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From JOler on February 12, 2012
I honestly think my favorite scene so far is Grimmjow figuring out that Szayel was (and possibly still is) interested in him ~ that way ... (and of course Szayel being all bashful about it).

That is closely followed by Grimmjow and Ichigo finding out that Szayel is barely older than a cub himself in hollow terms, and is probably younger than Ichigo's dad would be if he were human and not Shinigami.

Third (also a very close runner up) is Grimmjow letting an awed Szayel 'pet' the egg ... and Szayel reacting like a little girl being allowed near a newborn for the first time ... after being told that it can break easy (that's why daddy is afraid to pick it up... lol)
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From ANON - writeaddict on February 11, 2012
Ooh. I'm excited for next chapter. I really liked this one though. It laid out some history and drew everyone together as a functioning family unit as they could have been before.
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From blueflame125 on February 11, 2012
Oh! This chapter is so cute! It made me grin widely. I now believe coffee is an important factor to made Grimmjow behave nicely. LOL Can't wait to see Cachorro. XD
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From JOler on February 11, 2012
Can't wait to see the baby.

Who would have thought Grimmjow was addicted to caffeine ... he definitely has the mellow side of an addict once he gets his fix ...

Think Grimmjow was stunned that Szayel had the hollow equivalent of a crush on him ... and apparently still does judging by his reactions. Glad things are starting to go smoother. Wonder if Ichigo will let his little tomcat check out the unexpected opportunity (or will Ichigo insist they remain a monogamous pairing)? Glad the baby appears to like Szayel, that should help everyone get along better too. Am worried by the approaching individuals. Either way ... it looks like Grim-kitty goes for the younger type... And the revelation about how young Szayel is might even bring out a bit of Grimmjow's protective side ... lol ... After this conversation and the revelation concerning their ages he probably sees Szayel as barely beyond being a cub himself (he might even be a bit on the young side to be mating successfully ... another possibility for the earlier losses ... and Grimmjow is old enough to know that ~ and explain it to Szayel, telling him not to be discouraged because he was probably way too I young the first or even second time). If Grimm decides to stay strictly Ichigo, he may choose the role of pseudo-dad for the much younger espada (who had a school-kid crush on him ~ the much older man ~ not so long ago ... lol). Even if they don't get hot and heavy, I'm sure Szayel wouldn't mind some platonic cuddling and snuggling with his crush ...
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From JOler on February 05, 2012
Hmmm ... If Szayel says he knows the essence is necessary but he isn't sure if the actual physical joining is required ... Ichigo and he can jointly surmise that the essence is the required component from the alpha (H'Tsu using the condom and filling it under a reluctant Zangetsu's watchful eye) ... But in truth the physical component required to bring about the reaction needed for the mixing (which would last for a while in the beta) could be induced by anyone. Ichigo can offer the job to Zangetsu first (he's done his part by ensuring H'Tsu provided the essence as requested) then after having a terrified Szayel (figures he's stuck with H'Tsu again since he hasn't yet seen the condom) set up a temporary mating nest in the bathroom, he can 'order' a stunned Grimmjow to provide the physical part and administer the essence contained in the condom ('H'Tsu's already been too rough with him, I'm ordering you to make sure Szayel has the most pleasurable experience possible and as soon as you finish you will gently insert the condom and break it ... and no hurting him afterward either') ... It would be priceless to see the look on Grimmjow's face when given the order ... then both faces upon him entering the bathroom and crawling in with Szayel ... and how things might change between them afterward ... Grimmjow might actually find he enjoys the feel of doing Szayel since he still can't top Ichigo ... even seeing Ichigo peeking in once the noise has quieted down and seeing The remains of the discarded broken condom on the floor and Grimmjow protectively curled around Szayel while they both sleep it off ... and of course their reactions several hours later when they wake up like that ... of course the nest is not removed until Grimmjow can check to see if it worked or if Ichigo needs to bring out H'Tsu after all for a 'supervised' visit since he's already proven he can't be trusted to obey his alpha in this regard.
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From JOler on February 05, 2012
Kinda hoping it is a chemical and semen presence ... not a physically caused response. It would make a bit more sense that way since it is keyed to the alpha ... and condoms wouldn't be known of in Hueco Mundo ... it would be hillarious to see Ichigo pull out an unused three pack of condoms and have Zangetsu take it 'insise' so that he and Ichigo can (reluctantly and with much disgust) ensure H'Tsu 'fills' it and returns it full and undamaged to be used by Szayel next time ... Being told that he will not be permitted any 'alone time' with Szayel after the way he treated him the last time. Then the look on Szayel's face when told what it is and what it's for ... and him nervously asking for assistance with inserting and breaking the not so firm item ... anyone but H'Tsu ... and all the silent prayers for it to work (you know H'Tsu won't be among the ones praying). I'm sure the condom itself would pique Szayel's interest ... and prompt a request for another journal or two ... and perhaps a sample of that highly fascinating and ... uh ... useful item. Even after he's free of H'Tsu Szayel might find it useful for collecting genetic material for his manipulative experiments ... we know how he is ... and that would be an immediate thought crossing his mind when first told what it is. ... By inserting that into a captured experiment host even HE could eventually be an alpha ... because of his ability to capture and incapacitate the other and then use this fascinating item (that thought might make him so giddy he might swoon with excstacy). I honestly hope baby-Grimji develops a very strong fascination for and attachment to Szayel's egg ... I'd honestly love to see Grimmjow's reaction to his cub boing the cute and clumsy baby walk (so proud of how he's developing) ... and then watching in dismay as the baby crawls into the other nest with a totally terrified Szayel (eyes wide and trembling in the corner ... sure that Grimmjow is going to skin him alive for being so close to the cub), then purring very loudly and happily as it nuzzles and rubs up on the egg (the way cats rub their ears on things to mark their territory and people etc) before curling around it for a nap ... and if daddy gets aggressive while approaching the egg he gets hissed at by an angry cub defending his first claimed property ... lol. (talk about a mortified couple of parents ... I think Ichigo would find the development a bit amusing though ... even Zangetsu might crack a smile at it while H'Tsu's reaction is anybody's guess).
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From ANON - Anon on February 04, 2012
Now I'm curious whether Grimmjow is going to want more babies with Ichigo after this one.
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From JOler on February 04, 2012
For some reason I get the feeling that if Szayel were in no danger of attack (ie not in Hueco Mundo and in a riatsu shielded place ... like Kisuke's basement cavern ...) he wouldn't necessarily need his markers refreshed so much if at all ... Hmmm can we hope they go back before the next refresh so H'Tsu can be told 'No way in H*** or Hueco Mundo or even on earth' is he gonna get to abuse Szayel again (though I'm sure Ichigo will inform him none too gently that he will resist the refreshing as long as possible because of H'Tsu's bad behavior). I wonder ... Is it the physical act and stimulated hormone release or simply the presence of the alpha's 'essence and genetic material' that does the refreshing. The first would require direct mating ... the second would require H'Tsu to use a condom and get himself off ... then Szayel simply insert and break the condom ... with no contact with H'Tsu (now wouldn't that twist H'Tsu's knickers and put Szayel ~ and the rest ~ a bit more at ease).
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From JOler on February 03, 2012
Sigh ... Sorry but I just had to ask and hope ....

