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Reviews for A Grudge's Decision

By : toujourseveille

From GudenMulle on September 04, 2011
I gotta say.. Even though the story is decidedly uncomfortable, disturbing and frustrating I'm really into it. You mentioned in one of your author-notes that the way you're setting everything up is weird and you don't understand how we could like it, well I do. But I like to Haruki Murakami as well, and he is totally off-the-wall, so your stuff is light-weight ;). Ichigo is frustrating me alot, I suppose I'm sympathizing with Urahara, and I don't quite see how he can ever.. be him again, or anything remotely close to it. I appreciate Ishida's reactions, I can follow him and his monumental awkwardsness around Ichigo is very realistic. This long chapter was really good! I've reviewed before, and I will be back for more later when you update :)
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From HollowedRose on August 26, 2011
I feel... depressed after reading the chapter. There were moments I wanted to punch Ishida in the face, he really deserved it a few times. But then again, can you blame him? People are not used to dealing with such situations, they simply don't like to be around sick people. I'm really feeling sorry for Urahara, he doesn't deserve any of it. And it hurts to see how his efforts are treated with such hate and malice. Ok, he made a mistake, a grave one from Ichigo's point of view but from another point of view, it was just him willing to do almost anything to not let Ichigo starve himself to death. I for one can't really blame Urahara. And what's even more sad is how what happened to Ichigo continues to affect everyone around him. I felt sorry for Jinta, he seems so... unlike his usual self. Ahhh sad sad sad... I think I'll go to a dark corner now and mop over the tragedy of this all.
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From HollowedRose on April 27, 2011
Sorry it took so long but finally I'm kind of... sort of... back. I'm often like this, I take long breaks from things, it's a bit annoying but at least I always go back, in this case to my fanfic also and reading others.

Ok let's see... That scene with Renji telling Ichigo he should ask for comfort since he looked like so badly needed was it was... sad, I really wish Ichigo would've said he needed it, but knowing Ichigo, of course he wouldn't. The other scene that I can't get out of my mind if when Urahara tried to feed him, it was like I could almost see the scene unfold before my eyes, I love the way you write, I really do. I feel sorry for Ichigo, he's such a mess but I can't stop feeling sorry for Urahara too, most than everyone one else in the fic besides Ichigo. He's doing his best to help Ichigo but from the looks of it with not much success.

Also... what the hell?! *shocked* Ichigo dressing up like his father? That was so fucked up, so disturbing, I'm starting to doubt Ichigo's sanity, more so than before at least. Of course he was never that sane with a hollow in his head but still... I also feel sorry for his hollow.

Will things ever get any better? One can always hope.

About what you said on your review on my fic, now that you mentioned it, I am not sure Hachi can heal someone... can he? Seriously, I don't know. Sure he brought back Tsubaki but if he could then why didn't he heal his arm when he lost it? :
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From HollowedRose on January 29, 2011
Great chapter, as always. There's one thing I didn't understand, just after the "Ichigo was so tight" part that Isshin says, who is the she person that vows torture? I'm a little confused there since I thought his old friend talking to him at that moment was Urahara. Is the she person Yourichi?
Also, I saw your drawings, they're great, you draw Urahara really well and you're very good with expressions. *applauds*
I hope to see more from you. ^^

On a different note, I've been so lazy lately that I haven't written almost anything. I think I got a little discouraged since someone wrote in one of the reviews that she ( probably ) was confused, not being able to tell if Uryuu loves Ichigo or not. I can't say that was my intention, so now I'm in that "my writing sucks horribly" mood. xD

But, I'm forcing myself to write something right now, so I'm curious to see if your Fic radar works again. =P

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From ANON - qwerty on January 22, 2011
I really love this style of writing. Very creative and apropos to the situation. Loved your drawing btw.
Keep going!
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From GudenMulle on December 30, 2010
I'm so.. you've got me. I'm intrigued by this story, as horrible as it is. Didn't understand ANYTHING of the Japanese stuff. Was Ishida worried that Ichigo was going to commit suicide in that really short part?
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From HollowedRose on December 30, 2010
Finally! *stops beating her with a stick*

Interesting chapter, I'm glad you wrote more about what happened that day, like the part with "Sit down...!" I can see why he'd ask her sister to do that. It's those little things that make me like this fic, you're really good when it comes to a character's reactions.
Also, you gave writing Kon a go, I'm glad you did, but you made him hate him, sadly, damn coward. I also forgot about him when I read the first chapter of your fic.
I'm glad there's that mention of his Hollow in the omake, I wonder what his Hollow's opinion is regarding what happened...

