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By : Crya2Evans

From ANON - Kuromei on October 28, 2008
*sniffles* Sad. So much sad. TT____TT Wonderful chapter, but sad. I know you warned us, but it still gets you in the gut. Especially the parts with the kids. Definately tugs at your heartstrings. If it didn't, then there is something seriously wrong with you.

But at least we know things are only looking up from here. It may take a while, but a happy ending is coming, and that's enough for me. =3 *thumbs-up, then hugs*
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From ANON - Anon on October 21, 2008
I do believe you just killed me. Have I mentioned how much I despise crying? Really I do. Ironic that I should have been playing my Sarah Mclachlan around the time I noticed you'd updated. Idiotic me, decided to turn on Angel when I saw the tissue warning, thinking it'd help with the over all effect. Of course, I should have foreseen hearing an angelic voice singing: "You're in the arms of the angels - may you find some comfort here," sadly, making it worse. Much, much worse.

I leave for work in thirty minutes and I'll arrive with a bright red nose and puffy eyes. Besides the water works it was, as always, beautifully written. I adore the way you write and your plots, so please update again soon!
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From ANON - Ranna on October 21, 2008
Rukia!!!! Waaaaaah! Everyone is going to be just shattered! *starts crying*
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From mhmartini on October 21, 2008
It seems I've been behind in reviewing. The last three chapters were amazing. You set up situations in vivid detail without dragging out the descriptions. And by the next chapter, the importance of the details before becomes apparent. For that reason I know this last chapter was not character dislike, but a pivotal part of your plot.

When I read the last chapter, I was immediately relived that Ichigo and Rukia were on good terms and that he had started to come to terms with their separation. I know that would not make it easier for him, but it would help reduce his regrets later. I also wonder if his children, being much more sensitive than he realizes, might already know something is amiss. I doubt they would know exactly what, but I imagine they would know something is terribly, terribly wrong.

Despite my absence from reviewing, I have been following this story and it just keeps getting better. You really get into the character's heads and tell us what is going on through their thoughts and feelings. Two things that really jumped out at me in the last chapter were Ichigo's feeling Rukia through their (albeit fading) bond - that was so tragically romantic! - and the comment to the effect of how Ichigo would have loved to have drawn his sword and charged in, but the decades had given him more sense. You have changed the characters in your story, but you've changed them in a realistic and believable way and made them grow, and I think that shows your skill as an author.

I am, of course, looking forward to more chapters.

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From SarahTaylor on October 20, 2008
Even though I was kinda expecting that it still hit hard. I could feel the tears building behind my eyes and then when Ichigo felt it happen I almost totally lost it.
When he tells the kids I'm gonna have a hell of a time keeping my keyboard dry!! I so felt for Byuakuya, he thinks he has to be so strong and composed that he can't break down and cry like he wants to and needs to. You really know how to wind a girl. I'd write more but I really need to get some sleep.
I half want the next chapter and half don't knowing that I'm gonna be in tears by the end of it.
Keep up the wonderful work Draco.
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From Yakumo on October 20, 2008
RUKIA DIED!! Poor Ichi..-hugs him- and Juushiro...-hugs him too- I'm looking forward to your next update..
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From sweetsatincocoa on October 20, 2008
I feel sad for Rukia. I'm neutral about her dying, and even though I feel sad for her, I cried (how lame and girly of me) over Ukitake's guilt. Guilt is a terrible thing...I'm sure everything will come full circle, and I also sometimes bite my nails over what I've written. I figure people read these stories for the angst and pain, I mean if they wanted happiness, that's what Nickelodeon is for, right?

*pours out sake in remembrance of Kurosaki Rukia*
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From ANON - Kuromei on October 20, 2008
I'm definately not glad that she's gone, but I understand that some things are necessary for the sake of the plot. I'll be waiting to see what you've got in mind for the next few chapters, but in the meantime I'll be mourning. Just a little. *sniffle*

As sad as it was, it was another great chapter. It makes happy endings that much more satisfying. ^w^ *hugs*
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From Shaylilin on October 20, 2008
Oh my god. I feel so bad for Ichigo. What IS he going to tell his kids? And Ichigo and Byakuya barely holding it together. And Jyuu doesn't want to be a captain anymore. And ... and... I actually cried while I was reading this. It was so heart-wrenching. I'm so glad that Jyuu had Kira. I hope that Bya and Ichi can pull some strength from each other, from their friendship, and manage to get through this. I'm so worried about how the kids are going to take this!

