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From ANON - FayeVakarian on August 27, 2012
Chapter 7 review

Poor Shunsui, I liked him. I'm glad he was able to have Stark claim Ukitake as well as take care of Nanao. After reading stark with Unohana in Crossbreeding the Future, I had gotten used to that pairing.

And Nanao was pregnant with Shunsui's child. Poor Nanao and Ukitake they must miss Shunsui alot. I'm glad Stark is taking care of the three.

I love the interaction between Lillinette, Ukitake and Hana. Ukitake is like Hana's cool uncle. I love how he gives both girls lollipops, reminds me of the anime where he gives Toshiro candy.

"Neither one of them �enjoyed� doing this, but it was the only way Aizen would not only suffer him to live, but to stay in command of his Division. ", kind of feel bad for both Ukitake and Stark, having to do this, when they would rather not do it. But it is good that they do it, I don't want to imagine what the consequences that would come about if Stark didn't reinforce his claim. Other arrancars who are crueler/meaner, would no doubt want to claim Ukitake, and would no doubt.

I'm not one for yaoi (I don't have anything against yaoi, it's just not my cup of tea), but I like the way you write incorporate into the plot, where it is believable, especially since the only powerful female Espada is Tia. And judging by how Tia behaved in "Crossbreeding the Future" I wouldn't want Ukitake with her, due to his health.

I like how Tsark asks Ukitake if he sure he wants to this- �Are you sure you want to do this?� Starrk asked, as he had the other four times.", so they only share a bed, once a year. I always figured both Ukitake and Stark as straight, so I can see them only reinforcing the claim when it needs to be reinforced.

I'm glad Ukitake isn't in too much pain, and he gets at least some pleasure from it- "Each forward thrust poured more of the Espada�s reiatsu into him, and each thrust left his body sweating from the intense pleasure of it."

Really good chapel, helps explain what has happened with Nanao, Ukitake, and Stark. I love how Lilinette is showing Hana how to pester Stark.

I really think you captured Ukitake and Stark well.

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From ANON - Anon on August 27, 2012
Chapter 6 review

Awesome chapter, love the confrontation between Grimmjow and Ulquiorra. I'm glad Grimmjow explained some things to Ulquiorra.

I like when Ulquiorra told Grimmjow- �Her talents are not to be wasted on trash.�, it shows that Ulquiorra is starting to value Orihime (in my opinion), since he doesn't twang her to bother with those he views as trash.

I feel for Ulquiorra, he is in love with Orihime, just doesn't know how to properly express his emotions to her, since he didn't lve anything before her. Love is something that is new to him, and if he thinks she is thinking about someone other than him, his jealousy and emotions kind of get out of his control.

I'm glad Ulquiorra asked Grimm for advice to fix the situation between him and Orihime.

I love Grimm's cockiness- �Of course. But I have yet to find a woman who didn�t want a piece of this.� but its true, any woman would want Grimmjow.

I really love the changes you are making with Ulquiorra, I think if he wouldn't have been killed in the manga, and Aizen would have been killed, Orihime would have been able to make him into an ally.

I like how he apologizes to Orihime, and how he doesn't force her. I love the discussion they have about love, and how she helps him realize he has come to love her and respect her- �That could also be a sign.� She conceded though. �Do you respect me for who I am?�

�Yes.� He answered.

�Also a sign. If I asked you now not to have sex with me, would you?� She asked.

I also like how he tells her that he would try- �It would be difficult, but I would try.� He finally admitted.

I love how Karin goes to Grimmjow without him calling for her, and she wraps the injuries he got from the his "discussion" with Ulquiorra.

The lemon between the two was quite hot, especially as she gives him oral (you are bringing out my inner pervert). Also when she gets on top and does not let him flip her onto her hands and knees. Again awesome lemon, love to see Karin take charge in the bedroom.

I like how Karin is used to him wrapping his arms around her to sleep.

Golden eyes, must be Yoruichi.

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From ANON - FayeVakarian on August 27, 2012
Chapter 5 review

I love the morning after, especially when Grimmjowwakes up and finds himself still inside Karin.

The shower scene was funny especially, when he expects Karin to wash his back. Karin is so lucky she has Grimmjow

It's a good thing Gimmjow is training her. I love how he ends the sessions- "He always ended their sparring sessions with her on her back and him pinning her to the ground.".

Can't believe those Arrancar tried To take Karin and Yuzu. It's a good thing Grimmjow got there on time.

It was also nice of him to go get Orihime to go check in Karin and Yuzu. I think he is getting attached to Karin.

I love Ulquiorra, he realizes his woman isnt at home so he goes to where she is to take her back with him. I'm glad Karin stood up to him and told him his reiatsu was hurting Yuzu. She is just like Ichigo.

Also I give Tatsuki props for standing up to him, and explaining things. Most would be to scared to stand up,to him.

