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Reviews for Growing Up Hisagi

By : crunchysalad

From The-Capsule-Corp-President on August 17, 2013
Orgasmic wow! This story is just sexy! I gotta admit, Kensei and Shuhei got me into yaoi a bit. I mostly read hetero pairings. This story is well written for a more serious adult material. I enjoyed every single chapter written. The ending was great and it was a good way to finish it.
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From ANON - Althydia on May 02, 2011
What a great story! Plus, I love this couple so much and we don't see enough fanfictions about them... Hisagi as a child taken care of by Kensei was very cute, but you managed to make the evolution of his feelings for his taichou acceptable (without it being creepy), even though they weren't reciprocated at the beginning. And Akon was so funny (with his bad influence from Mayuri), and Shinji very much in character. I also liked how the current Vizards were integrated in the Gotei 13 with the more recent additions (I hope Toshiro would also appear in a later years as I can't see him as not being a captain).
Anyway, loved it and thanks for sharing!
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From ANON - vermilioncream on December 22, 2010
your story intrigued me so. i mean i liked it, but i felt off during the entire thing. before i start the criticism ;), i would like to say congrats, you did a great job with the characters and with the story line. i also very much like your writing style. so all in all, great job.
but,
you wrote in warnings "pedophilia", which i don't really see happening. in stead i think there is a much more pronounced nuance of incest. i mean, i get that kensei is not his father and shuhei never regarded him as a father figure, but in stead he saw kensei as this god, this idol that he wanted to have either way he could - when he was a kid as his caretaker, and when he grew up, as his lover. so from shuhei's part there was nothing weird. however, you specifically state that kensei sees shuhei as a son. he says something like "i raised him". and get that shuhei is all grown up and hot now, but if kensei always regarded him as a son, i don't think he could ever see him as a sexual being, unless he willingly wanted to commit incest. so, in my opinion that was a bit off. but you tried to describe the turmoil that kensei is going through as he starts seeing shuhei as a potential lover, so that saved a bit the situation. but still i felt weird about it.
but anyways, as i said in the beginning, i liked your story all in all, because it was different and well written, and because i love the shuhei kensei pair to no end.

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From ANON - Amy on November 03, 2010
Finally ! I'm here !
I'm sorry, I've been really busy, and a bit lazy ... But I wanted my last review (oh the emotion) to be perfect ! (or, well, as perfect as I can do ...)

I didn't cry while reading it !
Because, even if it's the last chapter, it's far from being over ; I can imagine a lot of stuff going on afterwards, so yeah, it's cool. Thank you for not writing a "definite" ending.
And I'm glad you're not one of those excellent writers not able to write a decent ending chapter x) Sometimes, the fic is absolutely perfect ... until the last chapter, which is crappy, and written too fast, and well ... just a waste of words.
But you're not like thaaat ! You made me so happy again with this chapter.

Ah Akon, you never fail to be perverted. Seriously, he's a complete sex freak in my head now, thanks to you xD
It would be priceless to read a fic about him and the weirdest of his sextoys ... *hint hint nudge nudge* xD
I seriously love him even more now ; and I need to thank you again for writing him in this fic ; AND that fic with neko!Shuuhei, haha.

Aaaand I realize that I've already written a lot, for a simple review ... And I could go on, and on, and on ...
About Kensei being pretty clueless for an adult ; flustered and angry Shuuhei being absolutely eatable ; Shinji lacking tact and subtlety, as usual xD
Everything was perfect, from the first to the last letter.
Angsty, and hot. Just what I like. No, love. Just what I love =)

Aaaand, about the next fic. Hum =/
I'm not much a fan of ByaRen (because in my head, long-haired guys CAN'T be sexy ... dunno why, I'm born with this idea xD), nor of UlquiGrimm (because I'm one of those creepy retarded fangirls who think that Grimmjow belongs with Ichigo xD). But, I think the idea of UlquiGrimm looks more interesting =)
But I can't promise I'm gonna read it xD

