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From ANON - Karin on July 12, 2011
Can't wait to read the next chapter. It sounds cute. This chapter was great. The person that I think will be a perfect match for Ukitake would be Unohana. That is who I thought he would always be with for some reason. She is like a mother figure and he is lime a father figure.
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From JamieGib on July 12, 2011
Poor Gin! Whatever shit he's caused in the past, he's more than paid for now. His single minded devotion to keeping Rangiku, and now Retsu, safe, more that exculpates him for the bad things he once did. After all, he did do them for a 'good' reason (even if he enjoyed it while he was doing it). Gin is one of those great undiscovered characters who linger behind the scenes for much too long, and then they die and you realize you really would've liked to learn more about them. That's why I'm pleased he's still in your story. Also...I've been meaning to tell you this for a long time, but I really think your portrayal of Aizen is probably the best one on this site. I haven't ever seen Aizen as a sexual being. Sex, for him, would be a means to an end, and not the end in itself. Others have portrayed him as rapist and sadist, and lover, but to me he never seemed like sex would be a necessity for him so those stories about him never ring true to me. That he would use sex as a weapon, absolutely, but probably not do the deed himself but have someone else do it for him. I think the only thing that ever truly turns Aizen on is power, pure and simple. Your Aizen pursues sex as a means to have a child, but it's all 'wham-bam-thank-you-ma'am' and I'm sure Unohana is forever grateful for that! The Aizen that falls in love and chases others (It seems to be mostly men, for some odd reason lol), is giving up that power by doing so. Just thought I should share!
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From ANON - bleachfan7 on July 12, 2011
i don't think gin deserves all that torture, aizen & yammy do. gin did bad things trying to not have aizen suspect betrayal was coming, so even though he had good intentions, he did have some punishment coming. its very different from the true evil of an aizen or the stupid selfish brutality of a yammy. really, i don't think i'd even wish all that's happened to gin in this fic on aizen, its just too horrific to wish it on anyone. its akin to what we christians expect hell will be like--eternal endless pain & torture.

are there condoms in sereitei? for tats i mean... actually, ori can undo any conception that may accidentally befall tats, now that i think about it. also, am sure its not gonna happen, but if ori could get to gin, she could reverse all the damage done to gin's body & make him strong again, so when time comes for aizen to die, its gin after all that he's been thru to finally strike the killing blow. that way he finally redeems his vow of vengeance for rangiku. curious to learn who else bugs are gonna go for that has royal blood. wish ori was one of them since i'm wishing there were more ulquihime in story (again, know that's not happening).
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From JOler on July 11, 2011
Ouch ... I realize why Aisen is doing all that but I do feel bad for Gin since he has done things to protect his other friends. I hold Aisen more to blame since he started corrupting Gin while Gin was a little kid and more or less positioned himself in a parental/mentor roll in Gin's early life. I believe it was Aisen's corrupting influence and Gin's view of Aisen as a father substitute that led Gin to make some poor choices and decisions at critical times.

Personally I'd love to see two weekly posts (more on occasion) since you are so far ahead ... Like on Wednesdays and Saturdays or some similar split.
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From JOler on July 11, 2011
The appointment that got interrupted was cute (except for Yammy ... He just has this way of making the cutest or most romantic scene do a massive crash and burn). Glad Karin was able to stop Szayel's machine from exploding ... and that little Hana is of interest as well to him ... it's going to make her sooo happy.

I hope Yammy's samples all get lost and Byakuya's samples are the only samples used. Since no clue is given concerning the potential egg donor I'd say it would be nice if it was another 'royal decendent' so the 'mystery strand' can get stronger. I wonder if Szayel will insist on blood samples from Byakuya if the fertilization takes place (and blows up his machine again ... Informing him belatedly of the presence of the mystery strand).

I'm also curious ... Can all members with the 'mystery strand' cast a claim? Can the members with the strand help boost each others abilities? Now that Ajuga has seen mama cast a claim several times (she might see riatsu like mama ... we don't know yet) would it be possible for her to cast a claim on one or more unsuspecting individuals? (that could be so funny and so distressing at the same time). Wonder if Hana will develop a similar ability. Wonder if Karin might be persuaded to act as an emergency donor if she's there and Yammy threatens to rip Szayel apart because he's being uncooperative (because of Karin's last order) ... of course Yammy wouldn't have to know that both samples being used to create the fetus are from Buakuya ... Making all donators in the royal line ... (oh well, just have to wait and see).

Pout, I know he has to grow back up but ... Wish we could have seen more of chibi Szayel... maybe next time ... and maybe we can see the others chibified as well and so we can see how they play together.

I knew there was something special about Karin's lineage and suspected it was from the shinigami side of the family ... just didn't think about it much.

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From ANON - Showo on July 10, 2011
Aizen really is a DICK. A colossal, humongous dick, at that!

I pity Gin. He might not exactly be a "good guy", even when taking into account that he was actually planning to kill Aizen from the start, but damn, he doesn't deserve the suffering he's enduring now.

And it is indeed true that the only good Yammy is a dead one... At least THIS Yammy. Horrible thing is, I think he's pretty in character. He just strikes me as the kind of sicko who'd enjoy tormenting people the way he's doing it to Byakuya.

