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By : NovaAlexandria

From ANON - Lily'sMama on April 02, 2014
I did indeed squeal! This was such a sweet chapter. I can't wait to see what's going on with Karin and Starrk. I would love for Starrk to find his mate in someone as well! I'm so sad that you only update once a week. I'm always so excited to see what happens next :) You do an excellent job
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From Kain on April 01, 2014
To piggyback off of my last review, seeing as how everyone is back in the SS, I am stoked at the possibility of more Soi scenes and her interactions with other characters. :D :D
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From Kain on March 30, 2014
My GOD, work has been kicking my ass. Sorry for the lack of review but just been swamped. This is gonna be a short 1 since I have to head out soon.

Well, glad to see that nice and uncle have finally met each other. Awkward as to be expected and it's only natural that Ajuga and Ichigo would not immediately be to fond of the other. There dual awkwardness was cute though. Although their was also this-

�So you�re my uncle huh? You don�t look that strong. No wonder Papa won Mama from you so easily.�

Ouch.

Given the context and the situation that led to her mom being...ahem "won", is that really a matter for people to laugh about? I understand the point of keeping the children hidden from the truth and not giving them all the gritty details of the war or of the world around them but while it protected there 'innocence', it left them very ignorant and did not exactly help there broader outlooks on right and wrong. There parents can only do so much but making them think what they see outside of there bubbles/homes is simply how things are did the kids no favors. Ajuga also seems to have forgotten her epiphany that it was her recklessness that got them into there current situation and she is already thinking about sinking her claws into Aizen.......a man who makes Zee look like nothing. She's got her daddy's habit of talking smack about and TO people who could knock her into the stratosphere lol.

Grimmjow should now be able to emphasize with what Ichigo went through for years. The not knowing what's happening to a loved one. Karma is a bitch and while Grimmjow may be the Ragnar lothbrok of this fic in that he is not AS cruel or barbaric as most of his brethren, he is no saint and he had this coming in a sense.(sorry if that sounds a little harsh)

Will be interesting to see if this little alliances works out but Yuro is going to have her hands full keeping the peace, and I am surprised the Hiyori didn't try to go after grimm or Szyel, unless she wasn't there with the rest of the group. She acted like a bit of a bitch and was cruel but at the same time she was not wrong in what she said and responded like anyone would against someone who killed her comrades in the past or someone she perceives as a traitor. Nice to see Yuzu again and funny how she is able to intimidate people with a spoon, curious to meet this husband of hers. Sweet that she clicked so easily with her niece. she is like Orihime, all full of the warm fuzzies.

Gahhh it is times like these that I wish there had been more chapters on the escapees little adventures lol. Hope you one day do some short stories about what they got up too during the 15 years.

Assuming your keeping Ichigo's growth rate in, at this point shouldn't he be able to smack Grimmjow down without his mask or bankai? I mean I know Grimmjow is no slouch but after there fight in los noches Ichigo had already surpassed him. As I recall and correct me if I am wrong but at a few points in this story a few character even stated that his reiatsu surpassed even starrk's and it's doubtful that he was sitting on his ass for 15 years. He may not have discovered the final getsuga tenshou but if you are sticking to his potential, would it really matter after all this time? I mean the dangai training amounted to like what, 6 months worth of training? He was beating Aizen's ass even before activating the final Getsuga Tenshou tech after that little time.

Odd not seeing an author note at the end with a question of the week. And this ran longer than what I intended so I will end things here lol.

#1 bleach fic on any site. Keep doing what ya do.

-waits patiently for next chapter-
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From ANON - milia on March 29, 2014
Love your story and kind of sad it is coming to a close soon. I wonder if Aizen will continue the same way he does with Retsu? I mean that is going to be really awkward if he makes Gin prepare her for sex too. And a good way for her to antagonize him a little bit. But I am hoping she gets out of the situation fast enough for that not to happen though. *cross fingers*
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From ANON - MudbloodMalfoy on March 27, 2014
I'm a little confused by Ajuga's reaction at the end. Does she think Szayel is Renji's mate, or is she just reacting to finding out he had kept a secret from her/lied to her?

