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Reviews for Prize of Victory

By : NovaAlexandria

From JOler on May 28, 2011
Sorry I didn't get to review last chap. Both chaps are excellent. Glad to see Grimmjow agreeing to letting the girls have a 'sleepover' and (after reading both chaps) for Ulquiora agreeing to it ... Too bad all the surviving captives can't be 'sheltered' together in the most (or second most ~ since Aisen would take the best for himself) place while the Espadas, fractiones, taichous, and fukutaichous fought the bugs ... To give the claims and claimers a little less to worry about. (know I'd be worried if I was in either position).

Hmm how to see Yammy gotten rid of ... Aizen use his power to temporarily immobilize him so Szayel can truss him up spread eagle in mid air in an observation room ... Drain almost all of his riatsu ... Then do the observation hehehe ... With internal and external monitors going to collect all possible data ... Insert ONE live captured bug in his rectum via a huge dildo shaped container ... Then monitoring the bug's progress as it eats it's way out of yammy and then finishes the meal ... To see if there are specific targets the bug goes for first as well as any changes (energy or otherwise) that take place while the bug is feeding. Of course by the end the food source would be totally gone but ... Well he did prove useful to Aizen in the end (presuming he pisses Aizen off in some super big way before this all happens and is used as an example.

Due to the two claims rule I guess Byakuya would then be given to one of the three with one claim (Grimmjow, Noitra, or Harribel ... Most likely the last since the two males would probably not want him near their female in the event of another pregnancy. I kind of wonder if Aizen will eventually ask for Harribel or her fractiones to attempt to get pregnant as well since it would still be a mixed breeding pair and two males would make that request a bit easier to fulfill since the fertility of each could be low at any given time, especially after participating with one or two in one night already ...
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From ANON - xoburntofferings on May 28, 2011
YAY!! I love this story so much. I love Grimmjow and Karin pairing and I love how you intertwine everyone's story together. Great Job!!
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From ANON - Lilibet on May 28, 2011
Wow! This story keeps getting better with each chapter. Yammy should get his little yammy cut off before he bites the dust. Can't wait till the next chapter.
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From ANON - Anon on May 25, 2011
Totaly,totaly,totaly LOVE this fic...
So get off you'r thums and do more
chappies PLEASE,PLEASE,PLEASE..O_0..
I want to know what happens next..Keep
up the good work,and if anyone gives ya
flames..XD..Take out you'r flamthrower
and FLAME them back..;)
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From ANON - Black Storm Van Pendragon on May 23, 2011
Before reading the AN I so had a vague feeling on where this is going, at least a some point. This may be a 'filler' chapter to you but it's entertaining, suspenseful and enough of a fun read to keep me wide awake *is feeling sleepy and had just belatedly checked out AFF for any updates* Bonus points for having Grimmjow in his resurreccion -it needs more love~~

Ad for question...hmm...I'd say keep 'em together.
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From djAngelynn on May 23, 2011
I have been following this story for quite some time now, and I am truly sorry for not having reviewed before. It just seemed redundant to me to be posting "great job" as a review every chapter. Introducing the author's question at the end of every chapter is a brilliant move on your part, because it will probably get ghost readers like me to respond in the form of a review.

I am loving your story so far, even if the darker chapters horrify me, and I applaud you for keeping all the characters more or less i/c, especially Karin and Grimmjow. The character development has been well executed, and the interactions between the characters believable. However, you do have quite a bit of spelling and grammatical errors that you might want to take note of, even if they do not detract from the story in general.

That said, I like the interactions between Grimmjow and Karin in this chapter, and one gets hints of how in tune they are with the other. These locusts seem to be developing into a real threat, and I can't wait to see how this plays out.

And to answer your question, I think that it is probably unnecessary to split the story when major time skips occur, since you are essentially telling the same story. It would probably be better to keep it all together in one story, and add in indicators of a major time skip, like "5 Years Later" or something. This is just a suggestion, though; it is still the author's preogative.

