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Reviews for Prize of Victory

By : NovaAlexandria

From ANON - Mori Kinji on July 07, 2011
First off, I wanna say that you have corrupted me, utterly and completely - not that I'm complaining, mind you, for opening my brains into such a lustrous world of Grimmjow/Karin. I've been quite a staunch supporter of HitsuKarin (though truthfully, I just adore Karin too much and don't really care much who she is with, excluding OCs) as long as she is the main character. Also, I'm not much of a smut/erotica sort of reader but you truly hooked me with Prize of Victory. Granted, I love the dark themes that came along with it and the whole violence jazz shcbangz thing.

I followed (stalked) you from fanfiction.net due to curiousity since you've mentioned that it's much more darker here and to my pleasant surprise, the story is much more farther along than ff.net! This 'trip' certainly made me feel like a pirate who found a treasure chest on an abandoned island with many more treasures awaiting for their turn since the story is unended yet.

I love how you have developed the relationships for each character, showing briefly about their lives and cleaning up the readers curiousity, tying loose ends. Little Hana and Ajuga are absolutely adorable! Though I wonder if Ajuga will gain a human form as she grows older and her current form be her ressurecion. Also, it'd be rather hilarious if Karin gets knocked up again due to that unique DNA (partially to see Grimmjow in a frenzy again, though it might be more amusing to see him in a craze if Karin gets kidnapped by said drone's master :D).

It's really interesting how the story has developed so far and I can't help but to wonder - are the drones working for someone from hell (since from what I've computed, the drone's master should be of a different species. If not, an additional special ability for a noble family) or one of the lost noble family. Of maybe, someone from the true King's Castle? Since, ya'know, the King's Key opens the gate to the true King or something like that. And if Aizen's whole kami thing might be an ascension but not yet the King's King or something. You've truly made my imaginations run wild in trying to analyze even though I know for sure that The Person, is definitely Karin's ancestor or maybe her Grandpapa.

Finally, for this week's question, I'd say Grimmjow (sorry Karin), or Syazel (kinky kinky).

All in all, I really love reading your fic. It's hard to find such an engaging fanfiction around anymore that truly spurs me to write a long essay as a review. I can't wait for the next chapter and hope that this fic will last for a long long time (yes I love this THAT much). Thank you for your marvelous job so far and please keep it up! :D

Your Stalker,
Mori
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From ANON - sarah on July 06, 2011
WAAAAH KAWAIIIII~

I love this story, I spent like 2 days straight just reading it!! Start to chapter 48, and wow!!! This was good. I loved the way the smut just added to the plot not took away from it, and not in too corny a way.

Wonderful. Just wonderful!!

~Sarah
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From jensofia on July 05, 2011
Loved the way you handled your Tesla/Tatsuki chapter. Also I was worried that Tesla lived with Nnoitra in your fanfic (I don't think you made that all that clear that he didn't in previous chapters) and if that was the case Nnoitra might direct some of his violent outbursts at Tatsuki then Tesla wouldn't be able to do much about it. Looks like that's not as likely to happen as I was afraid it was.

By the way I have thought of something funny. You know how Grimmjow was using Karin's pregnancy to one up Ulquiorra well I thought that if you had Both Orihime and Tatsuki get knocked up about the same time and before she moves in with Tesla it would cause some confusion over who the father is to people who don't know what's really going on. Then have Ulquiorra let Grimmjow believe he got them both pregnant at first just to piss him off.

The best Arrancar to have tied to my bed would be Grimmy since he would have the most priceless facial expression in that situation.
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From Ulquisgrl on July 03, 2011
Love the latest chapter! I found Tesra's "first time" to be quite entertaining! Now which Arrancar would I have chained to my bed? Does it have to be just one? I would love to have both Grimmjow and Ulquiorra. But if I can only have one, sorry Grimmy, I am just way too obsessed with Ulqui! Actually, he's chained to my bed right now, at least he was last time I checked.......well, at least in my dreams!
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From ANON - Karin on July 03, 2011
If I had any arrancar chained to my bed. It would be Grimmjow or stark. Those two or my favorite ones. I can't get enough of them. Love love loved this chapter. The pairing is great and I wouldn't be suprised if you made Tatsuki pregnant. Update soon!
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From JOler on July 03, 2011
The chapter is fine. Actually I'm probably not going to quit reading unless you write about something that seriously distresses me since I can opt to skip a chapter if it distresses me. I might pout because I don't care for a particular pairing but I can always hope that in the next fic you'll give my choice of pairing a try ... I can wait ...
Now then ... If you utterly obliterate one or more of my favorite characters there might ... MIGHT ... be an issue with my reading the fic.

As for my espada of choice? ... Aaaargh ... I can't decide ... First off I'm not a Dom type so THEY wouldn't be the one held prisoner ... and which one I'd like to spend time with would depend on my mood at the moment.