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From ANON - FayeVakarian on August 27, 2012
Chapter 4 Review

Karin is alot like her brother, she is very selfless putting others above herself.

Karin is one of my favorites in the manga. I think it's because she has much in common with Rukia (my favorite female character). They both have over protective brothers (Ichigo and Byakuya respectively), they are both strong women in my opinion seen when Karin takes over Ichigo's shinigami duties when Ichigo loses his powers, as well as when Rukia takes on the ninth Espada and defeats him, they aren't damsels in distress, they are warriors. Rukia looking out for Ichigo when she willingly goes with Byakuya and Renji in order to spare Ichigo's life. Also when they go rescue Orihime in Hueco Mundo, Ichigo doesn't want to separate from Rukia because he wants to protect her, while Rukia rationally tells him he doesn't need to protect, that they can rescue Orhime faster if they separated. Also when the ninth Espada told Rukia to give her life for taking Kaien's, she was willing to do so on,y after she rescued her friend Orihime. Rukia is selfless often putting others ahead of her, and I view Karin as the same, taking over Ichigo's duties, protecting him and her family, after everything Ichigo has done for her and Yuzu.

Not that I'm putting down Orihime, Orihime has her own unique abilities that are important as well, it's just that she is kindhearted and is one who looks for peaceful situations rather than resorts to violence (she reminds me alot of Unohana). Plus Orihime's powers are quite powerful, and her abilities are unique, no way is she weak. I love how Rukia had taken Orihime to Soul Society to train, after Urahara told Orhime she would be useless.

I must admit I never thought of the grimmKarin pairing. The two never met in the manga, so the pairing never popped into my head. I think just like I fell in love with the GrimmRuki with "Crossbreeding the Future" I'm going to fall in love with this pairing as well.

I love the way you write Grimmjow, he is so in character, I can see him acting the way he is acting in this fic.

The lemon with Grimmjow and Karin was quite hot, very well written. I love the scene, love Grimmjow's thoughts on her- �Probably because the other broads gasps are for show to try and please me so I don�t rip their fucking heads off. Hers are honest. Innocent.�

The scene between Grimmjow and Karin is so hot, scene was realistic, sexy, and beliveable. makes me wish you would write a GrimmRuki one shot too, where Rukia loses her virginity to Grimmjow. But I know your busy.

I like how you write Yuzu. The twins care about each other quite alot that they don't want to make it harder for the other.

Great job in this chapter.

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From ANON - FayeVakarian on August 27, 2012
Chapter 3 review

I glad Ichigo was able to escape to the human world. Although now fights between Ichigo and Ulquiorra lead to Ulquiorra coming home to reinforce his claim in Orihime. I can understand why Ulquiorra does this, every time he comes back from fighting with Ichigo. Every time he confronts Ichigo, he is reminded of Orihime's love for Ichigo. He probably thinks Ichigo is trying to get back Orihime, forgetting that Ichigo is probably also trying to save anyone else who may still be alive in Soul Society, not just Orihime.

I agree with Tatsuki's theory of why he changes forms when he takes her- "Tatsuki was more a believer that the form change came from his lose of control over his emotions and the change was part of the manifestation of that."
His loss of control of emotions, especially any rage/fury he feels at the thought of Ichigo trying to take Orihime away from him, is something that could trigger his release form. Ulquiorra believes Orihime to belong to him,which she does according to the Claim he has over her, and therefore the thought of someone taking away what is his would make him lose control.

The thought of Ulquiorra going down on Orihime is quite hot- "Any other thoughts were quickly erased from her mind and a whimper of pleasure found its way out of her throat. Her eyes darted down to the pair of horns and mop of black hair between her legs. As if sensing her he stopped to lock his green eyes onto hers. She found herself breathless and he licked his lips before crawling up her body. She turned her gaze away from him."

I also like how you write Ulquiorra's thoughts especially- "The only time he could get relief was in his release and when she was moaning and panting beneath him. It gave him a feeling he couldn�t describe that left him wanting more." and "He enjoyed the taste of her core but more so he took pleasure in hearing her whimper, knowing that all her thoughts were on him and him alone. Perhaps that was why his instincts enjoyed doing this to her. For the brief time he used her he knew her thoughts were solely on him."

Wow just wow, you write such awesome/hot scenes between the two.

I'm glad that Orihime has her best friend with her, for support. Though I'm sure Tatsuki hates not being able to stop Uquiorra from forcing himself on her, especially since in the manga, Tatsuki has always protected her from bullies and perverts (Chizuru). I'm very happy Ulquiorra took Tatsuki with them. He didn't have to do it, but he did and I think by allowing Tatsuki to live with them , he is showing he does cares about Orihime.

Great chapter!

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From ANON - FayeVakarian on August 27, 2012
Chapter 2 review

�I have Claimed you, your soul belongs to me now. Your body is owned by me, your reiatsu is owned by me, your being is owned by me.� that is something Ulquiorra would say. once again I applaud you for keeping him and Inoue in character.

