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From ANON - savvy on September 26, 2009
yes!!!! finally!!!!some relationships explained!!!!
i had been dying to hear about kenpachi's and Karin's respective relationships. though i still want to hear about Shunsui's and Masaki's in greater detail lol.
another great story come to an end!!!
keep it up!
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From ANON - savvy on September 26, 2009
great chapter man...though i admit... i was curious to see how Ikki, Masaki and Byakuya would fit together as a...well, threesome couple in love, if they do. 'fraid i couldn't quite figure out if they were or if it was only masaki and byakuya.
lol, but it was good anyway.
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From ANON - savvy on September 25, 2009
WAHHHHHH KUKKAKU AND KENPACHI!!!! it fits...rather perfectly....God knows, no other woman would be able to handle him lol
great man!!!
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From ANON - savvy on September 24, 2009
great man!!!
weird how Kaein is so powerful...though to be expected considering who his parents are lol.
btw.....a woman menstrual cycle last a bit longer than 2 days...try 5 or so...on average mind you lol. though the idea of the arrancars reactions to it is incredible, brilliant idea, mate.
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From Alcibiades on December 26, 2008
Chapter 5: Wow, it's been a while since I reviewed; life gets hectic around finals, I guess. Anyways, enough of that, and onto the good stuff:

I love this chapter; honestly, it's one of my favorite ones in the entire story. Let's start from the top. Kin's moment of angst when she discovered what she'd let slip through her fingers was very nicely balanced, wrenching but not melodramatic. And then Asuka... man, I'd hate to get on her bad side. Seeing her released was quite something, and the two of them slugging it out was a sight to see. You did a very good job, once again, of keeping the emotions controlled enough to be poignant and realistic without crossing over into cheesy, so props to you on that. Having Kaien jump in the middle like that was a welcome surprise, equal parts suspenseful and relieving. Relieving because there might finally be the opportunity to sort out the gigantic misunderstanding, but suspense over just how it was going to be done. Once again, very nicely paced on your part.

The explanation of Kaien's powers was an intriguing one, powerful but with enough of a drawback to equalize it and allow you to tread the thin line between plausible and overpowered seemingly effortlessly. Kudos on that; I know how hard it can be to come up with a new kind of power that doesn't seem unbalanced in some respect, and this is also quite imaginative. The reunion scene between Kin and Kaien was really sweet and well-written; it really felt good to see that after such a teeth-gnashingly frustrating, Shakespeareanly tragic misunderstanding, the two of them were able to reconcile, and what a reconciliation it was. And when their parents showed up, you were able to sprinkle in a generous amount of laughs for good measure. Well played.

The fight between Kisuke and Kaien was very well-written and paced, and quite engrossing. The way you displayed Kaien's powers in action flowed really well on the page, and it was also visually impressive to boot. Should be fun to see what else he's got in store later on, no?

And now we get to my favorite part of an already amazing chapter: The Souken/Asuka scene. I love this part. From the very real melancholy that Asuka feels to the pained, bittersweet longing on Souken's part, you really nailed those emotions head-on. And then you managed to flip it around in an instant, turning that internal angst into external humor and sweetly amusing awkwardness. Seeing Souken sputter like that while Asuka just vamps it up and gets even further under his skin makes me smile every time, and I was genuinely happy that they both managed to find some kind of happiness in the wake of what could have just been heartbreak and unrequited love. Incredibly well done on your part, and I can't say that enough. Great character development, dialogue, everything. Awesome stuff.

All in all, this was yet another fantastic installment of a great story, and as soon as I'm done writing the chapter of my own story I'm currently working on, I'll come back and review Chapter 6. Great job!
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From Alcibiades on December 02, 2008
Chapter 4: Angst galore! Man, this chapter really went for the jugular as far as lovesickness and Shakespeare-esque misunderstandings are concerned, but in typically awesome fashion you managed to pull everything together seamlessly without coming off as melodramatic or sappy. Nice done. I chuckled at Yoruichi's voyeuristic side, though, which was a nice touch of levity to throw in there, even if it was followed by a veritable tidal wave of drama. I felt quite bad for Asuka and her unrequited love/pining, but I'm sure things'll work out for her in the end ;-). Again, you did a great job of humanizing her personality and giving her depth and sympathetic, realistic emotions; good stuff.

