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Reviews for Prize of Victory

By : NovaAlexandria

From mevenia1 on January 05, 2011
Great story so far, I nearly skipped over it because I am not usually interested in your stated pairings, but I am so glad I didn't. Your characterizations have been fantastic and completely believable and I love the dark twists that you throw in; Byakuya not being able to speak is tragic and ironic and I thought you wrote his frustrations beautifully. I love how the main story is about two pairings (again, that I personally would usually skip) but you also keep weaving in other characters within and along the edges, even if it is only to mention their deaths. Well-written dark stories are too few and far between, thank you for sharing yours.
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From HollowedRose on January 05, 2011
Of course Byakuya just had to be with Yammy ( strange but I was sure I wrote somewhere that he's either with Yammy or even Aizen himself, or maybe I only thought about it -.-' ). Poor Byakuya, it's like... the worst possible fate for him, at least that's how I see it, the noble and the beast/brute.

Here's a typo I noticed: "He made it too the hall before his vision went completely black.", obviously it should be "to". :)

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From Mirrors1984 on January 02, 2011
I feel really bad for Nanao... But I find it interesting that there's at least some people watching (hopefully planning a huge rescue mission. :-) I just like stories with an epic feel to them along with the darkness. Yoruichi has always been good at the stealth stuff, but I wonder exactly how many escapees are there. They could probably be all spread and not aware of each other's presences (since in times of war everyone has to be careful and its possible for everyone in the same side to rarely if not ever intercept each other's paths). I'm really loving this fic! (and by the way I uploaded two chapters to LHSB. It was hard considering my connection but I managed to fix it and I didn't get booted off. YAY!) I can't wait to see what was Byakuya's fate though. Ever since I've been reading this (when you extended it), I wondered about and also about the whole Soul Society's position regarding this situation. Aizen can be a real ass at times. Grrr...
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From ANON - Kazes on January 01, 2011
YAY POV! Okay so I finally have a second of free time but more on that later. I wasn't going to re-read this chapter but I go sucked in :p lol You are most welcome for any assistance I might have been my dear! Even if it was just a cheap excuse for me to have sneak previews :o hahahaha ERRORS! I saw a couple small typos :
�Pleas stop. This is wrong."
and

"...she started to struggle against him again, beggign him to stop."

Otherwise, I'm lovin it! :D I can't wait for more. I'm in the middle of emailing you and reading these posts so my reviews will probably mix with the email at some point HAHA try not to. I hope you are hung over right now. HAPPY NEW YEAR!
~Kazes.
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From HollowedRose on January 01, 2011
Ahhhh so it wasn't Ichi, darn, I was wrong. But now I wonder who has Byakuya. At first I was gonna say it was either Halibel or Yami but since Aizen won the war it means more Espadas are alive. Heck, the one keeping Byakuya as a slave could probably be even Aizen himself. I can't believe you updated so soon, I'm almost inspired to write another chapter as well, but I hardly got 4 hours of sleep last night so I'm not sure if I can.

I'm looking forward to reading the next chapter and see what happened to Byakuya.
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From ANON - star on December 31, 2010
I just wanted to say that I've been enjoying this story very much. I just recently stumbled on your other bleach stories and I was shocked at how much better I liked your story than the anime. This one is no different. Hope you enjoy writing as much as I enjoy reading.
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From Erosu787 on December 30, 2010
I am surprised that I quickly warmed up to this type of story. It is nicely written and your frequent updates make this one of my favorites to look forward to reading. I particularly enjoy the Grimmjow/Karin scenario although I am curious to know if he has any intentions on taking Yuzu. Keep up the great job

Wanted to also say I am highly interested to see how you will portray Gin. As he is one of my favorite characters the future chapters is something I am really looking forward to.

