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From JOler on September 06, 2011
Hmmm... I think it's beyond question that Tatsuki and Tesra are head over heals in love with each other. I know Tesra is shy but now that he is spending so much time with Tatsuki, especially after catching that part of the conversation, I'd love to see him become a little more playful with her ... Just as a 'between them' special type thing since she does know how shy he is (get him to 'relax and let his hair down' for a change).

The lesson with Ajuga and Hana was cute, I can maybe see Lily-chan joining in every so often to give the kids practice with a more experienced opponent or to let them each watch the other when practicing new moves ... It would also give either Karen or Grimmjow the chance to halt a match at a prearranged point (say after the attack but before the next part of the sequence) in order to analyze the hold, positioning, etc and make adjustments as needed ... then starting over again (Lily-chan would probably love the chance to do that and because of her more advanced experience she'd also be more in control in most instances if Karin and Grimmjow let her know that they need to do step by step training of some particular moves ... and neither of the younger girls has the experience or knowledge to allow them to stop part way through the sequence ... They know two or three moves well enough to do them individually but the transition from one to the other in combination isn't going so well...). Besides it would get all the hyper girls involved and give Starrk a much needed chance to sleep in peace (lol).

Two more munchkins huh? It's probably more than I can hope for to cross my fingers and chant 'mamas Tatsuki and Rangeku' over and over ... Tatsuki has made it clear she wants to hold off for a while and has even gone to the point of asking him to use protection, though accidents do happen like seepage or breakage on occasion and if the timing is right ... well ... hello baby. Now that Nnoitra has discovered that giving Rangeku 'little freedoms' and not caving her in so much has added ... ahem ... benefits on a more personal level and she is reputed to thoroughly enjoy partaking of those same benefits when she's not feeling oppressed; well let's just say those two might be getting far more frisky because she's happier ~ who knows, he might come home on occasion and discover that dinner isn't even started because she had 'other plans' in mind in place of dinner or at least as an appetizer before settling for something on the lighter side foodwise. Say she meets him at the door in just her loose houri, takes him up to a relaxing warm bath ~ including her to help scrub his back and hair ~ I'm sure more can go on ... then a nice massage with warm oil ~ and other uses for the oil ~ then retiring to the bedroom to nibble on some fruit, cheese, and maybe a little bread as well as each other along with a nice bottle or two of wine. He'd probably forget completely about dinner until lunch the next day. Of course the third option since most of the other females are not currently active and Aisen or Unahanna have a fertility issue, is Nemu (my least favorite that I can think of ~ though I suppose the rarely mentioned Haribel is an option too). Nemu does seem to initiate it with Szayel often enough and while I'd love to see Szayel with his own little bundle of joy I just can't see Nemu as a mama. She just strikes me as the type to 'pop the baby out' then hand it to Szayel and say something like "here is the next test subject sir" then turn around and walk away as if handing him a test tube or report. (Just from her canon appearances I'd think Haribel would limit actual activity with Hitsugya to a minimum so that combination is not so likely).

Another arrancar with six good points? Well, Starrk (cute, strong, laid-back, given to being into cuddling since it takes less energy than going all the way, loyal, protective ~ he is canine afterall ~ and wolves are known to be doting parents ... So I think that's actually seven)

Shinigami? Byakuya (gorgeous ~especially if you can get him to literally let his hair down, calm ~ ok I go for the relatively stoic type, polite, strong, a voice that's commanding and could charm the Sakura into blossoming at the same time, gentle when appropriate and firm when necessary, honorable, excellent taste ...)

Hope to see more Rangeku and Nnoitra soon as well as more Szayel (though I'm perfectly happy if Nemu minimizes her appearances).

Mofaf1
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From ANON - Codry on September 01, 2011
This chapter was interesting, but what I really loved was the cuddling between Matsumoto and Nnoitra (and his sword LOL)

I thought Unohana wasn�t able to conceive because of Gin�s special tea � So there is another reason, hm? Still Aizen is an ass!
I guessed the moment he finds out about Karin�s bloodline is veeerrryy far, but I have this strange feeling in my gut � what if he gets an insane idea like conceiving with Karin .. or worse with her daughter.

Answer: I guess it would have to � hmmm � have ears, definitely ears, and red eyes or yellow (cannot decide) but apart from that, nothing special.

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From ANON - Nasib on August 31, 2011
just stumbled across this the other day and was hooked. pretty good. even though this is mostly karin x grim, lets see how the others react like toshiro, soi fon and the rest. whats happening with the ichigo and the co. not sure if I missed it, but urahara was killed ?

hope to see more soon. great stuff.

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From JOler on August 30, 2011
Love the chapter ... Everyone was so happy to get their weapon back ... Except poor Renji (hope that can be 'fixed' soon ... And Szayel is suitably regretful and apologetic to Renji for what he did ... I believe he honestly had no idea how seriously Renji would be hurt and even he should feel bad about that to a degree). Hmmm gotta wonder just how much Nnoitra is willing to do to keep Rangeku 'thanking' him like that ... who knows, she might get him trained yet.

Hmmm ... I'd love to see someone find and destroy Aisen's Zanpakto without him realizing it was found until way too late.

Even if more babies aren't planned as of this time I'd like to request consideration of a baby for Rangeku now that Nnoitra has found a possible aphrodisiac to get more between the sheets action with Rangeku (it would be nice to have one successful Shinigami-Arrancar conception ... I know that Tatsuki stands a better chance of mommy-dom because she's human and piggies (like Tesra) are notorious for being horny with stamina to match but ...)