I loved Ichigo's reaction to finding out about Ajuga, but I wish there had been mooooore. Haha. And I'm probably wrong, but is Nel pregnant? The only reason I could imagine something like that being a special case is because of her base form. I would imagine carrying little centaurs would be hard on a humanoid body.

Last question (for this review), will you go into detail about all of the pregnancies, or just the bare bones of them? Harribel's is very interesting, and I was looking forward to seeing more about it.

Looking forward to the next chapter! :)
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From ANON - gollumsfriend on March 27, 2014
Thanks for the update! (ch. 58)

I'm hoping there's some more interaction/exchanges between Ichigo and Ajuga though. While it was understandably short and tense during for a first encounter, it felt a bit flat and left me feeling a little disappointed for some reason.

I figured Nel was pregnant when you recently mentioned her in your A/N....hopefully she delivers while Renji's there. : )

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From ANON - Scorpinac on March 27, 2014
Lemme guess, she's pregnant. Congratulations, Renji! You're a poppa! And it's nice to see Yuzu-chan again as well, though I am curious as to who she married. And that meeting with Ajuga went far less bloodily for Grimmjow and Ichigo than I thought it would. Until next week. Laters
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From ANON - Scorpinac on March 20, 2014
I just want to say that I currently predict Starrk will claim the twins as his Fraccion. I now wait to see if I'm right! And in answer to your question, yeah, I'm waiting and hoping to see those two, but right now I'm really, really, REALLY eager to hear the name of Kenpachi's Zanpakuto! Come on, Kubo-san, spit it out! Until next week, then. Laters!
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From ANON - gollumsfriend on March 20, 2014
What an exciting update, loved it! Thanks for your hard work!

As great as it was, I couldn't help but be just a little sidetracked by wondering where Ajuga and Diamus were during all this. Going by your A/N notes though, at least we know they're there...somewhere. Unconscious, maybe?

Thanks again!
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From ANON - MilissaRukia on March 19, 2014
March 20th 2014---I just finished reading the latest chapter and the story is so amazing. All those hot headed men ready for a fight. I feel so bad that Karine is stuck with Aizen. I am glad that his power is lowered and I hope that Auga and Her consort(LOL) I cant help but laugh and can just imagine his fathers face while Orihime will be jumping with joy for the pairing. I know that Harabell and Toshiro are just as confused and upset as the rest of them. I hope that they find a way to protect the twins. I know that Starrk will not take kindly to anyone trying to take or harm them.
I apologize for all the misspellings but hope that you understand what I mean. It is the Highlight of my week to read the next chapter.
As far as what I am looking forward to in the manga I want to see what Kennys sword does. He is one of my fav soul reapers and I was so excited when I read the recent chapter that showed that he was back I could not help but squeal and announce it to my whole house My son told me that I was acting just like a kid, and that I should act my age. I told him NO. TIll the next chapter Thank You.. Be safe and do well in your life...
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From ANON - Darkstar on March 19, 2014
@Chapter 57: Short review this time. I was glad to see that the fallout from the last chapter is being addressed. The whole "crap, the kids?!" scene was darkly funny to me... in a gallows humor sort of way. Stark still needs to talk to Halibell and Toshiro, if I recall correctly. Interesting to finally see Ichigo and Rukia after all this time. I'm looking forward to seeing how things play out when Ichigo finally encounters his family.
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From ANON - animeprincess on March 19, 2014
Hi. Have truly enjoyed the story so far but each chapter is just getting better and better. Every Wednesday morning the first thing I do is check to see if you have posted yet. Yeah, lame, I know.

Funny, you said that you thought this chapter would have been better if it was animated. I guess I'm fortunate, although I would have thought most fanfic readers would be able to the same, as I'm reading, most of the time, I can actually visualize the animated characters. I think you did a wonderful job with your descriptions and characterizations.

