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By : NovaAlexandria

From SeresNorth on July 11, 2014
Dear Nova:

You've mentioned that you already have the ending in mind for the ending of the story. And while I wouldn't presume to tell you how to write your own story, there is one thing that's been on my mind for a while, since I started reading the first PoV back around December of last year...

Specifically, Aizen's death.

I'm not going to suggest the method by which he's going to die. However, there is one bit of input I'd like to offer: considering how massive the man's ego is and how he looks down on everyone else, his singular obsession with gaining absolute power, and his lack of compassion for anyone else. When he's finally defeated by those he viewed as "inferior", that he realizes that he's not the perfect god-like being that he believed himself to be.

I want Aizen to realize, before he dies, that HE engineered his downfall. I want him to die with the certain knowlege that it was HIS fault- BECAUSE of HIS hubris and his sense of superiority to those around him, that he's failed. In his last moments, I want Aizen to stand defeated, as all his plans and dreams come crashing down around him.

And if he doesn't "die" outright, because of the Hyogaku (probably misspelled that), then the power of the Orb should make it so that he's condemmed to suffer for eternity, trapped in a Hell of his own making.
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From ANON - Anon on July 10, 2014
Er, sorry, previous review (post 3000032726) was me, chevenga. Didn't realize I wasn't logged in. Sorry!
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From ANON - Anon on July 10, 2014
*choke* So Byakuya gets back the 6th, but Yammy taints that as much as everything else?!

Dood, seriously, there is *no* pain, no hurt, no beat-down that you can afflict Yammy with that will satisfy me.

And I think I mentioned before that the clan elders are equally as vile and deserve comparable punishment. I stand by that assertion. They are irredeemably vile and should be eliminated.

Glad that Yumichika and Ggio will get a small break, but worried for Barragan's alleged third pet.

Please, even if you've already planned Yammy's and the Kuchiki elders' comeuppance, make it harsher. Pleaseohpleaseohpleaseohplease!

And lastly, potential daily updates?! My head and hearts just asploded from anticipation.

Thanks for sharing, and please excuse any of my currently intoxicated typhon... er, typos.

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From ANON - Avi on July 09, 2014
Another great chapter as always in terrible intrigued and can't wait to see the hollow babies. Soi Fons the most. I adored this chaper and the fact that Harribel's fraction is getting their own spaces it'll be interesting to see and everything how that plays out and everything! Keep up the great work!!!
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From SeresNorth on July 06, 2014
@Chapter 72-73: It was nice to see the aftermath of Nanao being claimed. First, it was nice to check back in with Tatsuki and Ran- and to see how the newest member of their growing household is doing. Aside from some mild embarrassment, Kamoka seems to have adapted pretty well to her new situation. Really, it seems like everyone living in the new digs that Nnoitra secured are preoccupied with the arrival of the four cubs. And given that none of them are involved in the planned coup, it makes sense that Soifon would chose to leave her child in their care- as a precaution.

Aside from that, I got a chuckle out of the scene where Nanao gathers up the officers to speak candidly with them about the prospect of being claimed in an Arrancar in the coming days. The fact that they've lived with the Arrancar for so long that the Shinigami training actually includes being talked to about what to expect was rather funny, in a dark kind of way. Though, the general societal view of the Arrancar seems to have shifted to such an extent that a number of them seem excited by the idea- though all the pregnant Shinigami's remarks on how awesome claiming sex is probably has something to do with this. I guess after living with them for sixteen years, for some, the Arrancar aren't viewed as monsters and boogiemen any more.

I found Stark's shyness rather endearing, even as Lilinette is being as blunt and tactless as ever. The picnic was a much needed break for everyone, and it was also a chance to see how well Iemura and Sungsun are getting along. When Lilinette 'confronted' Nanao about her interest in starting a family with Stark, her realization was rather moving... My only concern is how they're going to explain to Hana that "Uncle" Stark is now effectively her stepfather. Not that I think she'd be that upset, but I imagine trying to explain it in way that wouldn't be awkward for Stark and Nanao. And on a smaller note, poor Jushiro... Seriously, the poor guy is such a woobie. He badly needs someone in his life, so that he doesn't keep feeling so old and useless. Though, I keep getting this possessive vibe from Lilinette, over him, but that might just be me.

