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From JOler on December 24, 2011
Happy holidays ... can't wait for the next chapter. Hope the pregnancy is going well.
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From JOler on December 20, 2011
Being absorbed into a family is a good thing in Ukitake's case ... and I think the grandpa/uncle viewpoint is returned in reverse by those involved.

Kind of nervous about what Aisen is thinking in regard to the backlash ... Doesn't sound good for Grimmjow.

Glad Aisen saw reason about the second division.

Those elders didn't get half the telling off they deserved and Yammy only got a taste of what he deserved too ~ though I have a feeling he may steer clear of pissing off Karin for a while. I'm thinking Byakuya is a bit on the confused and dumbfounded side at the moment. My guess is that Karin did most of the damage at the garden.
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From Codrynae on December 20, 2011
I�m having a debate right now. Who is supposed to die first: Aizen or Yammy?
I understand why Karin felt threatened by Yammy. I mean he practically asked her if she wanted to be raped along with Byakuya. Who asks that?

In the last 5 chapters I switched my hate from Yammy to Aizen and back again.
Can I tell you how badass is Karin. Amazing! When she stood her ground with the Elders and let�s not forget with Aizen.
Btw the part where Karin witnessed Byakuya�s rape was beautifully written. I � absolutely amazing.

PS: Please kill Yammy � as a New Year gift 4 your readers *puppy dog eyes*
PS2: I really cannot understand Yammy or Barragan (sp?) They both like men, yet they do have this acute need of breeding, while the others like Tesra, Grimmjow, Ulqui do not have, or at least not so pronounced. I mean � if you want an heir take a woman for god�s sake. Don�t throw yourself at another�s woman/daughter.

Happy Christmas!
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From ANON - rubyblade on December 19, 2011
Damn, I get the feeling that bastard STILL isn't dead! *growls* Great update!
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From ANON - bleachfan7 on December 19, 2011
the hosp scene w/uki was super sweet. love 'created' families.

love how bold you continue to write adult Karin. bold but smart & controlled under most circumstances. Assume she was able to get in good hits on Yammy because of his being taken by surprise, since as 0 Espada, his strength is beyond even Starkk's, so even on borrowed reiatsu from Grimm, she'd have no real shot at beating him. Also presume he didn't just blast her & Grimm b/c of rules Aizen has about attacking another espada's mate or infighting amongst espada or b/c they have only successful crossbreeding to date (since ori's not delivered yet). still, it is certainly satisfying to have yammy get some pain. after aizen, he's the character most desired for a slow & agonizing death.

happy holidays!!!
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From ANON - midnightwakeonyou on December 19, 2011
bravo bravo iam so happy about this chapter too bad u didnt let her kill off yammy is would have been too awesome then byakua would have been freed and he could get his voice back too.. i sad to hear that their will be no updates to after holidays.. but hopefully it will be a exciting and loooonnng chapter too.. great work
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From JOler on December 13, 2011
So glad Ukitake made it through ok and is finally getting some treatment that might help. It is good to see the kids making him happy and also that Lillinette and Starrk also seem to care even if they don't say it verbally (though I'd love to see one of them slip and mention it).

It's nice to know Byakuya is getting a reprieve from his torture by Yammy for the moment.

Hmmm ... A 'happy' Aisen usually bodes very poorly for someone in the end. Hmmm ... It was after his chat with Karin. Hmmm ... Wonder if he dislikes having someone who insists he is a 'king' as a subject in his own realm ... and because of the threat made toward Ajuga (who is hands off per Aizen) it could be construed a punishable offence with dire consequences for Barragan (add the fact that Barragan made an outright threat in regard to Aizen's favorite, Ulquiorra) ... Wonder if that would be a possible reason for that 'happiness'?
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From ANON - bleachfan7 on December 13, 2011
2nd effort at review--dumb site crashed my 1st one.

found it very sweet/tender for him to wake up to all the kids watching over him. also liked how its real-world medicine that is superior in this instance.

another highlight was hearing that byakuya was getting to work at division regardless of what yammy wants. can imagine karin knowing how to phrase it/sell it so it seems obscene to waste such a valuable resource when conditions w/swarm are so dire--every possible hand w/skill or even any skill available should be put to use if aizen wants to have a world to lord over. appealing to his practical side would work, since if he didn't have a grasp of that in this au, at least to some extent, he'd have eliminated szayzel a long time ago as a potential threat. as much as he likes to torture him, he gets kicks a-plenty for his sadism quota thru gin.

best wishes on healthy & happy trimesters.
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From Codrynae on December 12, 2011
[note]: Can I ask you something? If you do not like rambles and divagations (on the subject) tell me and I�ll stop. I mean I know that I have the habit of rambling (with a limited amount of vocabulary), but I love when my reviewers ramble, because that means they love my story enough to take a part of their time and �waste� it on my story.
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Karin seems to be very calm when being put in a tough situation: first it was Szayel, then it was Szayel again and now Ukitake. She should become a doctor since she clearly has the stomach for it.