Hope all is going well with your baby.

Still wondering if Szayel's weakened condition and now H'Tsu's rough mating .... along with generally low riatsu ... will cause pregnancy issues for Szayel (it would really be interesting if he was unknowingly carrying ... twins ~ that's why some eggs have double yolks ~ it would also be another reason for his more depleted and slower regeneration of riatsu levels).

Ichigo, Grimmjow, and Szayel having a ... Pleasant? ... Or even civilized? Conversation???? Oh my. We know H'Tsu will be obnoxiously vocal in Ichigo's head ... wonder if it will be enough to get Zangetsu to kick H'Tsu's ass so Ichigo can concentrate on what the other two are saying ...
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From JOler on February 03, 2012
Sadly the previously mentioned chibis will have to be mental images only since (unlike Blackstorm) my artistic ability in that area is severly lacking ... but I have tossed ya a few bits of muse/bunnie fodder in the past ... if that helps the request any ...
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From JOler on February 02, 2012
Hmmm ... If we are patient with POV ... and give you chibi-Grimmjow, chibi-Szayel, chibi-Ichigo ... and ... Hmm chibi-Yumichika, chibi-Ukitake, and chibi-Byakuya eyes (with the others peeking from the edges of the overloaded stage ... Would you consider slightly faster posts of this ficcie?
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From JOler on January 28, 2012
Hmmm ... H'Tsu didn't know Szayel was a naturally born beta so I'm guessing Grimmjow is clueless to that fact as well. I wonder what his reaction would be upon being enlightened by any of the other pack members ... well any aspect of Ichigo that is or by Szayel himself. I'd love to see a bit of verbal interaction between Grimmjow and Szayel now that Grimmjow has read Szayel's diary ... especially if the convo comes after Grimmjow is informed of Szayel's rare 'condition'. Still wanna see the options Szayel is given for who to refresh the markers ...

(could see it being something along the lines of ...

"The topic of refreshing your markers was recently brought up by H'tsu." Ichigo said softly to the quickly paling scientist. "I told him it's your choice who does the refreshing." the pink-haired espada's eyes grew wider and a low threatening growl rumbled behind him.

Szayel glanced back to see Grimmjow glaring and bristling but otherwise not leaving his nest.

Once Szayel's eyes had returned to him Ichigo continued "you have a choice to make and I'll give you time to come to decide who you want refresh your markers. I will say this once, I am not an option." The low growls coming from the main nest abruptly ended. "Your options are your current alpha H'tsu, my beta Grimmjow, or Zangetsu."

A startled mew was heard from the main nest and Szayel turned disbelieving eyes toward the equally wide eyed espada in the main nest. Disbelief reflected in both sets of eyes.

Ichigo was dealing with H'Tsu's enraged tirade. "You ... You're really going to let him choose? And you'll let him dump me for what? ... Your beta or ... or ... or THAT!" H'tsu snarled as he motioned to the obviously stunned Zanpakto-spirit.

"Ichigo you should have asked me, or at least told me, about this before ..." Zangetsu started.

"If I had any other options I would have used them. Right now I've decided I will not be the one to refresh his markers. That leaves the only three options I gave him."

..... arguments, contemplations, perhaps even a brief discussion with an equally stunned Grimmjow ... then the decision ... who will he choose?)

Lol ... But that would be the comic dramatic style that I tend to write ... can't wait to see how you bring up the topic and give him the choices.
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From blueflame125 on January 28, 2012
Oh! H�tsu does care something. He even made a promise. *surprised*

The make-up sex was so HOT!! Ichigo is the teasing bastard!! XD
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From Ficfan3484 on January 28, 2012
Delicious, everything is just delicious~
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From writeaddict on January 28, 2012
Awesome chapter. Very hot. It was nice to see Ichigo put Grimmjow back in his place. It will be interesting to see how Grimmjow treats Ichigo and the dynamics between the three of them, especially after Ichigo mates Szayel.
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