I look forward to reading the rest of the story.
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From ANON - Karmira on March 18, 2014

I finally got the courage to read a bit further on this story. I had read up to the aftermath of Ajuga and Diamus' capture and then read through the chapters devoted to Toshiro and Hairibel. Then, I stopped. I've been waiting to read further until I had more to read, hopefully some good news. Today, I read up through both chapters of the March up North. I'm not caught up. All this tension and countdowns are driving me nuts. If I had enough patience and didn't like reviewing when I have the chance, I would wait until the end. I don't think we're quite in the home stretch, which means something is going to go wrong. And the 'how' worries me. Why do you keep layered good things with more moments of foreboding, pending darkness? Do you like doing this to your readers? No, don't answer that. All writers do. And it's one of the marks of a great story teller. I just thought I would explain a 'little' bit of the worry and angst your story puts me through with each new chapter. Maybe it would have been safer to leave this 'onion' uncut and not start going through the layers and finding myself trapped reading and worrying, crying, hating, smiling, worrying, etc. You're too good at your webs of intrigue.

Now, on to some real reviewing.

You had one past question I felt like I wanted to answer that is a really good springboard for all I want to touch on here.

Do you feel like Grimmjow and Ulquiorra have changed considerably since the start of POV1, and if so, was the change so gradual that you hardly noticed it until one day you were just like, 'holy shit have these two changed!' ?

The short answer is yes, and yes, again.

You have been a master at character development with each and every character you've vested in, and I include Black Fox in that, since I know she helps you with Toshiro and Harribel as well did the beautiful, painful interlude piece between the two POVs. Yes, the change in characters has been gradual, and yes, the changes have happened in such a way that I hadn't realized how far the changes had occurred until you needed them for the sinuously complicated plot you've engineered. Especially with Ulquiorra. I knew that he's been softening but I didn't analyze how so and why until you needed Grimmjow's and his rivalry/acquaintance to shift into something stronger, not quite buddies but definitely partners.

Speaking of Grimmjow and Ulquiorra, you've been getting even sneakier than usual with these latest 10-2- chapters. You never revealed 'exactly' all of what Grimmjow and Ulquiorra talked about when Grimmjow decided to pay the Fourth a little visit when Diamus and Ajuga were stolen away. It's only now that we know that Grimmjow did not give him the whole story. And that's not the only KEY conversation that you have left open-ended. How much did Syazel reveal to Harribel? Don't you have enough keys to tension without leaving us wondering what was all expounded in KEY conversations/events?! EVIL, you are E.V.I.L.

First, you have evil chapters then sweet then heart-breaking and finally sweet again. That's especially how I felt about the chapters centering on the First and Hana's relationship. I should have known that you would cover each and every corner of what kind of questions and worries this hybrid living arrangement could bring and for the longest time, I dreaded this particular question. This development moved me to tears more than once. Stark was always one of my favorite Espada and his and Lilynette's overwhelming, crippling despair and fear of loneliness was too potent. You couldn't blame them for choosing Aizen. (Aizen is one evil clever bastard with how he got the more powerful Espada to join him. That's a part I think Kubo shouldn't have skipped over.) Before this development, the Firsts have had stable key characteristics, respectful and fiery, but you haven't felt a lot of threat or depth to the sorrow that seems to linger in both of them. I don't know if you planned it this way, but first with them saving Syazel, and now with the threat of losing one of their family, you changed that. In the same movement, you developed Hana from an intelligent child to a very bright, courageous young woman. I would have liked a Stark/Hana/Lilynette moment before the attack for my tender heart, but I adored the reconciliation when it finally came around. I cried again, this time for the amazing relief and hope. You didn't belittle what Hana had to go through to come to grips with everything either. Beautiful.

