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By : NovaAlexandria

From KiraSahari on February 15, 2011
Poor Ulqui hahahaha he is really confused!! It is nice to know that he is not compiting with Grimmy anymore, He is following his instincts, sad but true, poor Ulquiorra didn't have a clue about feelings. I love the fact that him and Grimmy are starting to develop some kind of weird friendship, of course any of them would never admit that xP, mmmmmmmmmmmmm wondering if to conceive there must be not only a willing woman but it must exist some kind of feeling for the man, arrancar, espada, whatever hahahaha xP. Yuzu.... that is going to be another part hard to read. Szayel is a bitch and I hate him, hope Papa Grimm kick his ass soon. And of course hoping some day Ulqui understand feelings and become a good husband and father *sigh* at least is sweet to know that He thinks of Orihime as his mate =) awwwwwwwwwwwww He loves her even if the poor idiot can't understand his own feelings, is nice to know that Hime is learning how to tame him xP. I love you and I hate you at the same time hahahaa, please keep writing, love your story, take care, big bear hug, XoXo.
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From ANON - Onba on February 15, 2011
Ulqui is so clueless and I love it! Ha! How will Grimmjow answer his new question, I wonder?

Awesome chapter!
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From Janiegal on February 15, 2011
yay nanao!~ n protective papa grimmjow.. *hugs self & wriggle* why was szayel so excited when karin said she have a twin? is that a hint? ;D
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From ANON - beliefinkakashi on February 12, 2011
Fantastic! It was a lovely chapter! I cannot wait to find out Yuzu's response to Karin's pregnancy!
Love it!
Good luck, Hope you update soon!
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From ANON - hitsuzen on February 12, 2011
*cries* Maor! I'm so addicted to this story! What was Szayel thinking? He's lucky that Grimmy's disinclined to tattle, Unohana might though if Karin thinks to mention it!

Hah! I was trying to guess who had Matsumoto and I guessed correctly, with how much of a perve you've painted Nnoi and her rather impressive *ahem* assets it seemed an obvious choice. I guessed that Nemu was the other one of Pinky's pets as well. I kinda figured he'd have some degree of desire to claim Mayuri's 'child' particularly as he used her for his Phoenix gestation technique once already. I like how you painted that the 12th division was just like 'here's the new boss, same as the old boss' and the relatively seamless nature of that transition. Working under one barely human madman is probably pretty good prep for working under the slighly less human madman. I wonder if Akon survived, I suspect that he's one of the 'terminations' that you mentioned. Though perhaps not, he had been the longest running seated officer in the division though and I think at some level that would lead him to feel that he had to stand up for the others, which would generally be fatal, on the other hand being around for that long and growing up under Mayuri might have lead to a very great deal of pragmatism. He certainly wasn't shy about modifying his body in emulation of Mayuri.

I'm glad that Nanao gets a division and think it would be good for her. I know Grimmjow is going into crazy nesting mode but I hope that he stays under Starrks protection for a little while longer as leaving Yuzu with the baby is optimal all the way around. Particularly considering her strong maternal instincts and the fact that she's highly unlikely to have children of her own. I really really look forward to next chapter and hope you update soon!
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From HollowedRose on February 12, 2011
At least I am sure I will never have any intention of joining the angry mob, if such mob even exists to begin with =P. I must say I was quite shocked with what happened to Renji, really sad and scary too, I guess Renji is 'dead', or at least his spirit is. Quite ironic how he so easily overpowered his Captain when he struggled so much in the past. As always, loving your fic.
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From ANON - bleachfan7 on February 12, 2011
3rd review attempt--this is so frustrating (seriously annoying site feature)! won't bother retyping long comments again.

thumbs up for chap. love grimkarin interactions, her power which saved her again, uki's willingness to take physical punishment for nanao's benefit, & wondered about how yuzu would get by if grim couldn't protect her. her medical skills are of value even if she's human w/no powers like karin, i'd think, so maybe aizen would still let her live... happy to hear ulquihime's up next since love them bunches too (even more than grimkarin).
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From KiraSahari on February 11, 2011
Glad the information was interesting, same happen to me, HOLY CRAP! O.O
Love your story but you already know that hahahahaha
Hate Szayel with all my guts and I was so happy when daddy Grimm almost kick his ass hahahaha Grimm and Karin are such a lovely couple, they already love each other so much, just hoping that one day Hime and Ulqui have the same, if someone can show Ulqui how to love is Hime, well he already loves her, the problem is that he is a beast xP and hoping that Yuzu gets the job as nanny so she and Stark can get close hehehehe that would be another lovely couple *sigh* take care please, thank so much for the update, can't wait for next chapter, Ulqui and Hime!! yeah!!!, big bear hug =)and I love you even if you make me suffer in some chapters hehehehe
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From ANON - Mofaf1 on February 11, 2011
Hmmm ... Wonder if that slow riatsu drain is what did in Renji and Nemu. Bet they are constantly exposed to it to kerf them virtually dead. If that's the case I wonder what would happen if the exposure ended (preferably permanently) or how Sayael would feel if the riatsu drain was re-tuned to suck up hollow riatsu instead if shinigami/human.

