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By : NovaAlexandria

From chevenga on June 06, 2011
If you're still deciding how Yammy should die, I'd like to see him suffer a fate I read in a Mercedes Lackey novel: get trapped in his mind reliving the horror he's inflicted on others until he truly repents. Since he's probably incapable of repenting, he would suffer for a long, long time. How to achieve this... Well, not really sure, but if Aizen will be sticking around and not killed, his zanpakuto could do this. And there are dozens of kido spells that aren't documented and that you could probably invent.

Just as much as killing Yammy off properly, though, I ask you to inflict some serious vengeance on the Kuchiki "family" who not only forced Byakuya into this situation but hassle him all the time too. Only Rukia and Byakuya deserve the Kuckiki name anymore.

Also wanted to say that I'm quite enjoying the story. I usually exclusively read m/m stories, but something about this one's description pulled me in to try the first chapter, and that hooked me. Now that I've accustomed my eyes to skim over any explicit het sex, I'm in for the long haul. This whole paragraph is meant to be a compliment, really. Kudos for writing a complex, interestng story and characters I love to hate.
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From GlassesandWhatnot on June 05, 2011
Love your story soooo... much. However, I dislike how karin is now super powerful can do things that humans/shinigami aren't supposed to be able to do, she's like Ichigo, she just get stronger and stronger even when it's impossible and she's had way less training than other characters, she hasn't hit the point of overkill yet like Ichigo has but i feel like she is creeping closer and closer. I do like Nnoitra and Rangiku's pairing though and would like to see more of it. While i do love grimm/karin their relationship feels so domestic right now and I would be eager to see more drama and spice to it later. Also... POOR BYAKUYA!!! DIE YAMMY!
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From ANON - Codry on June 04, 2011
Srry for the late review, but like any other student I�m in session �. Anyway I�m happy that I passed my algebra exam :))

I really felt bad for Byakuya :( You can always add an OC named Codry that will kill him; dunno how yet, but � I�ll come with an idea.

I think that the only person that has the power to kill Yammy is Aizen. Let�s be serious, some locusts cannot hurt the Zero Espada, but I can see Yammy piss off Aizen, because he �meddled� in his business (which can be Karin and her daughter .. or even Hana)
So � since Aizen is such a �good guy� Yammy will have a painful death � a very painful death. I cannot see the �kami� rape a prehistorical ape, but I�m sure there are better ways to make someone suffer, apart from rape.

Or he can let someone else do the job �.

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From ANON - Risse on June 03, 2011
I really like this fanfic! I read the first 37 chapters straight through in one day even though i had exams to study for >.< lol
Can't wait to see where you take this unconventional pairing. I hope Yammy dies as slowly and torturous as possible
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From djAngelynn on June 01, 2011
I really like the interaction between Byakuya and Karin and really hope to see more of that in the future chapters. I must confess that I skipped through most of the Yammy/Byakuya moments, mostly because I don't have the stomach for it, but I think that was the intention anyways.