One one hand, I was kind of upset by the idea of Halibell's Fraccions moving out, but then that house had be getting pretty cluttered. It made me feel good to see that Soifon is bonding with Tia. That someone like Soifon would think nothing of placing the Espada's hand on her stomach- to feel her child moving inside her- really says a lot about how much she's changed as a person. It was also nice to see Yumichika again. Seriously, nothing can keep down that guys positive attitude for long. I was glad to hear that Ggio (another woobie, now that I think about it) is doing better, and that Aizen came by to personally tell Barragon that he's on his shit list, was also a bit of good news.

AND, the fact that the Sixth Squad is going to be reformed is also good news, as it means that it will provide an official reason to keep Byakuya- who's in the running with Gin for the top woobie position- away from Yammy as much as possible. It pretty depressingh, to think about just how far fallen and how broken as a man that Bya has become... To the point that EVEN Grimmjow can't bring himself to talk about it to Ichigo or Rukia.

Anyway, I hope we'll get to see Orihime and Ulquiorra again soon. I'd love to see how the two of them have been dealing with the news that their son has been made the Concert of Ajuga, now the Spirit Queen, given that this makes them Royals- as well as making them in-laws of both Grimmnjow and Ichigo!
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From chevenga on July 03, 2014
For next week: Reinstated the 6th with Byakuya at its head? Ohpleaseohpleaseohplease!

I still want Yammy to suffer horribly. Please make him suffer. Like, a LOT!

On this chapter, I only just figured out that *this* Oomaeda is the father, not the son, which makes it easier for me to believe that Soi Fon accepts him so easily. And thank you for sparing us a word-for-word re-enactment of the arguments between Harribel's fraccion.
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From ANON - leanne on July 02, 2014
sorry I forget if you answered this already, but will Soi-Fon get her voice healed back or not?
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From ANON - Scorpinac on July 02, 2014
Somehow I'd gotten confused and thought she'd been taken to Marechiyo, still alive and well, but I guess I just got something mixed up somewhere. Either way, nice to see this conspiracy moving forward, and I'm really glad you addressed the question of whether or not Soi Fon's baby was still going ahead, since I had actually been thinking myself that that wouldn't be necessary now that she's decidedly out of Barragan's reach. But actually this does make sense for the current nonce. Well, until chapter 74, then. Laters.
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From Kain on July 01, 2014
Okay, lets get to it.

Chapter 68:

An Auction........SURE why not. I mean, they have had to face almost every other strike against there dignity so why not this? Aizen seems to live on Naraku logic-

*Make as many enemies as you possibly fucking can*

Was totally surprises that none of the selected shinigami opted to nope the fuck out of dodge. That shows some real strength. They know whats coming but instead of fleeing they went along with it. I suppose the only silver lining is that the least abusive arrancar were given first "dibs" and that there are now rules against physical abuse, although Yammy showed that it is possible to get around rules like that. Ya know I would love to get into the heads of some of these shinigami, just to see what they think of everyday life for the past 15 years and whewther or not they are simply numb to all the shit they have to put up with.

Now on to this:

While the Third�s fraccion could be irritating, thoughtless, obstinate, argumentative and feather-headed at times, the three were basically good-hearted.

Toshiro, you adorable little grumpy scamp........Dont make me cross the barrier between thiss world and the net and strik you with a brick.

This has probably got to be the thing the vexes me the most as I have stated many(annoyingly so)times, It is understandable that He would not have to harsh of thoughts toward them since they never REALLY abused him but the girls and especially Harribel all had a hand, malicious or not, in helping create the new soul society that he lives in where rape and abuse is commonplace and Auctions get held for his comrades. The fact that one is carrying his kid and all 4 are in agreement in putting Aizen down doesn't clear any slate. Everyone just seems so "OK" with most of the Espada barring yammy and barragan and only seem to hold minor annoyance towards the numeros. It could just be the "hate lenses" I am wearing though.

