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Reviews for While They're Gone

By : Athiossilver
  • From Clothclouds on October 10, 2007
    why am i still the only one who has reviewed? i liked the beginning chapter's character relationship development and such stuff. as i said before, and will elaborate upon now, the main character seems to have stores of energy just hidden away. i know this is a common trait in most ocs, but i think it would be refreshing if he met an enemy he actually had to work to defeat. perhaps in a flashback, maybe to get to his current level of power. also, i didnt mean to be rude. i only meant that original fight scenes would be nice. ^^' sorry. good work!!
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  • From Clothclouds on September 16, 2007
    nice story and all, but isnt the ain character's power a little cheesy? also, the fight scene in chapter two is a complete ripoff of episodes 139-140, up to the lines. other than that, nice work. hado no sanjyu san: sokatsui. thats the kidou thingy. san=3 jyu=10 33.
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