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From ANON - Tao on June 24, 2011
I started reading this a few nights ago and finally caught up on all the chapters. To be completely honest, I have yet to completely read through a full story, let alone one 40+ chapters long. This one just caught my attention and managed to hold it. It's definitely an interesting concept, and I like the alternate take on the war outcome, but I'm trying to piece together at which point this story begins to deviate. You mentioned Aizen and his wings, so it was after Gin's attempt to kill him, but it had to have been before his fight with Ichigo because Ichigo is still really powerful.

Anyway, short of that it's pretty easy to follow. Many of the "twists" or surprise things were pretty easy for me to guess, such as Karin being able to "claim" someone. The first time she mentioned being able to infuse her Reiatsu into Objects I suspected she'd be able to do just that.

I'm glad you also take the time to address the small things, such as when she was first learning shunpo, you made it a point to mention that she did infact spend a few additional hours with Nanao to perfect it, despite that being a chapter later. Keeping track of these small points makes all the difference to me with stories.

One thing I'm curious about though is if you will ever make it possible for other Shinigami to "claim" Arrancar also. The only thing that is really different from what Karin can do, and what Shinigami can do, is that she's able to "see" the reiatsu to learn what to do. I don't see why she couldn't just teach the others how to issue a claim.

Anyway, just some things I've been tossing around in my head while reading. It really is a good story though so far, It'll be interesting to see how you end it.
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From djAngelynn on June 24, 2011
Many thanks to your boyfriend, and you too, for the multiple chapters post.

I only just caught up, and I'm just about dying to know what is it about Karin's blood that is so intriguing. I confess that I didn't foresee Karin's ability to cast claims by touch, although you only stopped short of hitting us over the head with the hints. Oh dear.

I wonder how Szayel is going to fare, and I really hope he becomes something like Nel, because the thought of Chibi!Szayel fills me with GLEE.

Yammy seems to care for Byakuya, albeit in some sick, twisted way of his, and it sort of softens me towards him, although not enough for me to not want him dead in the slowest, most brutal way possible. Glad to see that Byakuya still has some fighting spirit in him. I love Byakuya, so I would hate to see him broken. I'm not quite sure what the elders would have spoken to Yammy and Byakuya about, although it apparently involves eggs??

The Tatsuki/Tesra pairing threw me off somewhat, because it does seem rather random, but I would love to see how that plays out, especially since I adore the way you have written Tesra thus far, and I want a happy ending for both him and Tatsuki, and together sounds good. LOL.

To answer a question you posed a few chapters back, my favourite pairings are HitsuKarin and IchiRuki. The former I have shipped since episode 132 of the anime because I think Karin brings his emotions out, and also because I honestly cannot stand Momo in the manga. The only time I probably had any sort of liking for her was in the anime's filler Tales of Zanpakutou arc. And IchiRuki because I think Ichigo needs strong girl how can fend for herself instead of one in constant need of rescue.
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From XenotheWise135 on June 22, 2011
I'm a big fan of this story, and I enjoy reading chapters on a regular basis, but this is my first time reviewing a new chapter. And the reason I am is because of this suprise paining you just introduced. If you had come to me and said: "How about a Tesla/Tatsuki pairing?", I'd have called you crazy. But the way they met, how things just... Came together, makes it a pretty cool plot device. I always liked how you portrayed Telsa anyways, with the whole "Borderline Gynophobia" thing, and am glad to see him more involved.

I give this chapter 5/5 man (girl, whatever, its just how I talk), and am really looking forward to the next one.
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From ANON - Karin on June 22, 2011
Love this story and I loved this chapter. Great pairing by the way. I was kind of expecting it to be Taksuki for some reason and I was right. I had started to read this on fanfiction and when I read that you had it posted here I decided to come to this site to read more. I was surprised to find that this one as a lot more action and is not just centered around Karin and Grimmjow. I am a HitsuKarin lover but this story just blows my mind. I was looking for a fic that wasn't HitsuKarin and the. I just fell in love with this one. I can't wait to read more of this story.
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From JamieGib on June 22, 2011
Actually I was thinking more of Rangiku and Tesla because he's always been so kind to her, it almost seemed like he had a crush on her. Oh, well. As for Byakuya and (ugh) Yammy it better not be some form of male pregnancy because then I would HAVE TO BARF all over my computer and I really don't want to have to do that. Oh, and I don't feel bad about Szayel at all...I say let him get the shit beat out of him and die a very painful, screaming death. Really good chapters, by the way! lol
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From NightPredator on June 22, 2011
Okay the whole interaction between Tatsuki and Tesra was way too adorable. And I totally love your boyfriend for convincing you to post all these chapters. I was very happily surprised to see how many were posted.