Keep up the good work!
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From ANON - Fatal Mars on July 09, 2011
So I read all of this and overall this is a good story, but there are things I don'tagree with so it made it really hard to read. The Orihime chapters were by far the hardest to read since I don't think Orihime would have reacted to a situation like that, but on the plusside I believe you have Tatsuki down except for her sex scene. The sex for her bothered me, because I feel like she would have been much harder than she was. I do understand it has been six years, but it is very hard for me to see Grim and Karin (I am sure I just spelled her name wrong). I liked there pairing at the start. I applaud you for thinking of something so unique, but as there pairing continued I lost interst completly. They are the main characters which makes this even harder to read since I have grown to really dislike her since her and Ichigo interacted. I am a recent fan of Bleach and I have read alot of the manga and I am by no means an expert, but Karin could have had more will she is Ichigo's sister. On the other hand I love the uniqueness of her power. You are simply amazing at coming up with a power and enemy that is believable. I really enjoy Byakkuya (I feel as if I spelled that wrong) even though I don't like that he is getting raped all of the time I do love how whenever he is written about in a chapter he has a strong will and still has emotions that make his behavior believable. I also enjoy Haribel being with Toshiro it was very interesting and you pulled it off well. Your characterization of Aizan is crazy good. He is definitly a beast! I am on the fence about Matsumoto (Spelling :()but I don't hate it I am just waiting to see more. I do won't to see more of Soi Fon since for some reason I feel her fall from grace is so very real and though disturbing I can see it happening. Retsu is perdect. I love the #1 espada and I can't remember his name right now, but he is awesome and his pairing with the white haired captian is wonderful in the weird respect they have for one another. Overall I guess I am saying I love your attention to the little details that make this story so facinating, but for the main characters I am missing the connect.
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From ANON - Mori Kinji on July 09, 2011
Oh oh oh!! It's a double post!! -squeals-

I'm starting to despise the Kuchiki clan a whole lot and hope that they kinda crash and burn together with Yami.
And Aizen is sick in the mind, not that we don't know that already. Sigh.

Great chapters as usual. I'm just wondering though, will the hidden Reio dood that's Karin's ancestor will have greater power than Aizen himself? It'd be hilarious if it turns out that way and destroy Aizen. Also, I wonder how will the other Espadas react when they find out Grimmjow is the consort of a princess (I'm going to assume Karin is a princess) and how Byakuya's brain will implode when the Kurosaki he dislike so much turns out to be much more 'regal' than him.

Questions this week!

Royal Lineage : Me! Somewhat. I was suspecting that her lineage might either come from the true King himself or the King from Hell or something, since his drones are grasshoppers and bugs kinda reminds me of belzabub.

Gin: Well.. he is rather pitiful but I don't really feel sorry just yet. Actually, I kinda respect him a lil cause throughout (both canon) and in here, he has been doing things his way to protect those he can despite knowing what the outcome will be.

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From Ulquisgrl on July 08, 2011
Yea! A double post! You made my day! Wow, chapter 50, and you have about 100 chapters already!?!? I hope your inspiration continues! Do I feel bad for Gin? Hhhhmmmm. Well, it's not hard to feel bad for anyone being tortured like he was by Aizen. But I think Gin has a lot of balls! Gin totally knew what he was doing and knew what the consequences would be if Aizen found out. If anything, I think I look up to him more than I feel bad for him. I mean, who else would have enough balls to try and pull one over on Aizen, knowing full well that he would eventually find out? Plus Gin totally took responsibility for his actions. He was given the opportunity to have the women be tortured instead of him (even if he didn't know that Aizen wouldn't have gone through with it and would have just killed him). So, even if it was kinda hard reading the torture scene.....I don't feel that bad for him. Plus, I love Gin, I just can't see myself ever really feeling pity for him, I think he's just too strong of a character to feel pity for.
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From ANON - Codry on July 08, 2011
I laughed my ass off � Yammy can be so stupid, but the past part was when he realized (10 minutes later) that Szayel was younger � I was something like WTF

About the question � no � I had no idea that Isshin had royal blood

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From ANON - Onba on July 08, 2011
I have wanted to see Gin again for awhile now but I'm almost regretting it! I'm glad there is going to be a little Aizen around though, there is just something about it I like.

Great two chapter! Love them both!
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From ANON - Saka_Sandora on July 08, 2011
I think gin has had enough, man I'm starting to feel sorry for him.
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From JamieGib on July 07, 2011
It's lovely that 'Karin-chan' tells her little pet Szayel not to harm Byakuya further, but it doesn't lessen the fact that Yammy rapes him whenever he feels the need. Nor does it change the fact that 'little pet Szayel' destroyed Renji's soul and made him a zombie. Or...that pet Szayel has done untold damage to other shinigami with his experiments. Try as you might, you're not going to get me to like Szayel or Yammy or Nnoitra in any way unless they undergo a radical change of heart. In fact...I can tell you--I'm only going to like Yammy when he's dead.
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From ANON - bleachfan7 on July 07, 2011
i adore the kids & how they relate to szayzel, especially ajuga. i'm really dying for someone to do artwork of her & parents! you've written her to be considerably more advanced cognitively than her speech abilities seem to be. & she's still only at creeping/crawling stage despite understanding speech & situations. hope yammi's dna is excluded from babymaking process. glad you said it won't be an mpreg situation since poor bya has been thru so much here already. oh, and didn't see hana being royalty too. so she's also gonna be targeted, huh. bya too, and if there is a bya baby, it as well, no? i'm in no hurry to revisit escapees. can't stand ichiruki pairing so even the brief mention in this chap turned my stomach a bit (i was having lunch). lots of excitement coming soon, it seems. can't wait.
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From ANON - Codry on July 07, 2011
True ... it was a funny chapter :)), but I really love this couple: Tesra and Tatsuki. Truth to be told � I love all your couples � it�s your fault that I became a bleach crack fan :))

As for your question � I don�t have to think, because the answer is obvious: GRIMMJOW!!!
I still carry the hope that he�s alive; in the anime I mean. :D

And about Isshin, I have no idea what�s the deal with him, and I have a question � Is he alive (in your story)?

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