Beauitful is just one of the words I would use to describe the depth and time you've spent on another relationship, surprising as they were. Grimmjow and Karin may be my top couple and then Tasuki and Tesra but Toshiro and Tia's slow love has been something unique from the rest. I admit I never saw their love coming. It was gradual and until it was overwhelming on both their sides, Black Fox's writing obscured how much it really meant to both of them. You and she definitely went the right way on creating this. First, it began with respect and appreciation of each other, and then slow steps of trust and understanding built between then, at first so little I had to go back to catch that their relationship was shifting, and then Toshiro's growth from young genius captain to powerful, assertive mate, confident and invested enough to break down the rest of the walls between them both. Their powers are winter and sea, known for calm, serene landscapes and stormy flights of power. That was how this relationship crept on me, like the spell of their elements.

And can I say one more thing? The way he manipulated Espada like Tia and Stark/Lilynette is another reason for him to die as hard as he can.

This is already VERY long, so I will touch on a couple more things quickly in the maelstrom of details you've added in the last bunch of chapters.

Syazel is NOT one of my favorite characters in the cannon story, but after POV, he is! And as much as I hate to say it, I think that started with what he has gone through simply because he is as smart as that bastard Aizen. It only started with that. The interlude piece really shed some depth on Syazel's character. Like Renji, I kinda felt bad for thinking the worst of him. With Karin's intervention on his life, he started to make repairs he could for what he did, first, to keep Karin, and then, because he wanted to. He's changed. Like Ulquiorra. Where at first there was a cold scientist with some honor then there was a martyr, now there's a determined schemer who will do anything to protect what he has somehow got in this corner of hell. Even if it was Harribel, I LOVED how he slowly beat down her shields for their cause, when he had a weakness to exploit. And in the past, it would have been for a selfish cause. This time it isn't. Then, there's the perfect manipulation of Yoruichi. Heheh! Back off, kitty spy, you've met your match. ~

Syazel's human side started revealing itself because of my favorite OC, Ajuga, and she's effected many, most of those who are feeling the worst of Aizen/Aizen's minions' cruelty. Her righteous anger, determination, and cleverness in regards to Gin and Byakuya move me every time it's mentioned. Then, there's this sentence in chapter 40: Reprieves:

"Now she was gone and not likely to return. That one little spark of happiness left to him was gone. His mental shields against his captor�s perpetual abuse were now as flimsy as paper as a result."

Nothing drives her effect on people home like this, even more so than Grimmjow's grief. I really worry about what your latest chapter "Bloodlines Revealed" means. I have a feeling that it's not good, which is why I am taking a break, a SHORT break. Now, that I've dove into this epic again, I HAVE to finish what you have up. Still, I really, really worry for my favorite girl. I always have. She's too strong a force for your evil web to not hit sometime before the end... Keep strong Ajuga-chan.

End of the review this time. Enjoy! I'll read more later when I can read and then do some physical work to get out my feelings.
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From ANON - Anon on March 17, 2014
Another amazing chapter as always poor everyone! But great thinking Karin in this time of great despair! I'm so proud of you for saving your family and sacrificing herself. I can't wait for the next chapter just what sort of craziness with happen once Ichigo finds out about Aguja and everything insure he'll find out who's pregnant with who and kids and all that stuff and how will he treat his nerve and her father? And Szayel with the past there too and what will Renji do will he still harbor such a hate for Karin once he comes down and realizes what all this means.

Oh I can't wait for the next chaper!!!
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From ANON - elarhy on March 15, 2014
So Ichigo finds in one go that Grimmjow cares about Karin, that he has a niece, and that she is now maried to Orihime's son who also happens to be Ulquiorra..... Thats gonna be one hell of a family visit.
I hope Grimmjow is up to see the hilarity of it. Probably not, considering he is gonna be going bonkers about what Karin did, but with the escapees, the conpiration and aizeen troneless i dont belierve the plan is gonna be dead, but move foward.
I'm pretty sure that when the moments comes Harribel and Stark will help, ((and so will Noitora because of Matsumoto and Tesra)) or Yoruichui can contact them and get them working. This new development is gonna move a lot of hives..... now i wonder if Toshiro will figure out Ajuga to be royalty from her taking the trone... thats gonna be an interesting chat with harribel i hope we get to see.

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