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Reviews for A New Window

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From BlazinAtsuma on March 23, 2008
Great update. I like the ending of the chapter when he was forced to copy two Zanpakto's that would be so much pain to take in. I hope what he heard was his mother trying to calm his inner Hollow before it got to far out of hand.. Loved the smut that you tossed in with Rukia/Renji, and Raqngiku/Toshiro. They were a great read. Hope you get time to write.

Josh
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From moonymuch on March 23, 2008
I'm glad to see another update! Thanks so much for the HitsuMatsu - that made me really happy. And I loved the fight between Kaien and Ukitake - you definitely proved Kaien's not a Gary Stu there. I would have been hard-pressed to believe that even someone as strong as Kaien could defeat someone like Ukitake on the first try. Are we going to get some Hollow!Kaien action in the next chapter!

Goodness, I completely forgot to e-mail you! You're making me feel guilty! But I'm a college student as well, so I have an excuse...but I'll fire one off to you, okay?
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From Firebullet19 on March 10, 2008
I just fond your story and I all ready read it all the way throw from What The Eyes Can't See to A new Window and i must say it one of my fav storys on AFF I hope you keep writing and I can't wait for the next chapter.
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From JHHolliday on February 21, 2008
Just finished 15! Great writing, as always. I know Nnoitra is a total ass in the manga, but have you seen Santa Teresa? He's a praying mantis. Badass. Just throwing it out there, Kira/Hinamori. I think it'd work, they're both kind of twitchy. Keep up the good work. JHH
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From chaseboy04 on February 21, 2008
I absolutely love this story and pray to whatever higher being that you keep writing, I have seen far to many great stories fall by the wayside due to lack of interest and it saddens me. But i do agree with a previous reviewer posting on Fanfiction.net would, I believe, drastically increase your reader base and expose your work to a wider variety of people where it can be better appreciated.
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From KishaW on February 21, 2008
Please! Please update soon! I cant wait to find out what happens next! I love this story, and Kin and Kaien are so cute! And Hot TOO! Wanna read more with Souken and Asuka too! Please write more like....NOW!!!!!
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From moonymuch on February 20, 2008
Heh, I might take you up on that offer.

I'm so excited for this update! I admit, this is the story that has me dropping in at least twice a week here (since I'm actually not a big fan of this site), just to see if there's a new chapter. And to be honest, the reason why you've probably lost some readers is the long wait. Out of sight, out of mind, you know? It's not like ff.net, where you can receive a notice on updates...have you thought about posting there? I think your reader base would shoot way up if you posted there...

Anyway, OF COURSE I'd review! I have a proprietary interest in this story, since I was the one that requested it! Kin and Kaien are so wonderful together, it's a little sickening XD And I really loved the HitsuMatsu that you put here; they're probably my second favorite Bleach pairing, after Shunsui and Nanao. I completely agree that a HitsuMatsu daughter would act like Matsumoto, and the son like Hitsugaya. Just imagine the family dinners! You definitely did the pair justice, so I thank you for that. But my favorite part by far was Byakuya's interactions with his niece and nephew...I always thought that Byakuya would be a sucker for kids. And the fact that Masaki has a crush on him is just delicious - I can't wait to see what you do with that.

Wow, what a long review! Just goes to show that I missed this story ^_^
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From Kirei on February 20, 2008
Happy, happy, happy =D Finally after that long wait.

"What The Eyes Can't See" and "A New Window" just proves how much your a story telling master - or God, which ever one prefer to uses.

Sorry I've neglected to review every single chapter - was bit on the busy side, school sucks doesn't it?

Now, I've always been more of an IchiHime fan but the way you write your stories it kinda made be turn topsy turvy and ended up as a Ichigo + Tatsuki fan!

This chapter was really good (maybe it was because I missed it D=) for a moment I absolutely forgot where they were when it got to the part of Toshiro and Rangiku. I thought everyone went to Soul Society for a trip at that moment XD Don't know what gave me that thought.

I liked the bit about Toshiro and Rangiku gives a bit more thoughts on them in your story. Never thought about Toshiro being a dad really - after all he did look like a Elementry Schooler to begin with =p
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From xSTALKERx on February 19, 2008
After a long wait, we finally get to see what happens on Christmas morning.