I could see the train wreck coming when Kin didn't recognize Kaien, but that still didn't keep it from feeling like a punch in the gut when it finally hit. I wanted to scream at her for being so dense, which you should take in the best way possible; after all, it's a testament to your writing that your characters are fleshed-out enough to evoke an emotional response. Oh well, it looks like Asuka's going to be the harbinger for all of us, so there's that.

Another excellent chapter chock-full of great character moments and plot development. Kudos!
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From Alcibiades on December 02, 2008
Chapter 3, The Interlude: Well, THAT was interesting, fun and also quite unexpected. I was curious the whole way through as to what exactly was going on, and you placed the reveal perfectly. I smiled when I realized who the two of them were, and their quips afterwards flowed nicely and were quite well-done. This chapter was a nice break from the epic-ness that is A New Window, and I enjoyed reading it quite a lot. Sorry of this review is shorter than my others, but there wasn't a whole lot of plot to talk about (or any, really, for that matter), so I hope you understand.

Oh, and no, I don't think you're on crack. That tends to hinder the ability to write quite severely, fron what I've heard. ;-)

Thanks for sharing the hilarity with us. Onto the next chapter.
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From Alcibiades on December 02, 2008
Chapter 2: I really liked the way you started this chapter; Kaien's shock at seeing his parents' Soul Reaper forms was understandable, conveyed believably and also hilarious (at least when Tatsuki talked him down). Poor Kin; she really got the short end of the stick on this one. You did a nice job of showing her initial shock at Kaien's vanishing, before slipping smoothly into barely-contained anger and righteous indignation. The multiple sides of her character you show through your dialogue really helps make Kin relatable, and invested me emotionally into the arc of her development as a character. I really hope it works out all right for her; she deserves as much. I feel bad for Kaien, too, though, and for a completely different reason; he has no idea what he's going to walk back into if Kin hasn't sorted out her anger issues by the time he shows back up again.

The throng of arrancar groupies was inspired and funny, and I can't wait to see Asuka make her appearance (yeah, I'm reviewing these in hindsight, so sue me... I'm trying not to let my foreknowledge get too much in the way of each chapter's review, though).

The touch about Yuzu's mothering abilities was quite nice, and well-written. Kaien's experimentation with his newfound powers had just the right amount of curiosity and wonderment to pull me in as well, props to that. Interesting to see that Nejibana's showing up again... I've always liked that particular zanpakuto. And I see we have a flash-forward in our future, no? Sounds like fun.

All in all, another very solid installment, and I'm looking forward to re-reading and reviewing the next chapter.
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From Alcibiades on December 02, 2008
All right, I've been lurking on this story and "What the Eyes Can't See" for a while now, and I finally managed to register so that I can stop feeling so guilty about not reviewing such a great pair of stories. Here goes:

So, chapter 1. I thought the intro to the character of Kaien was really well done; I got a sense of who he was and what he was about without a tediously overlong amount of exposition, and you managed to build up a sense of sympathy for him that really drew me to the character. The description of his past was nice, and I thought the scene with him and the twins right after they'd been born was especially cute.

The fight between Kin and Kaien was equal parts engaging action-wise and funny, delivering a satisfying confrontation while also setting up the camaraderie/rivalry/relationship between the two of them. The second face-off was also fast-paced and fun to read, with the climax being both credible and cringe-inducing. Sucks for Kaien that he managed to cockblock himself, but it couldn't have been that easy or there'd be no conflict, am I right? The throw-down with the Hollow was intense and surprising; It's nice to see that Kaien takes after his father as far as emotionally-driven outbursts of power are concerned. But it still didn't feel like a deus-ex-machina, so thumbs-up to you for that balancing act. Ichigo's intervention made me smile, and the proceeding talk he gave about Kaien's incantation bypass turned that into a full-blown laugh. Good times. It was very interesting seeing how Kaien's abilities manifested, but the cost of taming that power is steep indeed. Again, kudos to you for not going with the easy way out, and giving your characters something to struggle through. I feel bad for Kin, but it's not like Kaien's 'exile' is permanent, which makes it sting a bit less.

