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Reviews for The Cold Is To Be Endured.

By : enslavementthesis

From ANON - Loki1 on January 24, 2011
Just gotta say this story is amazing. The writing is very well done and the events flow nicely! I hope you update soon.
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From ANON - BlackButterfly on May 22, 2010
Wow, you completely mystified me with the last two chapters, my head feels like it might explode from the interest! I love the way this is written, how we delve into Orihime's head in such a troubling, strange place and situation. Ulquiorra and Aizen are described wonderfully (though I admit Grimmjow doesn't seem himself at times) and the plot isn't rushed at all! I hope you will update this story soon, and that some points are made clear for the curious.
Good luck!
BlackButterfly.
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From brainfear on December 16, 2009
Really really good! Can't wait for more!

ch9
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From severuslover on August 12, 2009
yay! Update! So glad you haven't forgotten about this story. I really enjoyed this chap :D. Good luck with the writing!

Kay`
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From ANON - saiyasluv on August 09, 2009
I always know, when I walk away from a story, but yet can't get it off my mind, this means I am totally captured by it, and this one did just that!! This story is great, and I can't wait to read more!!
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From moodymel on June 11, 2009
I like the story so far. You've done a good job describing Orihime's lonliness and isolation. It looks like you can pair her with several characters. I look forward to the next chapter and who she ends up with.
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From ANON - LB7 on April 30, 2009
Oh btw, did you know about Ulquiorra's theme song? http://lookingback7.deviantart.com/art/Moonshield-ulquiorra-118492062 (here are lyrics and a link to a live performance.

Kubo Tite chose this song for Ulquiorra's theme, it reminds me of your chapter 8, with it's references to red and cold and fire, especially this stanza:
And how I lust for the dance and the fire
deep of the nectarine sunset to drink
spill me the wind and its fire
to steal of the colors - I'm the moonshield

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From ANON - LB7 on April 30, 2009
Very, very interesting story. I've just read through chapter eight. Very nicely written. You've honed in on certain aspects of these characters' natures and created an intriguing scenario. The tension is great. I'm loving the oblique hints at what goes on behind Ulquiorra's facade. Looking forward to more updates.
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From severuslover on April 03, 2009
This is so wonderful. I am thoroughly enjoying this. The characterisation of Ulquiorra (sp?) is perfect. Best I've read so far. I also like the characterization of Inoue, everything seems intact, even her idle thoughts and questions lol. I also like the pace of this story because it fits with the pairing. People seem to think a romance happens in three chapters. :D The progression is good and I really like the dialogue :D. Update soon!!!

Kay~
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From HitomiBrighteyes on February 13, 2009
Extremely well written! One of the best I've come across in this fandom. I really love the character intereaction. You've done a really good job on keeping true to the characters' personalities rather than rushing ahead for the purely "romantic" bit. I'm curious now to see what happens next. Keep up the excellent work!
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From ANON - taixi on February 13, 2009
OK, after having seen this chapter updated on ff dot net as well, and seeing your A/N on that site, I believe that this chapter was intended to be the full chapter as-is. (It was hard to judge without an author's note, since normally your chapters are so much longer, and also taken discretely (i.e. with no further reflections/interaction between the characters) the writing style and impact of this chapter is so very much different than your usual updates.) I'm still left with the impression that this chapter is essentially a teaser, though. Although clearly you're attempting to give us a glimpse into the internal struggle (awakening) that Ulquiorra is experiencing as a result of his interactions with (and reactions to) Orihime, the feel of this chapter is frankly so drastically different than all other chapters that the reader (at least, speaking for myself) is left with the sense that something is missing.

If I may speculate for a moment, I think perhaps you may be attempting to use this drastic change in approach to drive home the difference in mental processing between Orihime (who has essentially served as the narrator thus far, and as such we readers have become accustomed to thinking of the world from her complex (and fully [over]-analyzed perspective)) versus Ulquiorra (who, if the current chapter is to be taken as representative of his though processes in general, is a much more simplistic thinker). If this is indeed what you are trying to convey, I can understand some of the choices you've made here (for example, the use of the short, basic images (color, heat, etc.) resonates with the idea that the hollows exist as similar to our baser natures, and are more animalistic). However, given (what I see as) Ulqiuorra's demonstrated complexity of thought in the canon (manga and anime) - for example, his ability to see the worth in Orihime's powers, and his apparent role in masterminding Orihime's capture and manipulation (and even if he's just following Aizen's master plan, his ability to conceptualize the intricacies of such manipulation) - these very basic images and physical sensations, as expressed in this chapter, simply do not seem to fully capture Ulquiorra's complexities (IMHO).

Alternatively, if your intended goal was not to emphasize the difference in Orihime's and Ulquiorra's natures/thought processes as a general matter, but rather to demonstrate the extreme angst that contact with Orihime has caused Ulquiorra to experience, then I think it would be beneficial (both for the sake of internal consistency of your writing style within the story, as well as a bit of clarity for the reader) to provide some sort of external reflection on the internal struggle we are exposed to in this chapter. For example, a vignette of Ulquiorra interacting with Aizen, Grimmjow, or any other being in Hueco Mundo (interaction with Orihime at this point probably wouldn't serve your purposes) or even depicting Ulquiorra alone and performing some routine task, would likely help to place his internal struggles firmly within the context of the story.

As always, this is clearly just my opinion of what might be improved, and I still will enjoy and appreciate the story regardless. Thanks for sharing this delightful story with us all. And apologies for this LOOOONG review :)
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From ANON - taixi on February 13, 2009
I'm going to have to second the confusion re: chapter 8. Did the rest of the chapter get accidentally cut off perhaps?
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From ANON - A.J. on February 12, 2009
Okay...I'm offically confused by chapter 8. Please, could someone explain?
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From WinterWake on January 29, 2009
I love this story. I think the best thing about ch. 7 is that, like Orihime, the reader builds up an expectation/anticipation for what will happen when Ulquiorra returns because we didn't see him for two whole chapters. So when he DOES reappear--and he has totally slammed his walls back down, and is again untouchable and aloof--the reader feels just as disoriented and disappointed as she does. But the more one thinks on it, one realizes that that's totally in character for Ulquiorra, and we have to come to Orihime's conclusion--why SHOULD we have expect anything else? I'd like to congratulate you, because while I like reading about Orihime, I almost never relate to her--in cannon or in fanfic--but you've managed to really get me in sync with her, and I applaud you.

And on another note, I like the fact that her experience with his hollow hole is an unpleasant one. I've never seen that particular situation written as anything but gratifying, even though a hollow hole seems to be the essence of painful emptiness, not a pleasure. Well done. Can't wait for the next chapter!
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From ANON - taixi on January 22, 2009
Very interesting and original take on what touching a hollow hole might feel like. I've never seen it done this way before, but it works very well in this context.

Also, I'm looking forward to finding out what has caused Ulquiorra's new (or perhaps more accurately, reversion to his old) demeanor. I'm thinking either he's been confronted by Aizen in some way, so that Ulquiorra feels he needs to keep his distance, or perhaps it's not even real and instead Aizen is using illusions to cast this current version of Ulquiorra. I guess I'll just have to wait patiently until you reveal something of Ulquiorra's reasons for the change!

As an aside, I thought I should point out that there are a couple places where it looks like your beta reader made some parenthetical suggestions, but you forgot to remove the suggestions before posting.
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