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By : NovaAlexandria

From ANON - bleachfan7 on April 06, 2011
loved this chap. one of my faves (the previous ulquihime chap for now wins though). grim is just too adorable & i adore the domesticity of it all amongst the awful setting they are in. can't wait for the ulquihime kid (i hope you are gonna add one) so that we can see how scary espada deal w/2 little super-powered terrors with zero impulse control or common sense. especially ulqui. its gotta pull emotion outta him.

read on lj someone's commentary on this fic (it wasn't so favorable) & wondered if he/she got an advance copy of future chaps. he mentioned more chaps that we've seen posted & threw in that tats gets raped. i really hope that's not so. so much awful stuff has already happened to so many characters i can't bear thinking there's even more horror down the pipeline.

await baby shower w/baited breath. someone please do artwork of ajuga & fam!
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From JOler on April 05, 2011
Hmmm ... Nice chappie. Why do I get the feeling that Ajuga-chan might be able to charm the mean and snarly out of anyone with the possible exception of Aizen. Wonder how Szayel and Nnoitra will react.

I'm sure Szayel will be (literally) tickled pink when he finally gets to see the baby. I can also see him having the normal male, never been a daddy, reaction of ... 'will it break if I touch it' or 'it squeaked! I didn't hurt it did I?' ... Freaking out because he doesn't want Grimmjow to beat the crap out of him, Aizen to punish him, or upset Karin since she could see to either of the two previously mentioned events occurring by just hinting at issues with him to either Grimmjow directly or to Aizen through Unohanna, Grimmjow, or even Stark (who would probably feel obligated to let Aisen-kami know of anything that might affect the baby adversly)

You know Rangecu would want to see the baby. I wonder if Nnoitra would be willing to take her on his leash (literally or figuratively) to see the baby. I'd love to see him terrified of 'breaking' her just by being near her, or maybe just standing back with a brief look of longing (just enough for Rangecu to see how much he wants to be a daddy ... Lol ... Or both ~ Tesra too most likely). I know Grimmjow wouldn't trust Nnoitra or Tesra near his baby, hence the look from across the room as Rangecu gushes and coos at Karin and the baby. ... Anyway ... Probably not gonna happen but fun to imagine.

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From ANON - Black Storm Van Pendragon on April 05, 2011
*chuckles* Well I could look at it as Szayel let slip upon immediately identifying the gender but Karin didn't take it seriously or took note of that, being too distracted with the image and all.

Ah, I see *chuckles and nods in agreement* I can very vividly imagine that, though still I can't help wonder how he would deal with a son. Anyways, I pity Ajuga for having such an instinctual over protective father once she hits that rebellious stage XD The chapter is quite a delightful and amusing read :D

Hmm...I don't know how I feel about kissing. In reality it does look kind of....well, disgusting in a way as you put it (and I've never kissed anyone before mind you, I never really had a relationship at all, not that really I'm interested). But in fantasy it looks hot, so I've no problems reading a story or seeing an artwork or animation of fictional characters kissing but, seeing real people doing it in films is another story.

Whoops, sorry for rambling *comically pitches a tent here and waits patiently for your next chapter*

PS: Just call me "Storm". Black is kind of, weird, I donno why XD
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From ANON - Codry on April 05, 2011
I know it�s hard to �please� all the reviewers. Everyone is asking you something ... and it�s hard to comply with all of them; just as an information: stick to your plan, I�ll be there � reading and reviewing � promise

When did I become a walking clich�?

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From ANON - Codry on April 05, 2011
Happy again � anyway I think I understand why you avoided kissing (not just because you said you do NOT like them, but it�s strange to imagine Karin and Grimmjow kissing � maybe not so strange, but somehow disturbing) :)) I bet you�re screaming at me �Just choose something!!!�

Sorry for the last review ... I am not a Orihime fan (Bleach is divided in two: Rukia and Orihime fans � I�m a Karin fan =)) ), and when I realized how far she and The bat had come � I kind of snapped

But I totally loved this chapter � it was super cute � and somehow refreshing, optimist.
Sooo �. the pervert in me is asking .. when will we see some smexing between Karin and Grimmy � I do not want to see the kitty castrated, but � the sacrifice may be worth it :D

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From ANON - Drix on April 05, 2011
Another awesome chapter, I have to say this is really something. You've put a great deal of work into this, it really is a wonderful piece of fanfiction. I do have a request though, I really would like to see more the interaction of Rangiku and Nniotra, I find them fasinating, considering their personality types and how you're portraying them. I would also like to see more Aizen and Unohana. Other than that I love Karin and Grimmjow and Orihime (who is my favorite character) and Ulquiorra (who's my favorite for Orihime).

At some point it would be nice to see what the survivors are getting up to, especially Yuzu, since I would hoping she would get to stay with Karin and be the couple's sense of normality, and she was a nice addition to the extended family that lives at the Estate.

I am curious if you have any plans for Byakuya to regain his ability to speak, or just get him away from the situation he's in? Or if, like in reality, he has to suffer the situation indefinitly?