You know ... Hana is the perfect combination of Nanao and Shuunsui (hope I spelled his name right) When she was little you didn�t emphasize the Nanao part in her, but now that she�s older and well-educated she has that little spark of smugness Nanao presented in front of Shuunsui. God how much I miss him T_T

I wonder what Karin said to Aizen that made him �happy�
I hope you�re feeling better and no more morning sickness.
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From ANON - Totty on December 10, 2011
HA! Finally caught up from just beginning this story! Still brilliant. I love Ajuga! I would love to see a rendition of what she looks like. And I adore her relationship with Szayel. I think that Stark's claim will lead him to realize that Jushiro is in trouble, thus he will be saved! I hope!
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From ANON - rubyblade on December 09, 2011
First off, I so would have added in my voice for every damn chapter that I loved, but when reading reviews on my own, it just looks like a crazy person appeared, and started to randomly type. I started reading the day before yesterday, and finished today. WOW, this monster in HUGE. Congratulations! Both on your personal stuff and your story. You cannot believe how relieved I was to see Yumi again. He's my top five favorite from Bleach. Poor Renji. He always seems to get the shaft. I really want to write a nice story for him where he doesn't get maimed or die horribly. And all the Szayel torture is making me cry. Please stop hurting him? Now to my best moment, when your story jerked me right out of my chair and made me bawl: Byakuya's reunion with Senbonzakura. It was so touching, compelling, beautiful...pick a positive adjective, it was amazing. Thank you for letting Juushiro live, please don't kill him now! Thank you for such an engaging read! I'll be back to check on it next week. Until then, stay away from WoW and write some more!
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From Codrynae on December 06, 2011
You know this last part made me think about something regarding Ajuga�s instinct. I was little somewhere around 10, but I looked like a 7 year old kid. Anyway I was coming form my grandma�s house when there were two boys/men � don�t remember too well and one of them said �My friend has an erection. Can you help him with it?� that�s a word by word translation. I was 2 little to know about sex; I didn�t know what a penis was, so you can imagine � I was from this point of view as clueless as Ajuga.

I passed by and ignored them (you know the whole thing with do not talk with strangers; do not take candies from strangers), but instantaneously I knew it was bad; that it was something that could hurt me like hell. Strange as it seems it�s the only thing I got left in my memory from that period.

I feel somehow sorry for Ajuga because she�ll have to deal with this fear for a long time and I think she�ll never truly forget it.

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From Codrynae on December 06, 2011
Wow! We have a winner!
Okay � this chapter was, simply put, amazing! I�m not entirely sure, maybe it was just my imagination, but the words said by Barragen struck me as strange.
�One day you will lose your favor with Aizen-sama, and I will be waiting,� � a prevision, don�t know, but it definitely scared the shit out of me. As I said maybe it�s just my eye catching something unimportant, but if I�m right � *insert worried face here*

Also I guess it�s unexpected from him, who likes young boys (Grimmjow stated at some point of your story) to �want� a born arrancar. Maybe he is into children as well *smirk* freaking pedophile. His Majesty is a fetish freak!

Waiting for the next chapter and for Karin to find out about her daughter�s bad experience. I gotta confess � Ajuga is very instinctual: from knowing that Aizen and Yammy are bad to realizing that Barragen is interested in something less pleasant � I like her more and more.

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From Codrynae on December 06, 2011
Yeah Tatsuki should definitely have a talk with Grimmjow, even if I must confess � it might sound a little strange �Listen here Grimmjow, human traditions say that you have to marry the one you mate with �� I really cannot imagine Grimmjow�s answer to this.

200 chapters or more o_O that�s one hell of a number, but I am not scared. Make as many as you want. Just keep the story as good as it is and I�ll be pleased. Truth to be told � I don�t know if you are capable of stopping me from loving your story *laugh*

Okay � going to the next chapter

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From ANON - Totty on December 06, 2011
Review Chapter 39: Two random things to point out: 1) The food they eat would easily cost WAY more than thousands of yen. (Source: I live in Japan. Think of it this way 100 yen is approximately equal to 1.00, thus their 1,000 yen of food would only be $10.00 and beef and things are really expensive here) As a point to you I have no idea how the soul society would price food or if they would even use yen.... something I pondered due to this train of thought :P And of course this is a minor thing

2) Only because I think it will amuse you- Wild wolves purr. That's right, the big mighty beasts get all cute and cuddly when they are with their 'pack' and feeling loving. It takes a bit of getting used to because it is a little hard to tell the difference of a purr and a growl, but when you know them well you can tell. :P

I know that this story is already either finished or well near the end, but I still like to review when I find something to say whether it is criticism or random tidbits. :)
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