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From ANON - Codry on November 13, 2011
At the second read I found this little part that amused me to no end �for the specs of dust Aizen had found under the bed.� Seriously � did he have to search under the bed? You know what�s worse? I can totally see Aizen bent, looking under the med for that spec of dust. Gin has just been unlucky to be in Aizen�s presence when he was OCD-ing
Ajuga is such cat � with the natural fear of water.

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From ANON - Codry on November 13, 2011
Wow! Congratulations! I�m so happy for you *squeals of joy* I wish you an easy pregnancy and a healthy, beautiful and lucky child. I bet your boyfriend is in the 7-th heaven *snicker*
This is my fist correct guess since � ever. Am I good or am I good? :D

I�m sorry that you are under the weather, but I guess it�s expected in your current situation.

Now back to the story. I think that �bonding� Ajuga and Gin was a good and original idea.
Also you explained some things left unchecked in the last chapters. I had wondered, more than a few times, why Aizen didn�t punish Grimmjow (especially after his so called claim on the 8-th, now 7-th espada), but then I realized something. No matter how �bad� Grimmjow had been, he is still pretty powerful and I guess Aizen needs his loyalty complete. If he were to torture Grim the same way he does with Gin, he would probably rebel and do stupid stuff.
That�s my theory.

I feel the deepest sadness for Gin and my hate for Aizen had increased exponentially. That is probably your intention, right? *laugh* The second question that popped in my head the first time Ajuga met Aizen was why didn�t she �smell� him.
At least now she knows what Aizen is capable of!

I think that Ajuga will become very powerful and, just like another reviewer before me, I fear that claming aspect. Here Yammy is very dangerous.

This was one amazing chapter and please be gentle with Gin and Szayel (or maybe I should ask you to make Aizen gentle but I would ask for the impossible)

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From Scorpinac on November 13, 2011
Yeah, Ajuga is getting to be quite the little handful, isn't she? Can't help but wonder how she manages to go un-sensed like that. Congratulations on your own upcoming bundle of joy! Laters.
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From ANON - bleachfan7 on November 13, 2011
congrats on your expanding family! hope the morning sickness passes quickly.

i hope gin gets his revenge before story is over. seriously. i wanna weep for him in this fic. i deep hoping somehow orihime can secretly send her fairies to heal him on the inside while letting all the scarring & signs of abuse aizen inflicts remain on the outside, so aizen thinks he's in constant pain but he is actually fine & just faking it.

ajuga has inherited a form of karin's sight, hasn't she? & her smelling skill sounds like a power too, if she can smell sadness, like karin sees reiatsu's. and she can already cloak her reiatsu as a toddler! you've made her a very attractive potential mate, which worries me b/c you had an earlier mention about how children could be claimed if they seemed to have potential. if someone like aizen claimed her, grim couldn't fight it. creepy, but after some of the torture read in this fic, it wouldn't be too surprising for something that tragic to befall her... just hope not.
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From ANON - midnightwakeonyou on November 12, 2011
bravo.. when i check here on thurday and friday i actual got scared that you where not going to post something at all.. CONGRATS ON THE PREGO NEWS.. that is so awesome.. and i really hope you feel better too.. and so cant wait to see who is joining gin in the room this time i hope it not it not the 8th i know karin will be so mad..
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From ANON - Mofaf1 on November 12, 2011
Congrats and morning sickness usually goes away after a few months. You might keep a food log to see if any particular foods are triggers. I know for me tomatoes in any form triggered or intensified my morning sickness.

Sorry for short or missing reviews. I've been swamped with homework.

Love the chapter. Would hate for Ajuga to see what will happen to Szayel and Gin but ... on the otherhand I'd love to see what she'd end up doing to Aisen, especially if he was totally clueless to her being there. It actually sounds like Ajuga kinda likes Gin and maybe feels bad for him. I wonder if she really left or if her childish curiosity caused her to hide and listen/watch what transpired. Wonder what kind of questions that would bring up to mom and dad ... and the rest of the household. Either way I'm sure Karin will be aware that Szayel is being punished for something; I'm kind of surprised she doesn't get more of a feeling for the pain that is being inflicted to him though.