You are a really amazing writer
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From ANON - bleachfan7 on June 22, 2011
thx for posting multiple chaps! & thanks for rape-free bya/yam chap. guess poor bya is gonna have to carry baby (& hopefully not switched into a chick). hope yammy gets less rapey & more nice/tender w/ulqui (unreciprocated love, maybe?) though i still want him to get it before fic ends for he awful behavior.

still think power-wise, there's no reason for orihime to not be able to fix szayzel (regardless of panicked chibi-szyazel's statement) if she could revive a dead menoly & re-fill the whole in ichi's chest after 1st fight w/ulqui. can't see what rationale could be used for rejection to fail, though a delay for some reason that lets chibi szayzel have more trials & tribulations could be VERY entertaining! can't wait for the convo w/karen where he's compelled to spill truth.

yes, pairing of tesla/tatsuki in this au sounds great! you've made him such a decent, low key guy, i wanted him to have some happiness too, & of course love tats. she's gonna get her wish from earlier chap, so thx!!!

a post battle ulquihime lemon now that they are together as mates would be great! as much as i love the grimkaren the original set up of fic was ulquihime & am very much missing their storyline. pleeeze add more ulquihime. don't make them background characters.
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From ANON - Onba on June 21, 2011
Damn stubborn Kurosakis! Now we have to wait to know whats going on. *pout*

I think I understand wait Kuchki elders are talking about but is it going to be Byakuya's kid or Yami's? Its most likely Byakuya's I guess since the elders probably want a blood heir, and the fact that Arancar have difficulty breeding.

So that is the secret pairing you were talking about! I am both surprised and tickled! Lol! Tatsuki is rather forward!
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From JOler on June 21, 2011
Sigh ... Was so hoping to see Szayel and Tatsuki have a little trist ... In the interest of science of course...but maybe if Ulquiora agrees to let Tesra claim Tatsuki and Szayel gets to be his older self once more ... A monitoring agreement might be reached to see if Tatsuki will get pregnant relatively soon too. Of course the fact that Tatsuki is wanting to submit to the claim and the fact that the stress levels in that pairing could also support the theory that high stress is part of the problem with conception rates. I guess that if I can't get the pairing I was hoping for then this one is a very close second and I'm sure Orahime will do her best to 'persuade' Ulquiora to give in to Tatsuki's request with the underlying hint that if Tesra ever does anything that seriously upsets Tatsuki .... Well Ulquiora can always 'discuss' the situation with Tesra in a way to placate both girls, and Nnoitra would probably have little say in the situations since Tatsuki technically is still Ulquiora's property. Can't see Tesra mistreating Tatsuki in any way though ... He'd probably be more likely to castrate anyone who upset her than allow any harm to come to her. It would be great if Tatsuki and Rangeku both went through pregnancy together ... And Tesra and Nnoitra being anxious daddies together.

Oh and .... Thank you ... Thank you ... Thank you .... Glomp squeeeeeeee
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From JOler on June 21, 2011
Yammy might be caring when Byakuya is seriously injured but he's still a serious bas*ard most of the time. I do wonder what he talked to Szayel about that Byakuya tuned out.

Squeeeeeee glomp ... Thanks again for a quickly posted chapter.
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From JOler on June 21, 2011
Poor little Szayel ... Literally ... Wonder if Karin might have to convince Grimmjow and Starrk to let chibi Szayel stay in Karin's care until he can be made a grown up again. At least Grimmjow would have a full arrancar 'son' to teach and cuff upside the head ...

Glomp and thanks for getting her to post another chapter so soon ... Squeeeeeeee
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From ANON - gollumsfriend on June 21, 2011

To the dear boyfriend of the author.... :D .....thanks so much for talking her into posting all four of these recent chapters at once!! It's been wonderful reading the entire 'scene' and not having to wait for updates (not that you make us wait very long anyway, but you get what I mean!) :)

Really love this story and just normally do the 'ratings' and not review....but really felt the need to show mah love and appreciation to boyfriend after being prompted twice. LOL

Can't wait for the next chapter! (as always!) And I LOVE the idea of Tatsuki and Tesra!! She does need to be claimed for her safety, and he won't mistreat her in any way. It's funny to think that a "kind/innocent and sweet" arrancar exists, but Tesra definitely fits the description. I'm glad Tatsuki was the one to initiate the request, as it makes the whole thing that much cuter! Perhaps she will have to guide him through the rest, too..... *snickers*

Keep up the great job!
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From ANON - Dark on June 21, 2011
Lots of
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From ANON - Black Storm Van Pendragon on June 21, 2011
Oh gwad, chibi Szayel...that...is...just...epic. I don't know whether to feel sorry for him or laugh out loud, or both *wipes away tears* XD Ooooh I can't wait for the next chapter~~*squirms*

Tatsuki and.....Tesra? That is a crack pairing I absolutely so did not see coming *comically deadpans* Truthfully I thought about Starrk, but....Tesra? ...My brain's still trying to wrap around it...
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From JamieGib on June 21, 2011
Frankly, unless he has a very important role to play in your story it would've been much better to let Ichigo kill Szayel, I still haven't forgotten what he did to Renji, and what he allowed Renji to do to Byakuya. That makes him imminently disposable no matter how Karin feels about him. Of course, having gotten that off of my chest, I'll just sit back and follow along after you.
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