Anyway ! Gotta go !
Thanks again for this wonderful fic !
Love youuuuu !
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From ANON - Amy on October 30, 2010
I know I haven't reviewed yet ... I'm gonna do it ! I promise ! Soon ! x)
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From GrimmAngel on October 25, 2010
I LOVED this story. I loved how everyone was pretty much in character and how that Kensei and Shuhei slowly built up their relationship (or are starting it!). I really liked how you portrayed Kensei. He really is a softee. I will have to check out your stories to see what else you have. I loved this one to bits and will reread it a lot I think
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From ANON - Ang69 on October 21, 2010
I'm happy and sad at the same time. First off: I love you and your stories! This story especially rocks! I loved it, so in love with it. And this is why I'm sad because it's over. But now I get to read this story over and over again whenever I'm in mood for some Kensei/Shuuhei. I loved the little bit about Akon. There's something about the way you made him seem so creepy yet so funny at the same time. I laughed, grinned and cried at some parts. When I saw that you updated this I was jumping around and screaming. The smex was so hot and worth the wait!! I loved the part that Shinji had! I loved that you torture Kensei a little bit whith the thought of Shuuhei going to a brothel to have sex with a prostitute. You made Shuuhei talk a little dirty which was a plus! ;)I loved that you had Kensei call Shuuhei 'Kid' while doing it and even after doing it.
Lol I loved a lot of the things about your story.

Now I'm going to have to wait for the sidestory about them in your Sex and Football universe once the main plot is done which I can totally wait for considering that story is also very hot.I vote for the ByaRen canon get together fic. Definitely one of my most favorite stories in the whole wide world of fanfiction!! And believe me I have read a lot of stories.

Cause of what I just read my next project will definitely have to be a picture of Kensei and Shuuhei together! :)

Also you are one of my most fave authors out there now just because of your stlye of writing and your smex scenes!! Thank you, thank you, and thank you ever so much for writing this story!!
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From ANON - Meemai on October 21, 2010
fucking loved it!
I don't usually read but your writing is just awesome!
I had a hard time keeping back my fangirl screem and I'm a boy!
keep up the good work :)
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From MissHestermann on October 21, 2010
I've been waiting for this chapter for so long! =DDD I loved the ending.
Your stories are always so good. =)

As for what story you should write next, definitely ByaRen(I love this pairing). Though I'm sure GrimmUlqui would be good too.
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From ANON - Yakumo on October 20, 2010
That was one of the hottest, best fics I have ever read. The fact that it was Kensei/Shuuhei made it that much better. Thanks for writing this and great work!
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From ANON - Yakumo on October 20, 2010
That was one of the hottest, best fics I have ever read. The fact that it was Kensei/Shuuhei made it that much better. Thanks for writing this and great work!
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From ANON - HollowedLove on September 28, 2010
Oh my god!! My friend told me about this fanfic and I am in love with it! I am now totally a fan of your writing and this couple. Please tell me you are thinking of writing another story with this couple? If not please think about it. Now I am off to look for more stories concerning this couple. Thank you for writing this!!
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From ANON - Ang69 on September 26, 2010
Ooh Kensei why did you do that for?! You meanie! Thank you so much for updating!! One more chapter to go. ;_; You should think about writing more about this couple. There is just not enough around.
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From ANON - Amy on September 25, 2010
Okay, I'm finally in the mood for reviewing (meaning : not crying my heart out anymore).
This chapter was perfect. Absolutely perfect.

Seriously, write some KenShuu and you have LOVE. Make it angsty and sad and heartbreaking and you have SUPERLOVE. Add to the mix some pervy-nonchalant-Akon and you have SUPERDUPERLOVE.
I SUPERDUPERLOVE YOU AND THIS FIC !

And I'm already so sad the next chapter is going to be the last one ... Please-please-please, tell me you're planning to write more of this pairing (or maybe some AkonShuu ?). I truly love your writing skills and I know that, after this fic, I'll be content (more than content tbh, haha) reading Sex&Football but ... KenShuu is such a rare pairing, and you write it so well ; I really want you to write something else with them afterwards T____T
I'll draw crappy fanart in exchange ! xD

About this chapter, now.
Duh, the wet dream. Shuuhei, you naughty boy.
And him being a bit insecure afterwards ... afraid to tell Kensei or try anything. That was terribly cute, and a tidbit sad too.
Then Akon-sensei ! Yes, teach us about voyeurism now, haha. Ah, I love how you write him ; he's absolutely perfect. And I wonder if he truly is insensitive and very "clinical" about sex and his relationship with Shuuhei or ... if there is more ? Like him having feelings for this best friend ... Gaaah, you make me want AkonShuu now !
And then, the final scene. It breaks my heart everytime. I lost some pieces of it and they're too small to be put together, THANK YOU !

Now I want you to stop your studies/abandon your job/your family/your friends/give up your hobbies/... and keep writing for the rest of your life.
Please.
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From ANON - Amy on September 23, 2010
I hope you realize you killed me and broke my heart in a thousand pieces ? Yes ?
Okay then. I'm gonna cry some more and try and mend my poor bleeding heart, and then I'll come back for a better review. But now ? Duh, I'm a mess.
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