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By : Gnat

From happygirl24 on April 27, 2008
so hot that was so hot update soon please
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From steisi on April 27, 2008
Love, I really have no idea how to begin this. Let me say frst that that three chapter update was the best present I could have wished for. I enjoyed it all immensely. A better look at Renji's mind, a meeting with Suzuki, the Vizards making their first appearance and offer to Ichigo, and, finally...Well the last chapter had one of the most intense and well written lemons I've ever come across. Congratulations on a job more than well done. I wonder what happened to Ishida though...Anyway, it doesn't matter how long I'll have to wait for the next update; it'll be more than worth it, I'll tell you this much. It would be nice to see the morning after through Grimmjow's eyes though. Ichigo's posessivness was certainly a pleasant surprise, by the way. I'll be looking forward to the day you decide to update again, whenever that may be! Kisses from you happy and sated (thouh still anxiously expectant) reviewer!
P.S.
I listened to Poets of the Fall's 'Carnival of Rust' while I read this. I strongly recommend you listen to it too, if you get the chance. I think it suits this story to a 't', but that's just me.
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From Halskr on April 27, 2008
Im not ussually a fan of this pairing because they tend to be so dark. Except for the first couple of chapters your story has toned down some and is actually quite interesting. I like how in the anime and manga the arrancar seem to inhabit grey areas with enough of a code of honor to be sympathetic. Thanks for sharing this.
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From Rockyshores on April 27, 2008
Chapter 14 is so far my favorite! SO hot!!! I wish gromm would stop commenting on how hot other ppl are though, it kinda ruins it for me.
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From ANON - Yoshitaka on April 27, 2008
Wow..... I.. I'm speechless... That was too hot.
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From ANON - MotokiHiga on April 23, 2008
You...you tease! Gah, I hate it when authors write chapters like this and leave the readers hanging. I mean, I know it's necessary in order to hook the readers sometimes, but without the next chapter? Aww, man...

I can't really give you anything to work with--currently, I'm waiting for the chapter when Ichigo and Ishida go back to the club and Ichi meets up with that one boy (forgot his name, sorry), and then GRIMMJOW finds out... Hoi, that'll be interesting. Also, I have to commend you on your brilliant fight between Renji and Grimmjow--and the way Rukia handled it. Hey, at least the two hot-heads agree on something.

I've been reading this for a while now, sorry that I didn't leave a review. Last time I tried the site said that I needed to be a member. Oh well.

Update soon, and don't leave me hanging, please!
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From Telpei on April 22, 2008
Shinigami like apples. kukuku.

Apparently hollows do too :P

lol I apologize if my inane deathnote reference isn't understood ^_^; Great story! I love how you write Grimmjow, especially his way of interacting with Ichigo. Too cute! :) Please update soon!
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From ANON - Nickie on April 22, 2008
I have never really found a fic that I felt inspired to write a review for, so I must say that this is a first for me. I began with the intention of writing a simple paragraph summarizing my love for your work, but it turned into about two pages worth of review. I'm afraid that I can't post the entire thing without it being cut off and I feel it might be too long to break into multiple review posts. I then thought about emailing it to you, but alas, your email is hidden. I'm not sure what else to do.

Perhaps you can email me and then I can simply send you my whole review. That way your email remains confidential and I still get to show my love for your amazing fic.

So if you read this, and feel like you'd want to hear what lil' ol' me has to say, then email me away. :)

AND THANK YOU SO MUCH FOR ALL THE EFFORT YOU PUT INTO THIS ASTOUNDING PIECE OF WORK!
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From ANON - Tai~Chi on April 21, 2008
Hi Hi, I really like how the story is going so far... GrimIchi is by far the best in my books :P!!! Okay so ummm you asked about mpreg and I wouldn't because I think that having a guy pregnent would be overload in the story... Also I think that Grim, Ichi + Renji should somehow get into a... complicated situation like at a hot spring or something cuz that's always fun ;P... Ummm Inuoe is a Charecter that I really don't like cuz of her "woe is me" personallity so as little as Inuoe as possible would make the story go smoothly!!!

