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Reviews for Driven to Distraction

By : Raymy
  • From FicticiousDelicious on October 23, 2012
    Chap 5 - System of punishment as roleplay, tee hee, exciting says I!
    There is a definite passion between these two, and their playfulness is just too cute (in such an enticing and amusing way)! Renji's so tender and sweet toward Byakuya after they've finished their love-making, cleaning him up, tucking him in and cuddling. No wonder Byakuya thinks time with Renji is better (it makes me wonder what dancing together with Renji might make him think).

    *cuddles up to your beautiful writing and smothers it with praise* Likie this chapter a lot! Yum yum!
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  • From FicticiousDelicious on October 23, 2012
    Chap 4 - I think I figured out what was cutting off the review for chapter 3, bah!

    Oooohhhh boy...making a mess is such a good thing. Byakuya is hard and in charge, but he's still conscientious in a caring sort of way - which I appreciate because it makes him into more than a sex crazed man. "Conscientious" was the first word that came to mind but perhaps "thoughtful" is a better one.
    Subordination assumes two forms in my mind after reading this chapter; one work oriented and the other in their blossoming sexual relationship, the progression of the non-work type interests me. Perhaps the two types will have to merge together [in some way] in order to keep them together? At least Byakuya doesn't seem interested in "using" (for the worse) Renji in his subordinate position, that would be a twist but upsetting at the same time.

    Poor Byakuya has a moment of internal conflict before Renji makes him laugh, that is just a perfect scene. Definitely heartwarming and still on-track with the events. Overall this chapter made me feel warm and fuzzy about their newly developing type of relationship, a very good read. I expected wild sex from this chapter but I was pleasantly surprised that it didn't come just yet.
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  • From FicticiousDelicious on October 23, 2012
    Chap 3 - (cont...)
    I often avoid stories with a first person perspective because of series characters being paired with non-series characters (such as people's personally created characters). Maybe that's just me having bad experiences with these types of stories but pah! The first person perspective you use (and switching off between characters) is muy bien! It captures my interest and definitely avoids annoying me because the inner thoughts from the perspective are relevant and at times amusing.

    I agree with Byakuya *raises hand* Renji's tattoos are VERY fitting. Washing each other in the shower is such an endearing, sweet concept. I sense the wrecking of the bed in the next chapter, must read more! :3
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  • From FicticiousDelicious on October 23, 2012
    Chap 3 - I'm not certain why when I submit a review that the page cuts it short but it keeps doing that...heh. This is my last try to post the whole thing and if it doesn't work I will send it to you directly.

    Chap 3 - Posting many chapters at once can be a good thing, it gives readers more to read if the chapters are short. It could also lessen the number of views you get for your story but to some writers that isn't a main concern. *shrug* We your faithful readers sure don't shun you for giving us a bunch of chapters to read!
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  • From FicticiousDelicious on October 22, 2012
    Chap 2 - "Guffaw" this word gets a gold star...I am most serious about that. I love that word.

    Byakuya as a dancer, I picture such an elegant display of careful fluid movements mixed with long trailing black hair. What a beautiful thought that instils. He also seems very cautious, not wanting anyone from Seireitei to catch him dancing (which begs the question, will some one see him?).
    Aww, Poor Renji tripping on the rug, me thinks he's a little tense...and then they hit the shower/bath to get clean just to turn around and get dirty. :3 I think this chapter has confirmed my guess about Byakuya being more composed/confident, I can't wait to see how Renji handles this (with seemingly little experience), should be a most delicious adventure for him.

    One chapter compels you to write another and another and another, keep going! I love this story. :3
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  • From FicticiousDelicious on October 19, 2012
    Chap 1 - I'm not the best at reviewing works but reading them is so fun! All I have to do now is translate thought into word...So here we go! :D There's just something about men with long hair...it brings such a sensational image to mind. I always liked the idea of Renji with his hair down, and "cascading" as it's taken down, ABSOLUTELY! *swoon* Your first chapter has definitely painted good mental pictures in my mind, and their personalities I want to know more of! I'm thinking Byakuya is more confident than Renji. The way Renji's stuttering a little and trying not to be too forward stirs my curiosity, is he a shy boy? Maaaybe...maybe not... *squirms* I think it's up to Byakuya to loosen Renji up a bit. :3 Hee Hee. I relate to dancing (like Byakuya mentioned) to express the self, definitely a good point made there. I can't wait to read chapter 2...in fact if I can stay awake I might just do that! :3
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  • From satterb on October 12, 2012
    Renji is so cute in this story. I look forward to more. I'm glad you found your muse. Thanks for all your hard work.
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  • From satterb on October 11, 2012
    This was really good. Nice try for a first time. It's a perfect place to stop if you're not going to finish. Go any further and your readers might be upset if you let the story drop. Using an outline for your story is a big help in planning how you want it to roll. I think you have some talent. Good luck in the future.
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