Wow. That was a long first review. XD
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From ANON - bleachfan7 on May 21, 2011
the grimkarin scene was sweet & sexy. still hoping someone will do artwork of ajuga--she sounds so adorable! heck, the scene w/karin, hana, & ajuga sleeping together makes a great lil family scene if i had any art talent.

can't wait till the ladies are all under one roof. sisterhood time! plus, maybe hime will get more of the baby bug if she's around hana & ajuga. am hoping for a chance for the ladies to kick butt & prove their worth/badassness.
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From ANON - Bright on May 21, 2011
Still enjoying your story. I'd say leave the filler in, I, and others I'm sure are really enjoying your writing style.
As an idea for a small divergence, you might try doing a pairing with Nell/Ichigo. Could even do a threesome with Rukia. Since hollows seem to value the strength of their mates, that pairing would make sense. Could possibly even involve a pregnancy.

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From angelcakes4611 on May 18, 2011
Just finished reading all 38 chaps and I am eagerly awaiting the next one. I never thought about karin and grimmjow being a couple but the way u portrayed them in this story has turned me into a shipper :)
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From ANON - Black Storm Van Pendragon on May 15, 2011
Interesting and hilarious filler, pity it had to be cut short so abruptly, b'awww~~ X'D

Hmm, IDK but I could imagine Ulquiorra turning whiter than possible 8D (j/k) Ah, he would no doubt try to restrict Orihime from doing anything reckless like an over protective parent or rather not leave her side like ever. Poor Orihime, I wonder how and when she would snap from his 24/7 monitoring. Ah, I'm rambling again.......
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From ANON - The nameless one on May 15, 2011
You will not fight Again.
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From JamieGib on May 15, 2011
Here's my essential problem: It's all well and good that Karin, Nanao, Ukitake, and now Orihime have managed to find a detente with their captors. In Karin and Orihime's case, they were lucky enough to fall into the care of Espada that had some type of honour and the ability to respect. Starrck, on the other hand, has always been more lackadaisical than anything else, so I can understand the equilibrium established between him and his 'guests'. The problem is, for the others, this is just not true. If you just wanted to write about affection and understanding and love between disparate indidividuals that would be one thing, but including the chapters with Byakuya, Rangiku, Gin, Toushirou, et al, makes this more than that. These people are being tortured...sexually and otherwise. Somewhere, somehow, sometime there has got to be a wake-up call. It can't all be light and sunshine and swimming while comrades are walking around like zombies. Since Karin is the main focus of your story she's the one that's going to have to wake up and face the truth. She can't be allowed to hide behind Grimmjow and the miracle baby without having to face the nightmare reality of so many others. Not just the main 'Bleach' characters of course, but the other women your story mentioned being 'claimed' as well. It is rape, and there is no going around that.
I'm definitely not saying that your story is incredibly addictive...I want to find out what happens, but there is only so long you can concentrate on the idyllic before the ugly details you've already introduced will intervene. I know that the dark stuff is hard to write, and the light stuff flows so incredibly easily, but you have to pay the piper and write it. This world of love bubble Karin is currently living in cannot last.
That's my rant. I truly believe that what you are writing is heading somewhere grand and dark and enlightening all at the same time, and I'm along for the ride with you. But, there is some serious retribution waiting to be doled out here, and some serious, heart-breaking questions that need to be asked. I can't wait.

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From ANON - Codry on May 14, 2011
Did you ever have this insane idea of coupling Karin with Aizen? I�m asking because I have the insane idea of coupling Aizen with Karin.
Don�t worry I�m still a total fan of Grimmjow Karin � just curious. I checked your other fics and you are a big fan of crack parings (just like me :D). I wanna know if it crossed your mind.

Also thanks for the fast update :) Good luck :D

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From ANON - Codry on May 14, 2011
Great chapter � poor little Grimmy-kitty scared of water � I wanna hug him �AOTCH!! You should have warned me that he bites
BAD KITTY!!!

Did you just say sex?

As for Mr U�s reaction � I think that he � dunno � srry. I cannot see Orihime jumping off a cliff.

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From ANON - bleachfan7 on May 14, 2011
this was fun. papa grim is cute & sweet & a nice counterpoint to his savagery in battle. glad hime is shown being competent in heated moment. her power is so often underutilized in fic & esp in manga given the premise that they are godlike & can reject reality. can we assume ulqui has been doing some training w/her too? as for ulqui seeing her jump from cliff, he'd probably say something in his monotone but once home do the 'you could have died must have you now' sex from a few chaps back. am hoping we'll see both couples getting hot & heavy & reaffirming bond (maybe making babies?).
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