One last question, will we ever find out why it is that Karin and Grimmjow could conceive and couples that have been trying for five years could not?
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From ANON - Codry on April 03, 2011
Let us be clear � I am upset � very upset

*not talking with you* � *the next part is my inner speech*

�Even if Uluqiorra(I don�t care how his name is spelled) raped Orihime � now they are on the same level as Grimmjow and Karin � not fair � and what are all those kisses �
I think that Grimmjow KISSED Karin twice � or third times, but I can count them on my fingers.
But of course that Orihime and Mr. U had to be passionate � bleah � I would even dare to say that they made love.

I want kisses � on the lips, because it�s my belief that a kiss can be even more intimate then sex �. The end�

I�m still upset. (but I�ll read your next chapter � just in case something interesting happens � still upset)

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From ANON - Black Storm Van Pendragon on March 29, 2011
....I'm speechlessly am lost for words (in a good way). I knew it will be a girl (though I was hoping it'll be a boy for once *looks sheepish*), probably due to Szayel referring the baby "her" during the first ultrasound and from your "Crossbreeding the Future" trilogy fic where Grimmjow treats Kinomi fondly and proudly like his own daughter and his first child with Nel is a girl, Azul -it became sort of obvious (for whatever reason) that you'd preferably lean on a daughter. Just pointing out my hunch ^^; *shuts up rambling now* Anyhow, thumbs up to your friend Kazes for the name. Ajuga sounds unique and original (it was weird at first but I eventually find myself kind of liking it and curious to know the meaning behind her name aside from the flower).

Looking forward to your next chapter :)
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From ANON - bleachfan17 on March 29, 2011
great chap. grimm's depiction was just so funny & adorable. did you mean he's gotta find them sustenance? karin eats human food, so though he's driven by instinct, will he remember he just has to go to the kitchen or is he gonna go off & try to find a weak hollow & bring it back for karin & baby (like the cat that brings home dead mouse or bird and lays at owner's feet)? karin's usage of pinky's hand was a hoot. making the baby half kitty in appearance was different. the few human/hollow offspring i've read depicted in fic were fully human-like in appearance w/maybe a hollow hole. i hope someone does artwork for the baby or all 3 of them in new baby scene (even better). if so, please post link. glad to hear more coming for ulquihime.
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From ANON - Ambie-chan on March 27, 2011
Wow...this fic is just epic. Completely epic. Never would have paired Grimm with Karin but now I'm wondering why no one else does lol. The way you write them, they're perfect for each other. Brilliant plot, just wow. I can't even properly compliment you! lol Can't wait for the newest chapter!
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From Ulquisgrl on March 26, 2011
This is the first time I have decided to write a review! About a week ago I read the first 27 chapters in a few hours. I just sat at the computer reading nonstop until I read all that was posted. And now I just checked back and was so happy to see you had added a few more chapters! I have found that most people that write 10+ chapters either start out really good and then kinda lose it or they start an awesome story and just never finish it! This is by far the longest story I have read on fanfiction and you have my total attention! I can't wait to see what happens next! I am hooked! You are an awesome writer. While I am reading I am watching the mini movie in my head and it's totally awesome! Please keep on writing and posting and I will keep on reading!
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From ANON - Silva on March 26, 2011
Szayel gets a bit of his...."due"? *bares teeth* If he did something to that childe I sear he WILL be paying for it! (Grimmjow)*snarls* Get in fuckin' line. (me)*blinkblink* Grimmjow?! When the hell did you get here? How- and why- did you break the fourth wall? (Grimm)I heard that 'next chapter' my kitten gets born an' came up here to demand it. (me) Uh, well, I'm sorry but I'm not the author....*points to actual author* That's who you want to be talking to. (Grimm) *raises eyebrow* 'Kay. *whirls on you* GIMME MY KIT! NOW!(me)*smacks in head* Bad kitty. Authors don't like to be threatened and will do horribly vindictive things in retaliation.
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From ANON - Black Storm Van Pendragon on March 23, 2011
*blushes* Uhh, t-thank you for the support, and I'm glad you got my PM, I was a little worried that whatever's going on in FF.net might have also effected PMs ^^;
I'm happy to see their relationship steadily growing, and I soooo can't wait for the next chapter -I've been looking forward for that moment to come *squirms in anticipation*

Actually I don't mind that possible scene between Yuzu and Ichigo, while I understand that the main focus of the story are the 'prisoners' I see nothing wrong with 'temporarily' going outside of the main focus -besides, their discussion does basically involves/relates with the main focus. Just a thought....
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From ANON - Onba on March 22, 2011
This chapter has made me so giddy! Ulquihime forever! I wonder when they will have a baby too?

The baby is coming! I'm so exited! What will he/she look like? Are they a boy or girl? Will he/she have Gimmy's eyes or his hair, maybe both? I can't wait!
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From ANON - bleachfan17 on March 22, 2011
this was an awesome scene! love love love how their bond has grown & ulqui chucked! omg! so tender & so many awwwww moments. i hope there are babies in their future in this fic (you are many chaps in right?) & wait isn't too long (maybe their kid will marry the grimkarin hybrid)...
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