I'd honestly love to see a pissed Ajuga do a home-style impromptu spay-neuter job on Aisen in a surprise hit-and-run attack from undercover with an immediate escape before she could be seen. Aside from his angry out lashing toward everyone within his range ... I'm sure the last few moments of any onlookers life would be spent in shocked amusement.
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From ANON - Caitriona on November 11, 2011
I've been really enjoying this piece. Thank you for writing for us!
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From ANON - Caitriona on November 11, 2011
I just got to the section where you explained what happened to Renji. How terribly sad! Poor soul.
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From ANON - frozenflower95 on November 09, 2011
Heya! I finally got onto this site!!! I am sooo happy I get to read the original, un-cut version of your wonderful story ^.^

Thoughts on the cut scenes that weren't there on fanfiction: There were some scenes that shouldn't have been cut because it helps the reader know more about what happened to the other characters. But I understand that u might have had to due to the darker contents of it... But anyways, I thought the scene where Yoruichi was talking to Rukia about what she saw shouldn't have been cut. But since it was on fanfiction, many will be left puzzled as to why randomly bring Ichigo up again (mind you they might have seen it coming too :p)

Thoughts on story thus far: Amazing job. Not only does your story contain fluffy scenes, but also smexy, and dark ones too. There is a lot of variety in this fiction (which is great) and your story doesn't only focus on the couples alone. Another thing that you have which I find other authors don't is the existence of a PLOT! Yes a plot! There's more to it than just sex! I love your little twists and plot thickening scenes as well! Can't wait to read more of your lovely story.

Till next time~
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From ANON - B on November 06, 2011
it's taken me this long to realize how far this story has progressed since the begining and also makes me realize how sad i'll be when its over because you are a magnificent writer
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From jensofia on November 05, 2011
Ooh it's nice to see Orihime getting bold in bed.

I had been wondering since chapter 65 what Yammy's alliterative motive was; I never suspected it was an attempt to claim Ajuga via the Baruya tribe method. Speaking of which is Ajuga able to tell if people had their claims renewed recently by sensing it or smelling it? Because Tesla doesn't strike me to be the type to renew a claim during the act unless it is necessary.
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From ANON - C on November 04, 2011
I am so pumped to see how you write ulquiorra during orihimes labor. XD thats going to be amusing. But anyway awesome story keep up the good work.
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From ANON - Codry on November 03, 2011
I read the whole chapter before my operating System course and I had to check for time to time for indiscrete classmates reading over my shoulder. But then it got to the smutty part � I was something like �What if they see that I am practically reading porn on the internet � I have a reputation to keep�, but then I realized �Fuck it, because it�s a well-written porn�
In case you didn�t realize, I am trying to praise you *smirk a la Codry*

Now I loved all the scenes (as always), but I guess that Karin�s interaction with Ulqui was the best. I felt a little animosity burning somewhere in there � maybe it was just my imagination.
I don�t need to add that I loved this chappy. If I ever forget to tell you, please know that it is implicit.

I�m very sorry 4 your busy schedule, but I guess that we(I) do forget that people on this site have their problems, issues etc �

Btw � how is your stomach? Maybe my presumption from 2 chapters back (I think) was kind of childish, but I prefer to be an optimist.
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From ANON - Anon on November 03, 2011
Looks like Karin has everyone's attention for one reason or another ~ and some may not like 'the other'.

lol ... The walking food ... aka Ulquiora ... should be very happy that Orahime made Ajuga promise not to hurt him since Ajuga is one of the few who can already damage his hiero with little to no effort. It sounds as though Ajuga has developed a first, little girl type, crush on Szayel ~ wonder if Szayel, or anyone else, has noticed this fact or if they think she just likes him as a 'grown-up play buddy' with lots of pretty and strange toys.

Sounds like Nnoitra is smitten ~ hook, line, and sinker ~ and has started thinking of Rangeku's happiness first a bit (shocking I know).

Hmmmm ... Ajuga don't eat or drink ANYTHING at the garden unless one of the riatsu sensitive individuals checks it first (seriously don't trust Yammy to not try and make a play for an unsuspecting ~ possibly distracted ~ Ajuga. Thanks for the belated warning about underage claiming Tesra, hopefully it isn't too late. (talk about some pissed parents if Ajuga ever did come home with someone else's riatsu mixed with her own, and mama saw it).
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From ANON - bleachfan7 on November 02, 2011
another great chappie! adored the ulquihime, w/hormones making ori a lot more proactive & managing to shock ulqui. karin's patience w/her squad's questions was humorous, and the interaction between ajuga & ulqui made me laugh. the playful spoken/unspoken banter between besties tats & ori & later tesra was cute along w/ajuga having things go over her head. finally, that last exchange w/nnoi that had ran in shock at his warm attitude gives me hope he doesn't have to die a slow painful death after all.
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