But OMG THIS STORY IS SO GOOD!!! I check my Facorites everyday to see if you've updated cuz that's how in love I am with the story, I seem to be a sucker for the rival quarel type love but its just so0o0o0... hawt!!! Lol... So ya your story is going along so smoothly and the pace that your writing is definetly amazing...

Thnx So Much 4 writing this story :P!!!

!!!Tai~Chi!!!
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From ANON - magick on April 21, 2008
(arggh about 3/4 of my review got cut off... here's the rest!)

I love your portrayals of all of the characters, especially Grimmjow- and, Shinji, what a surprise to see you here! xDD I loved his entrance. He's one of my favorites. He's so adorably disturbing. But yeah. Loving the story. The relationship you've woven between Grimmjow and Ichigo is fantastic, and I hope you continue to weave it just as beautifully. :D

ONE critique I want to make, however, is about your, erm, pronoun usage. It's the curse of yaoi stories! those pronouns. He, he, him, his, him, he... guh, talk about a mess. But most of the time yaoi writers can avoid it by using proper nouns! and epithets. I think you might want to look into using them a little more; you use pronouns a lot without specifying their antecedents, jumping between paragraphs and lines of dialogue and whatnot, and sometimes it can get a little confusing to read. "He said," "he smiled," "he...he..." etc. And we never know which 'he' you're talking about, either Ichigo or Grimmjow or, occasionally, Ishida or Renji or whoever, even in context. Sometimes it's obvious who says what, but sometimes it's not so obvious, and usually the actions are never that obvious. SO, use their names more, or, like I said, use epithets ("the shinigami," "the arrancar," "the redhead," "the blue-haired...whatever...".. I don't know, that last one might get awkward, but I'm sure you get the idea xD;;). ...Does this make any sense? I hope I'm communicating well enough... sometimes it's hard over the internet...

ANYWAY, I just thought I'd drop my two cents on this matter. Because I do really really really love this story, and I only offer constructive criticism because I love it so much. You don't have to take my advice, of course. You are the goddess of your writing! I am but your humble acolyte. :) And will continue to read regardless, hanging on your every word.

So, update soon please!
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From ANON - magick on April 21, 2008
Haythere! I loooooove this story so far... :D :D I have it bookmarked because I don't have an account, but I always come and check on it to see if you've updated, and I always jump for joy when you have!
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From ANON - Anassa Thalassa on April 21, 2008
each chapter just keeps on getting better! update when you can!
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From ANON - 7bo7benn7 on April 21, 2008
I have been following this story for quite a while, and I'm really taken with it. It's very good. And not as OOC as some people think.

I'm glad you're not taking Mpreg suggestions. I find it can sort of muddle the plot, because you have to explain "how" they get pregnant, and one Mpreg seems to initiate 5 or six more Mpregs in the story. Too many in my opinion. I also like that you don't have everyone in a yaoi or yuri relationship, because that takes away from the reality of the plot.

You're working on a slow, built up connection between Grimmjow and Ichigo, and it really makes the story more, I don't know, captivating? They're brought together because of their likeness, because of what they share, and that shared quality becomes more eerie and frightening every day.

Keep on going with this, it seems as though you could continue this story on for quite some time (yaoi fangirls scream in victory), so consider different ways to slowly add tension or enforce connections, like you're doing now. You've got all the time in the world.

Thanks for making quality Grimmjow/Ichigo!

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From ANON - ukestalker on April 21, 2008
OMG i'm so loving this story!!! XD i so want ichigo and grimmjow to get it on again, coz i know it's going to be hotter than the first time,
what with all the build up!! CAN"T waite for the next chapter!!!
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From ANON - kaz on April 21, 2008
I'd prefer more non-con if it's only between Grimm and Ichi. Because I'm sadistic. And... as for the story, I don't have any ideas, but it'll be cool if you make your own plot than follow the original one.
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