Alright, Aint gonna lie, having Tatsuki make Tesra pick the terrified 4th division officer made me love her a little. I can be very harsh on her but it is moments like these that make me like her all over again.

Franque Lloydght�s........Ya know, me being a guy who has a great distaste for the arrancar, I find it VERY disconcerting that I like this character so much. I mean he has only popped up a handful of times but he steals the scene everytime. I take it he is more like Grimmjow and doesnt do the whole "rape thing' and actually courted the girl he is with before claiming her? The guy just has such a flamboyant flair to him and i know jack about him lol.

Aizen is just pushing all of Starrks buttons ain't he? It cannot be said enough, but the man is such a douchenozzle. He goes beyond being a dick and just tries to get the gold medal in being an absolute freaking asshat.

chapter 69: Honestly don't have a whole lot to say for this one. It was funny at various points, especially the reveal about the toys lol. Sweet and very tense at other points. A feelgood chapter. Not too sure how I feel about the pairing but I am interested in seeing what happens.

Chapter 70: Another feel good chapter.............UNTIL THE END THAT IS.

-nice interaction between Ajuga and Diaemus.

-I would love to see some one on one interaction between Hiyori and Hana. Hiyori's anger is understandable seeing as not only did Hana protect Lillinete but she is also the pseudo fraction to the woman that killed Lisa(unless it was someone else in this verse). But it is unfair to take it out on Hana who wasn't even born during the war and has only ever known what came after. But they need to get some shit off of there chests or something is going to go down.

-Interesting plan wit the Swarm. Hopefuly they can get the Swarm to play with kid gloves to lower the number of casualties.

-That ending.........yeah.

Chapter 71:Ahem....I believe I left my feelings about this chapter in a different post. Man no one is safe here eh?

Chapter 72:

-funny and cute with Nanao wanting to have some girl time and talk about her night with starrk.

-A class On claiming eh.

Arrancar: "so in short.......you decent looking? You strong?......your ass is marked goods.....Now please do remember to turn in those essay's on "how to not anger your Arrancar master" and "The joys of having your very movement dictated by a claim" first thing Monday morning.....or else-smile-.

Shinigami:............................

(I am such a little shit, I know. I am sure it doesn't go like that)

-Active Shinigami or not, they will be open for the taking. Well I suppose that clears up one of my questions.

-And yep aizen found a way to crank up the douchness. Now he has them getting tagged like cattle.

-�It�s the best sex you will ever have!� her pregnant 8th Seat all but gushed with stars in her eyes.

...best "sex" eh?

*fills a sack fool a bricks and prepares the ritual that will allow him to enter the net*

Meh It is understanable I suppose. If they are going to be claimed and have no choice in it at least they will go in prepared unlike with what happened 15 years ago and have more choice in the matter and can even perhaps snag one of the non abusive Arrancars.

-�I will never understand the younger generation.� Jushiro said ruefully as he watched the breeze shake a few of the pink petals loose, to fall to the ground nearby. �I fear that they�ll see only one side of it and not take into account the rest.�

Jushiro with some major truth there. I take it the ones more open to seeking out claims are the youngsters fresh out of the academy?

-Cute little picnics are always nice

-YES my soi is in the next chap.

waits patiently for the next chapter.........

which is in less than 24 hours. Fuck me sideways I said i would have this up on Saturday didn't I? I need to get my shit in order.

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From ANON - Avi on June 26, 2014
Chapter 72:
As hard as that had to be for Nanao to tell her division I think it was needed and she did a good job I'm hoping to see more of what happens with the girl that was claimed by Tersa and Tatiski. I'm excited to see the cubs and everything! And I'm also wondering how Toshiro's and Soi-Fon's relationship will change as I'm sure they have never been really close so In wondering if they will grow closer perhaps. Also what's going to happen to Gglo's and Soifon's child is it still going to go to Taski and Tersa or is she going to be able to keep it now that she's with Harribel?