All night long ... Tesra ... Pigs are rumored to have the most stamina and staying power of any animal on Earth

Slow and cuddly ... Starrk ... He seems the type to just relax and take it slow and easy and be content to cuddle a lot

Experimenting ... Szayel ... of course

Oral play ... Nnoitra ... he's got the tongue for it

Hard and fast ... Grimmjow ... He's the ruff type

A challenge ... Ulquiora ... it would be fun to make him react

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From ANON - bleachfan7 on July 02, 2011
happy tats deflowering was consensual & non-violent. it was rather funny how quick ulqui was in getting rid of her. the descriptions of tesla's brain cells were the funniest part of chap.

i'd have grimmy chained. luv ulqui, but he's a little too slim & emotionless for my taste if he were a real human.

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From ANON - Nightqueen on July 02, 2011
Love it! love it! Love it! I think this pairing is going to be one of my favorites and I hope we see more of their developing relationship! You're a very skilled storyteller and I look forward to each chapter!!
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From XenotheWise135 on July 02, 2011
Great chapter again. It was cool to see that level of akwardness that plagued that whole chapter, mixed with hilarity and a tad bit of sexy time.

As of the question of the week... I'm male (one of the few) so my choice is pretty much default. NEL freakin' TU!!!

Oh, and for the record, I don't know how you're going to explain Isshin's "past", but my theory always was that he was the ex-captain of the 11th squad. In order to escape and "elope" with Misaki, he cooperated with Kenpachi to fake his death. Notice how Isshin only has the sleeves of his old haori, and Kenpachi is missing his?
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From JOler on June 28, 2011
Awwww ... Chibi Szayel is soooooo cute, can we keep him that way for a while ... Please? And maybe give him a few other accidental chibis to play with? (Grimmjow, Ulquiora, and Nnoitra would be interesting and very distressed candidates ~ of course they'd all probably earn the 'Does NOT Play Well With Others' T-shirt ...

Ok I know that won't happen but it is fun to imagine all the mischief they could get into, especially around their teenage phase ...

Love the chapter by the way.

As for a little bun for Orahime ... If the major factor of concern is stress then she, Rangeku, and Nemu might all three be pleasantly surprised in the near future ... Not sure how the guys would react though (personally I'd love to see Nnoitra faint at the news ...).
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From ANON - Onba on June 28, 2011
"How long to you think it will be before Orihime finally conceives?"

Well, there is a fine line between what I think and desire and as a (horribly) bias individual I would have to say; soon! But seriously, I am guessing it will be soon enough so that play dates with Ajuga will be possible.
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From ANON - Karin on June 27, 2011
I say that orihime will conceive in three to four months. Idk. I can't wait to read the next update. I am in love with this story.
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From ANON - bleachfan7 on June 26, 2011
hope hime has already conceived & just doesn't know it yet. it would be sweet if the key to conception was having a real relationship or 'love' between partners (as opposed to stress of being regularly raped by another species--way to make a womb hostile). since ulqui & hime have been mates for a while now, she could be preggers w/o stretching believability. chibi ulqui batboy would be so adorable (maybe w/auburn hair or her normal lips instead of black ones so baby has something of hers).

love how vulnerable pinky is. the friendship w/karen & affection w/ajuga is sweet too. can't imagine what they are gonna make bya do if not mpreg or gender change. look forward to next chap too.
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From ANON - Nightqueen on June 26, 2011
Wow!! these last few chapters have been amazing! I love the new pairing and can't wait to see more of them I also love Karin and all the relationships she's developing as the story progresses! Your a wonderful and gifted storyteller! and I can't wait until you unravel more of the mystery surrounding Karin blood!
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From Ulquisgrl on June 24, 2011
Hello! I usually only check out AFF about once a week, hoping to see if you have updated! I ended up reading chapter 43 the same day you had posted it. I am so used to you only updating about one chapter a week that typically I wouldn't have checked AFF for another week. But for some reason, I came back a few days later and saw that you had updated again! Thanks so much for the note at the top about the quad post, I usually just scroll down to the last chapter and read, I would have been so confused! I was psyched to see that you had posted FOUR chapters together! A HUGE THANK YOU to your AWESOME boyfriend!!!!! Hopefully, he'll convince you to do it again sometime! I actually read this days ago and didn't have time to review, so I wanted to make sure that I came back to review just to say THANK YOU to you and your boyfriend! I really do look forward to reading this story. I have never read anything with Tesra and Tatsuki. And if you had asked me before I read chapter 46 what I thought about them as a couple, I would have said NO WAY! But after reading the way you wrote them, they seem like a great couple. Tesra seems so sweet, and Tatsuki really needs a nice guy. I can't wait to read where this goes. And poor Szayel! I can't believe that I actually feel bad for him! I never cared for his character that much, but I love what you've done with him! I am shocked that you actually have me feeling sympathy for him, and I was relieved when I read that you would not be killing his character off! I can't wait until you post the next chapter! I am just hoping that you still update weekly, you wouldn't make us wait 4 weeks because of the quad post, would you? NO WAY, you're not that cruel, and hopefully your boyfriend wouldn't let you.........
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