*whispers* I hate when bad things happen to kids. I cry a lot about kids getting hurt now that I'm a mom.

*nervously waiting for the next chapter*
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From ANON - Anon on October 20, 2008
I sort of understand why you allowed her to die. It makes more sense with the children if Byakuya and Ichigo came together out of mutual loss than be the reason why their parents divorced. Kaien would never forgive Byakuya or Ichigo, plus this way Byakuya will have heirs...Rukia's children will now be his and Ichigo's children. I can't wait to see how everything turns out.
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From ANON - jermaina on October 12, 2008
the story is getting very interesting so far, i really like the chapter, where ichigo and byakuya kissed ^-^
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From ANON - Ranna on October 07, 2008
Finally, a little happiness.
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From SarahTaylor on October 07, 2008
Byakuya eaves dropping, that's a new onw XD I loved the line where he thought he wasn't some ruffian or Renji. That started me off on a good giggle XD

It was so sweet when they reverted to their old selves, that was just priceless, the banter between them was perfect. The convo with Rukia was well done too, it had the right hint of awkwardness to start and then relaxed nicely. I love how Juu-chan just knows. There really is no point hiding things from him.

Oh and leaving both sentarou (sp ?) and Kiyone in charge would have been disastorous, even Aizen couldn't do as much damage as they could XD

I can't believe I didn't get the Shrek reference, the second you said it I could hear Donkey (or Eddie Murphy to be technical) saying it. And now I'm worried, I know you won't kill off one of the kids but now I think your sights are set on Rukia.

Ok, I will patiently (sort of) wait for the next chapter.
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From ANON - Anon on October 07, 2008
Oh pooh. And here I thought we were out of the weeping woods. *sighs sadly and reaches for her tissue box* Well, I'm armed. Write away.
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From sweetsatincocoa on October 06, 2008
I usually listen to music while I read stories, and I started listening to Kanye West's 'Love Lockdown' and it really sort of describes Ichigo and Byakuya's situation. Still a great story, still wanting to poke Rukia in the eye.

Verse 1:
I'm not lovin' you, way I wanted to
What I had to do, had to run from you
I'm in love with you, but the vibe is wrong
And that haunted me, all the way home
So ya never know, never never know
Never know enough, 'til it's over love
'Til we lose control, system overload
Screamin' no no no, no no
I'm not lovin' you, way I wanted to
See I wanna move, but can't escape from you
So I keep it low, keep a secret code
So everybody else don't have to know

Chorus:
So keep ya love locked down, ya love locked down
Keepin ya love locked down, ya love locked down
Now keep ya love locked down, ya love locked down
Now keep ya love locked down, you lose...

Verse 2:
I'm not lovin' you, way I wanted to
I can't keep my cool, so I keep it true
I got somethin to lose, so I gotta move
I can't keep myself, and still keep you too
So I keep in mind, when I'm on my own
Somewhere far from home, in the danger zone
How many times did I take 'fore I finally got through
you lose, you lose
I'm not lovin you, way I wanted to
See I had to go, see I had to move
No more wastin' time, you can't wait for life
which is wastin' time, where's the finish line

Chorus:
So keep ya love locked down, ya love locked down
Keepin ya love locked down, ya love locked down
Now keep ya love locked down, ya love locked down
Now keep ya love locked down, you lose...

Verse 3:
I'm not lovin you, way I wanted to
I bet no one new, I got no one new
I know I said I'm through, but got love for you
But I'm not lovin' you, way I wanted to
Gotta keep it goin', keep the lovin' goin'
Keep it on a roll, only God knows
If I be with you, baby I'm confused
You choose, you choose
I'm not lovin' you, way I wanted to
Where I want to go, I don't need you
I've been down this road, too many times before
I'm not lovin' you, the way I wanted to

Chorus:
So keep ya love locked down, ya love locked down
Keepin ya love locked down, ya love locked down
Now ya love locked down, ya love locked down
Now ya love locked down, you lose,...you lose,
...you lose,...you lose,...you lose
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