In response to your question, I would like to see Yammy killed in the most brutal way possible, preferably being shredded to bits by Senbonzakura. Although, it would likely not be possible, given that Yammy has the Claim over him. Perhaps you could have Rukia to be the one to kill him instead. I like the idea of Rukia being the one to save her brother, and by extension, the Kuchiki clan, although I'm not quite sure how that would play out, since power wise, Yammy is stronger than Rukia.
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From JamieGib on May 31, 2011
So, I had to go away and think about your question on how Yammy should die. That was after I read your last disturbing chapter with him and Byakuya. (You know you're doing your job when your readers have to go away and collect their thoughts before reviewing.) And, this is my idea. Byakuya regains Senbonzakura and releases in its bankai state. Since he can direct the petals with his hands lets explore how exact his control of them is. I think he should send them down Yammy's throat, up Yammy's ass, and, in a show of precision targetting--right down the slit of his penis. Oh, how glorious a revenge would that be. Not ripped to shreds from the outside in, but from the inside out, in an almost exact duplication of what Yammy has been doing to him! Can't wait to read the end of this story. I am looking forward to much vengeance and death and destruction. Bring it on!
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From ANON - Dark on May 31, 2011
I would have Yammy die in the most humiliating and painful way possible! Like have him know how it feels to be in Byakuya's place. I also really enjoy Byakuya and Karin's interaction so I really do hope you have more in store or us!(Also there interaction has actually had me looking for ByakuyaXKarin but don't worry GrimmjowXKarin are my top fav!) Anyways, Can't wait for the next chapter!!!
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From JOler on May 31, 2011
Hmmm ... An alternative torture/death for Yammy ... Once Szayel determines the gestation/breeding cycle of the bugs ... Have Yammy totally piss off Aisen, have his abilities neutralized for a short time while he is handed over to Szayel. Once Szayel gets hold of him a few 'bug eggs' are emplaned into his scrotum and penis ... Then a dormant bug is implanted in the muscular ring of his rectum (the bug to be undrugged if he tries to rid himself of the other bugs). That way he has a choice ... Keep his dick and balls and let the bugs hatch and start feasting on him there ... Or castrate himself and the bug start eating him ass first.
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From ANON - Ambie-chan on May 30, 2011
Hmmm....is it bad that I check the AFF Bleach Archive regularly for a select number of stories and this is one? NAH! Lol I hardly ever look into new fics on this site but simply keep a check on older ones...like yours! This story is so brilliant, from the characters to the plot. And yes, Yammy needs to die. Preferably a slow, agonizingly painful, torturous death. Should I feel guilty for that? I don't think so. How would I kill Yammy....rip his guts out and have the other Espada deem him weak and end him. Torturous enough? Not quite but close ;)
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From ANON - Onba on May 29, 2011
Hm, how would I kill Yami? Painfully of course, and slowly. Eaten alive by locusts, perhaps? Oh! How about executed by Aizen! Its plausible, Yami excels at being stupid and violent, never a good combination. Aizen would enjoy it too, I'm sure.
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From ANON - bleachfan7 on May 29, 2011
skipped most of this for b/c its a dark yammy/bya abuse one, but did read snippet of the tea session w/karin & seeing hime & tats. am happy he got a chance to talk w/karin some. hope yama dies painfully and slowly of course, preferably being violated like he does to byaku regularly.
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From ANON - bright on May 29, 2011
For killing off Yami, here's an idea: have him bicker with Harribel at a meeting. Aizen could then be very cross with both of them, and to settle the argument have them fight to the death WITH their claims alongside them. Would be nice to see a 2v2 battle with mr kuchki trying to figure out a way to harm yami the entire time. Afterwards you could have harribel claim byukua as a prize, and have orihime restore his speech.

Might be nice to have inter-espada conflict going on. I think harrible and her claim could easily take yami and his is byukua was trying to help them.
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From jensofia on May 28, 2011
I haven't got around to reading chapter 40 but I skipped to the end (you know so I could find out where in the chapter the rape was) and I saw the question on how should you kill Yammy. And before I started reading the chapter I had already made up my mind on how Yammy should die because you made me hate him so much for what he did for Byakuya. I think he should be spits-ed to death with either a pole, spear, sword or really what ever would be long enough to get the job done and ram it up his butt all the way through his mouth.
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From Ulquisgrl on May 28, 2011
It makes my day whenever I see that you've updated this story! And I must say, this is my favorite question so far! How would I kill Yammy? It would definitely be something very, very painful. Although, I think that I would prefer that he actually be kept alive and castrated and tortured and raped severely over and over again. He needs to suffer quite a bit for everything he's done to poor Byakuya! I'm all for cruel and unusual punishment! I can't wait to see what you have in store for Yammy......
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From JOler on May 28, 2011
Forgot to mention ... Szayel would be asked to surgically modify Yammy the same way he did Byakuya to make it impossible for Yammy to make threats, call spells, or beg for mercy. As for the bug ... Baseline readings of all possible types would be done beforehand then evaluated against readings after the feeding ... Then the bug would be dissected to compare with a non-fed dissected one.
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