This particular chapter really reminded me of some of the Ichigo/Tatsuki interactions in "What the Eye's can't see" (which isn't a bad thing, I LOVE that story). I like how they have seemed to settled into "real life" more, and it makes the story seem all the more real.

It was also nice to see more of the Toshiro/Rangiku story, especially their kids and how that will play into the stories of the others.

Personally, I'd like to see more Ichigo/Tatsuki stuff, but since this is a story focusing on their kids its alright if they are left in the background, but my fanboyism wouldn't permit me not to ask.

Once again, a great chapter and I can't wait for the next one.
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From BlazinAtsuma on January 10, 2008
A great swquel to ur story.. It was very new with the future of Ichigo and Tatsuki.. I had a feeling you would put Yoruichi's daughter and Ichigo's son together... But in a way it seems Kaien is Kaien from the beginning of Rukia's soul academy but how come... Other than the twists and drops you put everyone through great job...
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From moonymuch on January 07, 2008
Aw, I'm sad that I won't be seeing any updates for a while! But it's totally understandable; I get back to school in a week as well O_o

You know, I was kind of wondering if that was where you were going with Kaien (having him be Kaien Shiba's reincarnation), since he looks like him and the first zanpakuto he touched was Nejibana...cool. When they go to Soul Society, are you thinking of having any interactions between him and Kuukaku and Ganju? That would be interesting, in my mind. Oooh, and here's a crazy pairing, since we're on the subject of Kuukaku...how about Zaraki? It makes sense to me, in an eerie way - but then again, I love crack. Anyway, the love scene was sweet and emotional and sexy as usual, so I was happy. You really do have a talent for those as well, capturing the feelings between two people in love as they consummate it.

And don't worry, I completely trust on the subject of Kaien - though I'm taking you up on your offer to call you out, should the need arise. None of your OCs have really shown any inclination towards Mary Sue/Gary Stu, so...keep up the good work!
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From JHHolliday on January 05, 2008
Thank you for taking my thoughts into consideration. I suppose I can wait for the next update... Finally Kin and Kaien got to know each other... in the biblical sense. I hope for more excellent writing in the future! More fight scenes! More "passionate" scenes! More HitsuMatsu! If you don't mind of course. Bon voyage! JHH
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From AceKent on January 05, 2008
Chapter 12: sorry it took awhile for me to R&R, there is just way too much going on this time of year for me to be able to read, even if it is wonderful fanfiction like your stories. I thought that this was another great chapter (lol, I can't seem to say that enough) and it expanded a dimension that you had kind of touched on previously, but only really brought out (i think) in this chapter. That is, the views that your characters have of themselves and their powers coupled with their fears of rejection when they compare them to the norm. Each character is very unique and different, which makes them interesting and really piques my interest in their development, and when they themselves become aware of it, there is always that fear of how others might think of them (how having hollow powers would be something that would definitely be something rejected by Soul Society). I think that you resolved their fears nicely and everything else was very enjoyable and entertaining, I can't wait to read the other chapters now!
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From moonymuch on January 04, 2008
Poor Kin and Kaien. It seems like every time they're together, there's either a fight or someone has to run away XD I can only imagine the frustration. The idea of a houseful of Shinigami, Shinigami/Arrancar, and OTHER ridiculously powerful children scares the crap out of me. It's a good thing that Ichigo and Tatsuki are the King and Queen, because their children are truly frightening! Yet another well-written fight scene, I'm very happy! It was nice to see that Kaien can be thrashed a little bit, even though he was holding back. My only concern is you making him TOO powerful, because that's when an OC becomes a Gary Stu/Mary Sue - not that I'm saying Kaien is one, not at all! Anyway, I can't wait for the next chapter!
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From JHHolliday on January 04, 2008
Sorry, forgot to say this. More HitsuMatsu, if you can. Ukitake/Unohana would be interesting as well. Their love life must've really picked up when he had his TB treated. Nothing ruins the moment like a mouthful of blood and 20 minutes of hacking. Kills the mood.
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