Hmmm ... How would I want a half arrancar baby to look? Depends on the arrancar half ... But I'll say I'd like it to be adorable cute at any rate.
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From ANON - Anon on August 30, 2011
Terrific chapter! The emotional reunion of sword and warrior was wonderful to see! My heart is just broken for Renji. I was just thinking that Szayel had suffered enough and then thought not just yet after what he did to Renji. This might be one of those things that is not forgivable. Can't wait for more!
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From jensofia on August 30, 2011
I recall that Metastacia destroyed Kaien's zanpakuto in cannon and he didn't turn into a mindless zombie. In fact he was as about as far from it once he got over the initial shock.

I don't mean to pry into your private life but shouldn't you and your boyfriend get married first before having children?
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From ANON - Onba on August 30, 2011
Good chapter.

Interesting, Nnoitra still thinks of Nel from time to time, doesn't he? I wonder if it's foreshadowing.
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From HollowedRose on August 30, 2011
Now I see what happened to poor Renji. I kind of wish Szayel would get some more torture for being such a bastard and destroying his zanpakuto. I almost forgot about Renji, sigh. =/

A bit of randomness here but, all I want is to see Byakuya brutally killing Yammy, hopefully that will happen. *dreams with opened eyes*
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From ANON - bleachfan7 on August 30, 2011
happy scenes of everyone getting their zanpakto back were moving. still, poor renji. i really hope over time he's able to recover. w/all the kido tricks & gizmo's & probably old research laying around from mayuri's days, plus knowledge from the zanpakto's & maybe ori's reversing capability (say if there was a saved fragment of zanpakto kept for analysis by mayuri), i'd think some combination of methods from all the multiple sources could help (its fiction, there's no limits except those set by your own imagination). not saying have him back to normal after sustaining prolonged damage, but get his personality back, lets say, minus memory for last 9 yrs (they are at 8 yrs in storyline, right?). as dark & tragic as fic gets at times, him getting better thx to cooperation from many sources (esp if it included szayzel who's considered 'bad') would certainly be an uplifting scene. just wishful thinking. can't wait for ori's batbaby. but first gotta get some preggers ori getting lots of attention from increasingly neurotic batman. & creepy attention from aizen, like karin did. sad to know there's soon more of aizen's sadism & i imagine more bug-related chaos to come. til next chap.
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From PsycoPyro on August 30, 2011
I'm new. I just found your story a couple days ago. (it amazes me that there's a story on here thats this long.) First off, Despite the more squicktastic aspects (GODS, HOW COULD YOU DO THAT TO BYAKUYA?!?!I mean he's an ass, sure, but STILL!!!) you weave a FANTASTIC tale. I absolutely love this story. There are a handful of gramatical errors throughout, but i can over look that due to your fantastic story telling, realistic and IC characters, and solid plot.

That said: ULQUIORRA AND ORIHIME NEED TO HAVE A BOY!!! They just have to. I love Grimmjow to death (he's my alltime favorite character in the series, and the GrimmKarin stories are a guilty pleasure of mine given i usually ship GrimmNel), but he's been crowing about one upping Ulqui since the beginning and this gives Ulqui a chance to one up him. It just has to be done.

I love your fic. Please update soon.

KatrinaRose
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From ANON - Codry on August 28, 2011
You know I was rereading the story and I realized something. So many things had happened and yet I think so many are just at their begging. Orihime and her child, the role Hana will play in your story �
Every chapter keeps me guessing.
I think your story deserves more reviews, but I�m sure there are some readers that check your story weekly without giving you a feedback. Maybe they are too shy :)

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From ANON - Codry on August 28, 2011
I hope this time it will be the whole message � let�s pray

Finally � after 59 chapters and one child Grimmjow had admitted his feelings. Still I know that if it had been sooner, it would have sounded strange. The timing was perfect -_-
And yet � it was so sweet!
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From ANON - Codry on August 28, 2011
Finally � after 59 chapters and one child Grimmjow had admitted his feelings. Still I know that if it had been sooner, it would have sounded strange. The timing was perfect -_-
And yet � it was so sweet!
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From jensofia on August 25, 2011
I never heard of "banged up" to mean anything other than "beat up". But I looked up the phrase "knocked up" and found out that the word knock is an archaic slang for sex much like the word bang is used today. (Hence why banged up might be a variation of knocked up.) It is also interesting to note that the phrase is about 200 years old and no one knows for certain where the "up" part of the phrase originated. It is interesting to note that there were also 2 other uses of that phrase at one time. A rare use was to describe an inanimate object being beating up or worn out (pregnant women are easily tired) and the more common term is to wake someone up at a certain time by knocking on their door (mainly before alarm clocks were invented). My best guess this started out as a joke about someone's affair.

Now that we're on the subject of getting knocked up I noticed that a lot of your readers are hoping Tatsuki and Tesla (sorry I watch the dub) have condom failure. I can see an increased risk of the overflow/slippage problem if Tesla's base hollow form causes him to have longer well you know... Personally I'm kind of on the sideline on this issue. On one hand having a kid might help Tesla become more assertive but on the other that could be one ugly baby. Seriously those happy thoughts/dreams Orihime had of what her baby might look like would probably be some of Tatsuki's worst nightmares if she ever sees what Tesla looks like in his release form.
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From ANON - gollumsfriend on August 25, 2011

Awwww! I really adored this whole chapter. Nicely done!!

The 'I love you' ending was absolutely perfect and Orihime finding out she was pregnant was very sweet.

Your A/N: Personally, I'm sorry to hear about more 'Szayel punishment' to come and hope it's not as harsh or traumatizing as the last time. That last chapter really had me feeling horrible for him! And........my guess is that the 'almighty' Aizen should be feeling confident enough by now to give everyone's Zanpakutou back to them.

"Banged up"??? Don't you mean "knocked up"??! XD
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