Another great chapter as always keep up the great work!!!
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From ANON - Avi on June 26, 2014
Poor Karin but it was kind of expected and it was hinted at enough as it was but still!!! That sucks I hope Aizen gets what he deserves and suffers as he gets his heart ripped out of his chest!!! I wonder if Karin will get pregnant with his kid.... But it was a great chapter keep up the great work and everything!!!
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From ANON - Longtime Reader on June 25, 2014
So a few things!! One my reactions to the last chapter were inbetween the two extremes you so kindly wrote out: it had to happen eventually, and she needed that blind pulled away. THIS chapter was amazingly fluffy! And I can't wait for the next sequence of events for all parties to play out (essentially, I can't wait for this fic to finish so I can reread all of it, instead of chapters 1-71 like I did this week).
Also: I went back and reread your other series about the hybrids, and your writing has improved dramatically. Grammar, spelling, prose, the whole lot. =) It is much more detailed and smoother flowing now, with many fewer errors!

Annnnd about HTTYD2: I never saw the first, and I didn't feel very out of the loop, which was good. Not a huge fan, so I didn't suffer the feels everyone else did at certain parts (at least not to the same degree).

Eagerly awaiting the next chapter!!!!
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From Kain on June 24, 2014
*narrowly dodges flaming arrow and does a(pointless)barrel roll behind a group of trees*

Kain: "damn they are persistent"

*flips laptop open and begins what may be his last post*

Date, june 24, 2014

Enraged mob of adultfanfic denizens have been trailing me for days now. APPEARENTLY my name got dropped-looks intensely at Nova-before a particular ahem..."event" occurred in a "certain" story. As what may very well be my last act I feel it is necessary to clarify a few things.

Now, I have at several points in both parts of this fic made some very passionate and at times one could say rage filled posts about certain characters and how some have acted in response to some of the terrible things that happen around them. But at no point and please correct me if I am wrong as i tend to forget segments of what i write, did I state that Karin being raped was something I was anticipating.

.Her being more empathetic-yes

.Seeing the world outside of her clique/family/sandbox-definitely

Hell I have said similar things about Tatsuki since she actually had to stand by and watch her best friend get raped for years before things got "better". To me it just felt at times that they were both talking out of there ass's due to there kinship with some of the Arrancar and there mates. But I never would have wished rape upon either of them, a grand epiphany that would have them do something or say something other than "well, there is nothing we can do", sure, I mean they are now planning a coup de ta against a guy that is far above any of them and has proven to be one smart and sadistic motherfucker but thinking of a way to help the abused before it got to that point was beyond them?

Now if I in fact did type such things then I must have been REALLY vexed, but for the life of me I cannot recall doing so.

I am going to wait till tomorrows update before I do a mega review for all of the chapter I have neglected to review. And yes i realize for the past while I have promised a review and not delivered, but that is changing and i intend on getting back into the swing of things.
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From chevenga on June 23, 2014
You asked: "So, how many of you are saying �finally, about time she got a taste of what others suffered� and how many of you are going �Noooooooooooo, I hate you! How could you?�"

It's neither, really, or a combo of both, plus some despair and more hatred. I never thought that Karin was unempathetic about the others raped, so the first part of the question seems overly harsh; she just didn't have the direct experience. So I don't agree with the "finally" part. And given that it was nearly inevitable, I won't say "How could you?" either; it fits the story and the characters, and I'm confident that you'll provide some character growth from it. If I'm lucky, you'll even provide some custom-tailored revenge for it.

And since I don't review much, I figured while I'm here I'll also mention that, yep, you're still pulling *more* hatred for Aizen out of me literally *years* after I first started reading this epic. Well done!

I still don't hate him as much as I hate Yammy, though. ;)

Please make them both pay, extravagantly, viciously, and copiously.
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From ANON - ShelyGirl on June 22, 2014
71-More like: Well, that was inevitable. Gah. Now I wanna know how Grimmjow is going to react to now knowing the deed has been done and what of their first encounter with each other after? All I gotta say is, Grimmjow better be the one to kill Aizen now as revenge for Karin. He better get some kinda kick-ass second release form that obliterates Aizen, but not before he rams some kind of huge, splintered wooden dildo so far in and out of his ass that it pulls his colon out of his bleeding anus.
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