her, I just don't like it when it is happiness brought out of simply giving in and surrendering your pride to avoid pain. Absence of choice is a big pet peeve of mine and those that are claimed don't really have the luxury of doing what they want since the claim would take the option out of their hands so they have no other choice but to submit.

Although I take it this means that not all of the claimed relationships started out as rape? I mean there has to be more Arrancar like Harribel and her girls even amongst the more violent males of their species. Take Grimmjow for example, in the beginning of this story he was still his old instinct driven savage self, but probably had the best characteristics of an alpha in that he looked after what he saw as "his" and looked down heavily on rape and never resorted to it. Hell his relationship with Karin is one of my favorites in this story mostly because it does not have the stigma of rape attached to it unlike quite of few of the others.

I like this more emotional side of Harribel you have shown and i laughed at her fraccion aiming to get dibs on Renji only to get shot down. Nel wouldn't take to kindly to someone trying to claim her man.

Now on to the next one!

chapter 46-Note that I read each chapter then post a review before continuing and it scares me that what I seemingly post in a review gets answered or at least addressed in the next chapter lol. such as the subject of the mystery woman and the arrancar.

Favorite passage in the chapter:

�You�re used to being the one in charge. I understand that. You want to protect your pack. I get that as well. However, this is our cub we�re talking about here! You told me you wanted a strong mate, Tia, strong enough to protect you if it came down to it. Well, here I am, oh Third Espada!� He emphasized her title a little more caustically than he meant to sound, but it was hard not to be furious. �I will personally tear apart anyone who decides to hurt either you or our child, or Hana or even those three immature, ill-mannered geese you�ve taken under your wing and that�s the end of it!�

Damn, I am a guy with no inclination to the male form and that got MY heart pupping, hot damn Toshiro has become one hell of a man........and I loved how tia's response totally went over it lol. Nice to see Toshiro so gung ho about saving a fellow 'former' captain. Although now that she no longer is under barragan, after she gives birth he could very well get back into having an actual position, perhaps even regaining her captain title and bringing back the stealth force.

�If I were a Shinigami, would you have involved yourself with me, Hitsugaya Toshiro?�

�If I were an Arrancar or a Vasto Lorde as you were, would you have involved yourself with me?�

�You would not be �you� if you were one of �us�, as you put it.

�Why is the word �mates� so damned hard for you to say?�

�Because you can�t be one. You can�t cast a Claim around me as I can around you.�

�I�m calling bullshit on that. There�s a sizeable piece of my reiryoku and a cub in your belly that says otherwise.�

.....These fuckers are adorable. In one freaking chapter you made me adore this pairing god damn it. There i so much insecurity and pussyfooting around the subjects and neither one of them is typically the emotionally expressive type especially in a relationship. The interactions between them carry both deep affection and sadness at times and while Grimm/karin iss my OTP for this story, the Harribel/Toshiro pairing just feels the most...I don't know, 'natural' so too speak. That and the sex scene between them with Toshiro going a little alpha there for a bit was scorchingly hot.

�That I do not want to lose this. I do not want to lose what we have between us and I�m not just talking about the baby. I do not want to lose you, Tia Harribel.�
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Brilliant chapter and I can't wait till we are shown some interaction between Harribel and Soi fon.

End thoughts:

You and black fox outdid yourselves with these 3 chapters and continue to impress.

Bravo

-waits patiently for next chapter-

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From ANON - elarhy on January 08, 2014
Tripple update, some moving foward in plot and lots of information laid out.... then telling what the next chapter will be: what a tease�� no update next week after that seems almost cruel� (and now that i'm over being dramatical....)

I loved chap 44, 45 and 46. The interaction between Szayel and Harribel was fun and very well constructed in terms of veering for information on both parts. Harribel take on it was fun because she knew she was being played with. i had wondered how Szayel would go abouth telling Harribel if he had to know she was all for revolution. I get the feeling Toshiro also has lots of information that will be useful, once Karin hears that Harribel is in and gets around to telling Starkk and Toshiro the plan that includes them.

Question: If Tesra's cub makes Noitora a grampa, then does Toshiro's make Rangiku a grandma? she'll probably declare herself an aunt...
Toshiro knew Karin's dad, i wonder if he has any information usefull as royal stuff goes. Will Soifon still give up her baby. being in a safe place? I can imagine Tia's fracction not willing to give up the baby to Noitora if they see Soifon as part of the pack.
What'll be Karin reaction to all the pregnacies, will it affect her plans? How will the escapees react to the pregnacies?
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