Also... japanese? Woah, is the text under it a translation or are you just gonna make learn japanese to see what it means? I've always wanted to learn it, but I sort of lacked motivation. Strangely enough, I understood about 80% of the Bleach Movie 4 Trailer when I watched it, so maybe I have a chance.

*keeps the beating stick in range* That's for later if you don't update again for a very long time. =P

( You know what's interesting? I actually started writing the next chapter of my fic and at some point I also said something about Ichigo looking like a beaten dog, and today I saw you writing something similar. o.O )
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From ANON - qwerty on November 16, 2010
I think you're doing a great job with Ichigo's (lack of) growth process.
Great chapter!! Keep going!!
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From HollowedRose on November 13, 2010
I can't believe you posted it! I think it was good, especially Urahara's observation, it kind of made my brain hurt a little, which is exactly why it was good as it sounded very professional. Poor Ichigo, I feel like hugging him. I also read your notes at the end and I understood exactly what you meant. Losing the will to do anything because of something traumatic ( not necessarily rape or physical abuse ) can happen and in my case I still haven't managed to get it back. I can somewhat pretend though to not worry the others. I love the realism in your fic, and I can't wait for the next chapter ( no matter when that will happen ).

Anyway, since I am a very fast reader I only noticed one sentence that sounds wrong. Here it is: "You make you((rself)) feel worse! We just want to help. We spend every day with you�"

I think it should be yourself instead of you. If something sounds wrong to me it usually is wrong. And when it still sounds wrong no matter how much I try to make it sound right then I remind myself I really need to study the english grammar instead of just relying on what I learned from watching movies.
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From rabidminimoose on October 20, 2010
after reading the second chapter i wanted to read more of stuff like this. it got me really emotional and all protective of ichigo heh anyways if you continue this i would love you forever!! this is just too interesting to ignore and not want more of this anyways yep nice story and stuff lol
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From Mirrors1984 on August 26, 2010
I find myself really enjoying the drama in this story. It's realistic and sometimes stuff like this in real life unfortunately happen which is why I like it. Interested in seeing more! I want to know how the Kurosaki family will survive all of this.
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From ANON - Namira on August 12, 2010
This is really interesting! I really hope to see more. You could certainly get away with ignoring Bleach's plot if you really want to; the timeline was never all that specific, and all that mess could easily lie in the vague future for an indefinite amount of time. Your choice.
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From GudenMulle on August 05, 2010
OH my god.. I love you, but at the same time I distinctly DISlike you for putting Ichigo through this.. You understand what I mean, right? GOD..
The jumping in time and place, and use of bold and italic and stuff, it makes PERFECT sense to me, I think it's really well-used in a seemingly random, yet-not kind of way. My stomach is turning, but at the same time I IMPLORE you to write more, if not only to satisfy my own strange need for more, then to get Ichigo just a little bit out of this horrible stage of healing/depression. If you're going to mix the whole Aizen-Arrancar-War-thing into it, then (just a very sadistic thought) maybe Grimmjow could somehow figure the rough points of what has happened out from Ichigo's body-language and taunt him with it? Like .. Ichigo would be in the battle because he can only vent through training, though he reacts more savagely when anybody is close to actually touching him bodily, and so he is a fighter alongside the others? What will his Inner Hollow do? Will he exploit this uncharacteristic and rare period of weakness? How will Renji and Rukia react?
You've got me in your wicked net. I HAVE to read and know..
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From benihimechan on August 04, 2010
your story your rules, AU it if u want. get rid of Aizen and his "magic ball" (love the term)
great story

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From Crya2Evans on July 27, 2010
Wow. That was... I'm speechless. The disjointed way it was constructed was perfect for the story you're trying to tell here. I'm particularly impressed with how you handled it. And it is, perhaps, the darkest take on the dynamics of the Kurosaki household. And yet, the most realistic of the darkest takes, if that makes any sense. I'm sure, considering the average age of writers in this fandom, that this sort of thing has been done before, but I'm also certain that their works pale in comparison to this one. It's raw, brutal, and honest and in no way glorifies the actions shown. Ichigo is made to suffer the worst here and Isshin is, by no means, blameless. But it's not just Ichigo's pain you show here, but also Isshin's and how one woman's death can tear apart a family so deeply. It tears me apart, right here in the gut.

In short, this was a very well-done piece of work. And you should be proud, for the aesthetic sense and for having the guts to post it on here where some people are liable to rip you to shreds for it (I've experience in this with my work on "Of Violence" where I chickened out and didn't show hardly any of the violence).
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