The sex scenes are very realistic, it is good to ask for reference and use prior experience into words

Please update soon!
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From Mirrors1984 on December 30, 2010
Holycrap! Did Ichigo see everything??? I can't wait to find out! *evil snickering* I'm sorry I just love twist and turns in fics. I also like how Ulquiorra is starting wanting to see that what he was doing to Orihime was wrong. Hopefully he'll at least try to change (not too much though since he's icy persona is what makes him so fascinating). Hope to see more soon. I have to go do some work on my fic *winces*. I lost my wordprocessing program and now I have to go at it commando so it might be hard to read. *wails*
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From HollowedRose on December 30, 2010
I liked the scene between Ulquiorra and Grimmjow, it was very interesting. Poor Ulquiorra getting taught by trash, who would've thought? xD

I really hope that person with golden eyes at the end was Ichigo, I can't wait to read more about him in your fic. Wait, that didn't sound right, I don't want that person to be him, that'd just be wrong, him seeing his sister like that, poor guy. x.x

Anyway, it never really crossed my mind that people would not post a review because the fic is dark, that would never stop me. I simply did not post anything for a long time because I never thought my opinion mattered ( and I didn't have an AFF account ), especially when I used to consider myself no good at writing. I kind of still think that but I'm learning now, I guess.

Keep up the good work, I love your fic, especially your Grimmjow. I have a soft spot for him.
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From ANON - Mirrors on December 29, 2010
I could just bawl right now! I had written down a long ass review and when I went to post it my internet connection went caput! *pouts* But I like how Grimmjow in his own way is showing some concern for Karin. Maybe its a love/hate thing. He hates her brother and is 'enjoying' her company (I put enjoying to not sound too vulgar). As for the shadow readers, man they're so annoying but a friend of mine that happens to be one explained that some people reading particularly strong fics are too struck dumb to come up with anything good to say and/or they are kind of embarassed to openly admit liking it. I love darkness and morbid dark humor, reading and writing it brings a 3-dimensional view of the characters and makes the emotions for the readers all the more intense. It would be nice that shadow readers would at least aknowledge that and support the author to show that they're on the right track and writing something meaningful for their literary pleasure. (I could just go on about this.)

What I can't wait to see is Ichigo's reaction to what Grimmjow has done with Karin. *shudders in delight* That's going to be awesome.
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From Bleachwhore on December 29, 2010
I really like this story, not ashamed to admit enjoying the dark ones. I was really hoping since you are using multiple pairing that i would see Gin though. i always like the bad guys more, to me Ichigo is the most boring character in bleach, except when he goes hollow. cant wait to see how things develop between Grimm and Karin. i like how he waited until she was the age of consent, i might be a girl perv but wouldnt like reading about anyone w an 11 yr old.
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From HollowedRose on December 29, 2010
Oh my, I just noticed who's the author of this fic... TA DAM! You, hehe, I was even thinking of writing a review last night saying how much I like it but I was too sleepy to do it. I remember reading the first chapter some time ago and I also remember I wanted more, and that I was sad it was only a one-shot.

I can't wait to see why Ulquiorra is in his resurrection form and I wanna know something about Ichigo, anything. >.>

I like your Grimmjow a lot, I somehow never seem to be able to hate the guy. I also wonder why he's training Karin... x.x

And also how and why did that Fraccion/random Arrancar enter Grimmjow's house. Why was he there in the first place? o.O

Thank you for writing something ^^, I was complaining to a friend about lack of new fics just a few days ago. *is finally happy*
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From ANON - Mirrors: forgot password *winces* on December 26, 2010
Yay! You are keeping the story! Loving the possibility of some Grimm/Karin too (I've seen very rare fanfics for them and they actually have a good chemistry in fanfics. I think it's their personality types. Both tough and gruff, fighters to the core. LOL)I haven't given up on Love, Hate and Something In Between. It's just that I had some computer issues and now there's climate problems where I live (an earthquake just recently) that has everyone walking on eggshells. I have part of the next chap of the story done and some ideas that will be very dramatic and maybe gory for the faint hearted. I won't give too much detail though *mysterious look*. Can't wait to see where Price of Victory will go and how all of the relationships proceed. :-)
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From ANON - Anon on October 06, 2010
LOVE IT!
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From CoffeeGyrl on August 22, 2010
Awww nice yummy possessive UlquiHime. I liked Ulquiorra going after his prize:)
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