I'm betting Sayael will claim the slow riatsu drain was an important and non-dangerous test when in reality it is quite dangerous. Makes you wonder if he stores the riatsu or what he uses it for. Another possible scenario I could imagine him trying would be to refine the machine so it would secretly drain Aizen's riatsu and let Sayael adapt it to himself to make himself the top barracuda in the soul society pond.

Glad Karin and Grimmjow are working through their issues. I'm still holding out hope for an eventual Yuzu/Starrk pairing (happy one with Starrk the doting daddy of a litter or two of puppies of his own).

Kinda wonder if Unohanna can reverse all the alterations that have been done to the others if given the time and freedom to do so. (like could she restore Soi Fon's and Byakuya's voices if their 'owners' were suddenly gone for good along with Aizen ... But that would still be a long ways off.

Great fic,
Mofaf1
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From ANON - Kazes on February 11, 2011
YAY! HAHA I get to be the 100th review! ... do my reviews still count Novs? Hehe, I like this chapter, ya gotta love a worried Grimmy :p I wonder if others will predict what's coming with Karin and ya know... the next Szayel meeting... ;) YAY! 100 reviews!
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From ANON - Onba on February 11, 2011
Szayel was owned! Go Karin! I wonder why he wanted to drain her, though?

I'm glad Nemu is alive. SzayelxNemu is also a pairing I like, but its so rare!

Great chapter!
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From ANON - beliefinkakashi on February 11, 2011
This story is fantastic!
I've never read a story with Grim/Karin before... that is interesting and new! Too bad they cannot mate, and I cannot believe she is pregnant!
I love your claiming idea! It is brilliant! Its just too bad what happened to Bakuya and Renji, they have it the hardest. I want someone to save them from their fate! T_T But you do what you have got to do!
Love what you have!
Good luck, cannot wait for more!
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From ANON - hitsuzen_hime on February 09, 2011
I suspect you meant sure of his former colleague as opposed to college.

This story is amazing! I had seen it (frequently) and avoided reading it because I typically dislike Grimmjow Het but now I'm fantastically glad that I did. I really look forward to seeing Rangiku (eventually) and I hope there is some peace that can be found for Bya-bo. Death is all that would help Renji now, too sad.

I'm glad that Soi Fon is still resisting where she can, I'm very glad that Gin has been slipping Unohana birth control. Little rebellion, were it matters the most.

This story is epic, I look forward to watching it evolve and conclude. Please keep writing! Your portrayal of the Arrancar, in all their variety and complexity, is truly beautiful.
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From Mirrors1984 on February 08, 2011
Holycrap I haven't reviewed in awhile (bad net connection among other things). But I've read every single chapter including the last one 'Crimson'. I really felt bad for Byakuya and Renji being almost a souless parody of life (I'm just getting poetic again. Always HAPPENS. LOL). It was specially painful since in some way Byakuya understood and felt a bit of pity for his former subordinate (the chapter just impacted me!). I really love fics that push the senses unlike other stuff, so the fact that you delve into territory other writers wouldn't dare touch makes me LOVE reading this! And also... I can't stop wondering about Yuzu's possible fate (why do I have a feeling that it's gonna get messy?). And about your review in my Grimm/OC. Yup, it'll be disturbing to people that have sensitive stomachs. I'm really going to cross a boundary there. *cringe* Hope to see an update soon! =)
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From ANON - blackfox on February 08, 2011
I've been reading this particular story of yours for some time now and while the plot is an interesting 'what if', and the characterizations not far from cannon, I have one problem with the overall story. It's difficult to try to get into a story, start reading and have a sudden spelling error or grammatical mistake throw the whole thing off. I think the spell-check function in whatever word processing program you're using could catch the majority of them with the right settings. The others will require someone with proofreading skills to go over it and make the necessary edits. I see grammar issues that involve punctuation and its placement and a few verb-use problems, as well as a lot of 'passive voice' (while not incorrect, a writer needs to keep it to a minimum). If you like, I can go over each of the chapters you've already posted with this story, make the corrections and highlight the changes in Word 2010. Please let me know if this is something you'd be interested in.
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