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From moonymuch on April 28, 2009
Ahhh, the mystery is explained. Interesting! That Ai girl creeps me out, seriously. *shudders*
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From ANON - Gatita on April 23, 2009
I am both deliriously honored and happy that you dedicated a chapter to me! ~.~ I�m also a little tongue, not really knowing what to say, so I guess I�ll just say Thank You for that.

On to the actual review: I�m not sure what it says about me that I have taken an utter and immediate dislike to Ren Nanashi. Not for the fact that she looks like Gwydion�s ex, but her attitude itself. She came off as pompous and just blah. I can only commend you for your writing ability in creating characters that inspire and resonate with the reader. Plus my mind already started running in all sorts of directions with which you could create elaborate plot twists with her. Not to just wait and see if any of them pan out!

Gwydion takes the meaning of the word humble and denial and extends them to new heights. It is an interesting flaw for him to have, one that affects every aspects of his life to such an extent that he doesn�t even realize how far it goes and how deep it affects him. And I imagine it will be one that will cause so much damage in the future when he actually goes to overcome it, assuming Soi-Fong doesn�t beat his head in first to make him realize what he is doing. Either way would make for a fascinating event.

I also must say that you have an astonishing method of explaining theories so that they actually make sense and seem plausible. One of the things that has baffled me in Bleach is the ranking of the Hollows and the making of the different classifications. It seems like they through out the earlier explanations when they started to classify the Espada and those below them. I could believe it if someone told me they said �Continuity, who cares about that. No one is going to be paying attention to the explanations of the Factions and how you need to go from the Menos to Adjuntas to Vasto Lord (who they have yet to show one) to the Arrancar to Espadas and back again to the Privaron Espada .� I mean seriously it got to the point where I didn�t even bother trying to figure out the stupid classifications! Grrrr. You on the other hand explained the concept to create these new �defective� Mod Souls of Mayuri�s in such a way that my little brain said �Oh that makes sense. Who knew?� (Please excuse the ranting about continuity, it is one of my pet peeves and I tend to take it very seriously and I get a little over emotional about it).

I bow down to you in the masterful way you had both Gwydion and Soi-Fong rub it in to Ai. It was such a slap into her face that I KNOW she won�t take it lying down, and it will bite them in the ass, but I still laughed.

I want you to know that as a reader I am thoroughly enjoying this story. I understand that you as a writer are taking time out of your life to write something that is an outlet, a hobby or practice for when you actually write a novel to sell and get published. I don�t know your reasoning for why you write. I can just tell you that I am grateful that you do since I take great pleasure in reading this story.

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From ANON - Watcher on April 22, 2009
*Gasp!*

Can it be?

It is! Behold, the plot comes from the hills to the north to rout our reluctance, just as Sobieski routed the Turk upon the gates of Vienna!

All jokes aside, awesome, *awesome* chapter. Plenty of plot, well presented, follows much more logical lines than some previous works. (Love Kaien as a character. His complex, confusing, god-moding power? Not so much. Please don't take offense. *chuckles, but nervously, remembering past incidents*).

Ren... either a plant by these "shiniboko" (hollow + death) or Chiaki's recycled konpaku. Pretty sure it's the latter, though the former more appeals to my sensibilities. Whiny jerk of a girl, though, given your track record, one who has an epiphany coming, and probably a painful one. Heh-heh.

So, yeah. Gwydion's screwed. Plot structure dictates: loses this fight, experimented on, survives, maintains sanity, resists, rescued by Soul Reapers led by Soi who reaffirms that she loves him even though he's no longer human (you know what I mean). Or, alternatively, loses his memories and humanity in the process, becomes general, only regains both by meeting Soi again. Either way, he's got about as much chance of winning this next one as Kurita has of outrunning Panther in Eyeshield 21.

Anyway, sorry I didn't review last time. I honestly meant to, but kept putting it off. Sorry to be a source of discouragement for you. *Cries honest tears*

I love Jushiro and Unohana's appearence so far. Both of them are veritable founts of wisdom, and I appreciate that the Smiling Death Stare remains intact.

Some kinda donnybrook comin' up. FIGHT FOR YOUR LIFE! Rock on!
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From moonymuch on April 13, 2009
I'm sorry you're feeling down! Is it because of life in general or is it writing woes? Well either way, hang in there! Great chapter, as usual, and thanks for the shout-out. :D
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From ANON - gatita on April 11, 2009
i posted the earlier review, but forgot to put my name. Sorry about that. The again it wouldn't have happened if i wasn't so sleepy, but again my fault so sorry.
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From ANON - Anon on April 11, 2009
I�m not sure what to tackle first, the cliff hanger ending where the assumption is that his ex whom he killed is still alive, or the complete and utter love I have for your interpretation and interaction of the Women�s Association. I adore the insinuation that Retsu, with her calm fa�ade is more terrifying than all the tortures in the second division. Also, the fact that the men smoothly left the situation, knowing the value of retreat, while they still could before the interrogation struck. It made me utterly giddy.