Claims are interesting idea, one I have not heard of before. The claimed not being able to move, unless their master/the one who claimed them allow them to.

I love how Inoue panics because she doesn't see her hairpins (very important to her since they were a give from her brother and the source of her powers, i too would be frantic if i lost something as important as that) only for Ulquiorra to just give them to her- "Her searched ended when a fist crossed her eyesight and she stared at it in shock as the fingers unfurled to reveal both hairpins completely fine. She sighed in relief and took them, mumbling a truthful thank you and preceded to return them to their rightful places." I like how she thanks him for it. It is just like Orhime to remain civil/polite even after he forces himself on her. Orihime is not someone to be rude/mean/vindictive to someone who has hurt her (ex. When Loly and Menoly beat her, only for Grimmjow to come and beat them, then Orihime heals them even though they didn't deserve it).

I'm glad Ulquiorra allowed her to heal Renji and Byakuya.

I'm glad Grimmjow took Yuzu and Karin with him. At least they will be safe, even though he plans on using the as bait.

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From ANON - Faye Vakarian on August 27, 2012
Chapter 1 review

I always liked the UlquiHime pairing. There was just something, about the stoic, mysterious Espada, and the young, innocent human that gave me tingles. In the manga, the two impacted each others lives, especially when Orihime teaches him about the heart. I really wish Kubo wouldn't have killed him, but I'm hoping by ichigo killing Ulquiorra in the manga, Kubo will have Ulquiorra be sent to soul society since, Ichigo did in a way cleanse his soul (I know, wishful thinking on my part)

I really feel that you have Inoue and Ulquiorra very much in character in this chapter, and I love how possessive Ulquiorra is of his "prize". I love how he tells her- "You are mine.� I could have totally seen him saying something like that in the manga.

The rape scene was written well, and believable. From Ulquiorra's viewpoint I can see why he felt the need to assert his dominance over his "prize". I like how he moves Inoue's hairpins to the side that way they don't get damaged. Though he is not conscious of what he has done, I think it was his subconscious wanting to make sure nothing happened to her or her powers.

I really like how you talked about his reiatsu chaining and mingling with her reiatsu. I also liked the part "It was a beautiful song.� Her little cries each thrust, the sound of their bodies slapping together, the beat of his wings as he used them to balance on her better.�" very poetic in my opinion.

The first chapter was brilliantly written, and I think it set ups the changes that will come about now that Aizen has won.

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From tonyamarie on August 26, 2012
I have enjoyed your story so much. It was better than reading the books that come out today. I am glad that your little one is doing good and that you are well. I cannot wait till the next part comes out. The story is so good and unique. I will be readng your other stories now that I have finished this one for now. Thank you for the wonderful entertainment.
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From ANON - Tonya on August 17, 2012
I've been reading your story and I love all of it so far, I think it's interesting the way you had Karin beat up Nnoritora :D all in all great story!
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From ANON - briar on August 17, 2012
their baby is super cute/funny
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From tonyamarie on August 16, 2012
I am enjoying this story I found it today and have not been abe to stop readig. Your writing is so good a person does not have to struggle tounderstand and the pairings are interesting
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From satterb on August 16, 2012
This was also another great update. I never liked Noitra, but he's still not as bad as Yammy. Thanks for updating. I personally know how busy and tired you must be. Hang in there. I look forward to more.
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From ANON - Anon on August 15, 2012
I might have missed it but what happened to Kukaku Shiba?
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From JOler on August 14, 2012
Hmmm ... So neither one feels they'd be parent material. Sounds like they both need to see if they can rise to the challenge, even if it happens unexpectedly. I'd honestly love to see how Nnoitra would change if he found out that a badly battle wounded Rangeku is pregnant. My guess is that he'd put her on a pedestal and treat her like the most fragile creature in the universe... But that is just my guess. His denial in regard to being a daddy sounded like he was trying to convince himself so he wouldn't be disappointed if it didn't happen.
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From kadajclone on August 12, 2012
another thing that just popped into my mind, assuming the good guys do eventually get rid of Aizen, whats gonna happen to the arrancar population that isn't with karin's little click? I'm assuming her people will be protected for the most part but after 10 freaking years of the hell they have been put through (rapes,murders etc) I just dont see the surviving shini population and Ichigo's crew letting them get off scott free. Also is ichigo's accelerated skill advancement in this story? cause if so shouldn't he be able to curb stomp the higher ranked Espada? that is assuming he has been training for the last decade. It's just hard to imagine him sitting around and twiddling his thumbs. this is pretty much a continuation of my last review, sorry for all the questions just few things that have been on my mind while reading this story and wondering if there will be a high level of karma houdini. Also any chance of an OC female shini who is claimed? you mentioned earlier that almost if not all of the female population was claimed and it would be nice to see how they are fairing.
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