Overall, fantastic beginning to an excellent story, and I'll review the rest of the chapters as soon as I have the chance. Thanks for sharing this with us!
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From Rifts on October 24, 2008
Well, I gotta say this is one hell of a story, in the best way possible. I do admit that I was a little shocked and sad when I saw that it was completed, but reading the last epilogue basically beat me to what I would have immediately requested otherwise: more stories in this universe. And now, of course, you've even started the next one, so that's kinda uncalled for now.

So, what to say...I really liked the last few chapters, for a few reasons in particular. One of which is simply that I always felt these stories needed more Kenpachi for some reason. But in all seriousness, I think you finished it up very nicely, tied up a lot of loose ends, and did it so well I sometimes wish I had the ability to draw since I can visualize so many of the scenes so well. I've always loved the little references to other parts of the Bleach setting, and naming the new little girl Senna was great. In fact, it's usually all the little things that seem to get me over the course of WTECS and this. I still grin at the 'Uncle Grimmjow' reference way back at the beginning.

So, although there's some questions (suggestions?) I've come up with, now that there's a brand new story where there's a chance they'll be answered, I'll toss them into my first review for it. And I will say this regarding some of the more off-the-wall relationships and all: Sometimes you have to do something unexpected or it's nowhere near as interesting. I figure it's stuff like that which can really help draw people in.

All in all, an awesome story. I loved both WTECS and this, and am very happy to see this universe continue. I've never been a fan of true endings, no matter how well done they are, since there's the underlying message that you'll never see the characters or settings which you've grown to like so much again. So, I'm glad to see how quickly we move on to the next one.
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From yansuke on October 23, 2008
oh hell yeah! i bow down to the best bleach fanfiction author of ALL TIMES!!!!!!
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From thas on October 17, 2008
just had the funniesr thought and thought i'd share. kon as the kids nanny or as there toy when they were teething.
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From JHHolliday on October 17, 2008
Great job finishing up! Your Soi Fong idea seems promising, and I hope you can get to it soon!
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From Watcher on October 17, 2008
Let me put it this way.

391 pages of well-written awesomeness > 1/2 a page of hastily written criticism

In English, you've beaten me out by labor theory of value alone. I've got a thick skin. Ever since I showed a 27-page, single-spaced, typed short story written at white heat over two sleepless nights to one of my dearest friends, only to have him call it crap and refuse to read past page 12, everything else just bounces off. Don't worry about hurting my feelings.

Besides, I'm not moonymuch or XSTALKERX. I just started reading somewhere around Chapter 16, after all. You're right. Putting my personal character interpretations up here this late in the game isn't helping anyone. I felt at first that your pairings were a tad odd, and I still might rib you about them, but I like that you've taken plausable but unconventional directions and made them work, emotionally and cinematically.

That Ichigo/Hollow point is an excellent one, and one I hadn't though of before. You win there, hands down.

I could whine about meaning absolute materialism in the technical, philosophical sense, but instead I feel fine just agreeing to disagree about some things.

Anyhow, actual review. I *did* like reading about various character histories, and I liked the chosen segue of an ending. Always funny to see Rangiku drunk, and I was wondering how she and Toshiro got together.

Further more, while I like Ulquiorra as the stoic villain, homicidal madness barely restrained by his rational mind, I was surprised to find myself almost touched by his little scene with Karen. Who knows? If Kubo lets *Grimmjow* turn over a new leaf, maybe Ulquiorra could give up the idea of "that which I cannot see does not exist" (317:21).

So, yeah. No hard feelings here, and I hope none over on your end. I'm still reading, and I'm still waiting, and I hope that if I ever do get my story written down you read and enjoy it as much as I have yours. Good luck.
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From moonymuch on October 17, 2008
Haha, I'm a huge fan of a GNO (but then, that's probably a given...). What an interesting epilogue! I liked how you cleared up some of the couples' stories (haha for KuuKen!), it was a nice little touch. Especially the Ulquiorra/Karin!

Oooh, looks like you're getting ready to launch into the SoiFongOC story! I'm really looking forward to that!

Closing thoughts...wow, what a wild ride. When I asked for a sequel, I definitely couldn't have imagined getting this! I thought a one-shot, or a couple of chapers. 391 pages is pretty epic, in my opinion, so kudos to you, friend! I loved all of the second generation, I think you've done so well with all of them. So thank you, thank you, thank you, for this story!
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