The mental block that Gwydion appears to have is an interesting twist. Although, it shouldn�t come as surprise with how you�ve established his personality. Especially with the emphasis you gave to how he fought Tatsumi and how he solved the awkwardness when fighting her. And yet I was still surprised by the notion. Although, that could be because I had a flash of Kenshin�s Rurounin persona from Samurai X, in particular when Gwydion spoke in formal language to Yoruichi.

Ukitake and Retsu are the most capable manipulators in the whole series. They just smile and you fall over to do what they want. The mental image of Ukitake giving you the impression of kicking a puppy, while giving you the puppy dog eyes and playing with a bouncing baby left me breathless with laughter. He would smile like that!

I can�t wait to read the next chapter! Mostly for the answers of who is Chiaki, what was she doing at Ichigo�s house, will Soi-Fong wake up from her faint in time to help, and how will the Association�s meeting go and did she remember he outburst to Kin, Retsu and Yoruichi? (And doesn�t this whole paragraph remind anyone of the old cartoons where they are trying to convince you to tune in for the next show ~.~*)

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From moonymuch on April 04, 2009
Hey. School and work are really crazy right now, so yeah...I haven't been able to do much of anything lately. :(

As always, your lemons display a great balance of..well, smut and feeling. It's such an odd combination when you think about it, but somehow it works. LOVED the cameo from Ukitake and Unohana. And yes, the men should be scared. The SWA is not something to be trifled with. It's no wonder the SMA is so marginalized, hehe.
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From ANON - Anon on March 27, 2009
That was a very good chapter you've made. I never would have thought that I would see Soi Fong fall in love with someone or be nervous
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From Watcher on March 24, 2009
Nice enough chapter. Good sex scene at the beginning, particularly the little affectionate touches in the midst of the "action." (Hee hee hee!)

I enjoyed Retsu and Jushiro's cameo, as expected, and I eagerly await further jokes from the Women's Association and further plot from analysis of the cadavers. I'd have liked the chapter to be a bit longer, but haven't had much free time myself lately (hence the lack of updates) and understand your own. Waiting patiently for more over here.
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From ANON - gatita on March 19, 2009
I can�t get over the interesting dichotomy you have in your lemons. Last chapter was a wonderful first time with all the characteristics you expect to see. Emotions ranging from: eagerness, to giddiness, with the usual hints of first time uneasiness. Then you give us this wonderful chapter that goes straight into the other extreme. Hot, heavy, fast paced animalistic sex. Both sides leave a reader happy and wanting more.

Then there are the lighter and fluffier moments, for lack of a better term, with everyone else. The happy family moments that tie back into the first stories, and characters we have grown to adore. Especially as those characters reappear and get a spotlight in the story. It is wonderful to know that Retsu and Ukitake will be playing a prominent role, but that just brings up more rampant speculation on what might happen later on. Which just means you have me clinging to this story until the end; and should you write another story in this universe, I�ll read that one too.

I cannot express my eternal glee over the machinations of the association. You have to admire their way of not only getting what they want, but terrifying their significant others in the process too. Out of all the parts you write I think those where the association shines are my favorite. They never fail to make me smile.

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From sheastar334 on March 09, 2009
I haven't reviewed in a while... SORRY! Forgive me. :} I LOVED this chapter. Soi's so cute!! And Gwydion HOTTTT!!! I have a feeling the drama really starts from here though.....
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From ANON - Sesshy81 (too damn lazy to log in) on March 04, 2009
Heh...I stopped reviewing 'cause all of your writing is just awesome. I find it a bit pointless to constantly write "that was great" after every chapter. I've been doing a lot of reading lately, mostly in the GW universe, and hadn't checked this for updates until today. So that being said, I truthfully haven't been taht interested in reading this. I like Soi-Fong, but she was never that important a character to me. Give me Grimmy any day. ^.^' And Ulquiora on my good days. I kinda miss seeing the Vizard. They add such a ... dynamic plot point to the whole story. I kinda wonder why I haven't seen more Grimmjow/Hiyori fics... *shrugs* They are so much alike. Yet their backgrounds are so wildly different. Excuse my rambling. random thoughts from a tired mind. Anyway, I don't like how they just sorta vanished after giving Ichigo the training he needed. Shinji may be a bastard but he's a fun bastard. Oh well. Nothing I can do about it.
Anyway I wanted to say: more great writing, please keep it up.
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From xSTALKERx on March 03, 2009
Loved the chapter!!! It's nice to see them taking that next step!

Life's been hectic (new job training) so I have had next to zero time to do anything else.

I'll still be lurking for updates though!
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From JHHolliday on March 02, 2009
An excellent chapter, as always. I suppose I should just keep my criticism to myself I am by my very nature a spiteful and mercurial person. So, for everyone's sake, I must ask you to continue to do that voodoo that you do so well. P.S. The phrase is 'et tu' even though the proper French for that would be 'et toi'. But I hope you can forgive the francophone that I am.
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From yansuke on March 01, 2009
all right!!! another great chapter!!! i feel so bad everyone's making huge reviews with so much help while im the little guy at the end... lol
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