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Reviews for Black-and-Red Conflict

By : ghostraven

From hsosborne on November 09, 2008
I love this fic and your other one:Secret Garden. Do you think that the next time you add to them you can send me an email with the web address to let me know? My email is PotionsPet@hotmail.com
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From IvyCirce on October 13, 2008
Aaaargh, wish Byakuya make it right this time.
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From Chiyo on October 10, 2008
Oh! I don�t know what to say! I was so excited to see a new update, and my, it was a brilliant read! I never know where to begin when I review� erm�

I really, really think you showed Byakuya�s thoughts and feelings in a wonderful way. I�m glad he�s finally managing to make some sense of all the things going on in his mind. I really wasn�t sure how he was going to react to Rukia�s visit and his consequent realisations; whether he would hide from it anymore, or whether bits of him might fall apart. I�m so glad he�s found this sort of peace where he can at least think straight. I get so worried about him� *blushes*

I love how you conveyed his now-clear thoughts, and the parts about Hisana put a tear in my eye. I really, really love how you�ve developed Byakuya over the whole fic, and how far he�s come from back in chapter one to this, where he understands things, accepts things, and even admits that he is wrong where he is (even if it took him a long time to realise).

He would be the person Renji could not resist and the person who could not resist Renji. I think this line was lovely at showing their feelings for eachother. I never really thought much of this pairing until I read this fic, and now I can�t get enough of it. I like the way they are sort of everything the other doesn�t need, and everything they do need at the same time.

The interaction between the pair at the fourth division, I thought was great. Renji�s defensiveness really shows how much the whole mess with Byakuya has gotten to him, and I�m glad Byakuya is noticing this very much now and opening up more. The ending of this chapter was just perfect! I can�t wait to see what happens next!

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From cutsycat on October 05, 2008
Wow! I just read all your chapters. I only found this today. It's an amazing story and I can't wait for the next chapter.
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From remyjames on October 04, 2008
OMG!! Please let Byakuya change. Please. I want them together :)
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From Chiyo on September 16, 2008
Finally got round to reading and giving you my opinion on this, and I don’t know what you are worrying about! This is a fantastic piece of writing, in my opinion, and I was leaning forward in my seat the whole time. Ooh, now where to begin?

Your imagery throughout the chapter was brilliant. It had me really feeling the tension and desperation in the situation. I really liked your characterisation of them both in this chapter, but particularly Byakuya. I hardly knew what to expect of him now that he is acting so differently from his usual calm self, but I think you got it all down perfectly.

I really loved how he, after leaving the 4th squad in that state, shut himself in a private room, behind walls and closed doors because his own internal barriers were so exhausted. It seemed like such a Byakuya thing to do; to find some sort of defence somewhere until he can regain his own, and until he can at least recover some of the level-headedness he and others would expect of him. I liked his realisation also, that his hard-earned self-discipline wouldn’t help him where his body protested so much from all the stress, but of course he fights to keep it all together anyway.

You’ve displayed just how distraught he is now so well! I really liked how much he noticed here the resemblance between Rukia and his late wife, just to show how much things are getting to him, and obviously adding yet more to his jumble of emotion.

In the paragraph that I think started with ‘This was alien, unreal, scary. This was Kuchiki Byakuya…’, my feelings about Byakuya were pretty much exactly described through Rukia’s. It’s so strange to see him behaving like this, in a way that I never would have expected of him, thinking about things I never would have expected of him, and coming to conclusion I never would have expected he’d come to. Even though I’ve read through the whole story and seen the development of all the characters, it’s still a very pleasant shock to see just how much things are getting to him, and how much he’s having no choice now but to let them. I love how far he’s come now.

With Rukia, I’m liking very much how she’s learning of the situation, both the ups and downs. I was so pleased that Renji gave in and told her about it all in the last chapter, and although Byakuya didn’t say much to her at all – nothing at all really about the actual problem, or what’s going on – through the way she managed to read and speculate on his feelings, he gave her much more than I would have hoped for. I’m glad she’s a little less in the dark about everything now, and maybe she can, like you said in the previous chapter, knock some sense into them, in one way or another. It seems like her message is getting through to Byakuya now.

Hmm, I’m going to stop typing now, before I start repeating myself, but I don’t think you have anything at all to worry about with your story. I just can’t wait to see what happens next!

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From Chiyo on September 15, 2008
Ooh, wow! What can I say? I wish I had gotten round to reading this sooner, because it was fantastic. I'm really loving the progression of the story and characters right now. I felt such empathy for Ukitake, being to sort who likes to help people, and doesn't like to leave them troubled, but having to realise that there isn't really much he can do in the situation. It's a funny sort of feeling, and I think you got that across well. I also must say that I really adore your portrayal of Unohana. I don't have much interest in her in the actual manga, maybe because she doesn't seem to get enough time to do anything (maybe that will change after the upcoming stuff, I don't know), but I really like what you did with what little we've seen of her. She's that kind, motherly type that you really know you should watch out for, and the way Ukitake knew that about her so well made me giggle.

Ah, more empathy I felt, this time with Rukia. I hated seeing Renji so downtrodded and defeated, when he's usually the one to fight hard and shout about his impending victory, even when the odds are stacked right against him. I'm so glad that now everything is out in the open between he and Rukia. It's not good for him just keeping it all bottled up, and since she is the woman with a connection to both Renji and Byakuya, it seems that she might be the one who could actually help out, even if some of the things she has been told weren't exactly what she expected or wanted to hear about her brother. Am I right?

I was worried that when they began arguing (if that's the right word) with eachother, Renji would push Rukia away, so I am so grateful for her determination and care for him, and I'm glad that he managed to clear his head a little by talking to her. What would he do without a friend like her, eh? Silly redhead. ^_^

So now I'm all very curious as to how Byakuya is feeling now, and what will come of Rukia's talk with him. I shall be reading the next chapter in the morning (I can't wait!) and then I shall get on with finishing and sending to you the RP post that I have had half-done for far too long.

Bye for now.

X
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From Chiyo on September 15, 2008
Ah, what is with my scatterbrain lately? I have a long list of things I want to read, write, do... and I'm just not getting around to them all fast enough. Seems there are too many and not enough hours in the day, if that makes any sense at all.

On to what I wanted to say: I love this chapter! I read it last week, but then had to do something else and didn't review until now, but I really loved it. I was so worried about both of them. Renji, well, it's obvious why I was worried about him. And Byakuya because... oh, he's so silly sometimes; the way he tears himself apart all alone all the time. He makes things so difficult for himself and I adore him for it. I think you did a great job of capturing all of this about his character. I mean, of all the fanfics I have read (that is a large, large amount *blushes*) your characterisation of Byakuya is very much my favourite. I just think that you get him so perfectly, even in situations that are so different from what we've seen in the manga. I really must compliment you one that.

I was so relieved at the end of the chapter though, that at least to some extent, they are both okay. I'm really curious as to how Byakuya is going to behave now. He's worn himself out enough that he couldn't help but outwardly display his relief at Renji being alive, so I'm interested to see just how he feels about that slip in his facade, and how he deals with it. Definately must read the next chapter as soon as I finish my dinner lol ^_^
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From daylightdancer on August 02, 2008
Cant wait for more! =D
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From remyjames on July 29, 2008
Yea, an update! I'm glad your back and I look forward to the next chapter :)
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From Nenshogin22 on July 02, 2008
yellow person i do not know,

ur story is the best ive ever read for a fanfiction on this site... congrads u r my top story...
just to boost ur ego some more... i really think u r more than enough talented to write ur own book n get it published tho there rnt many yaoi books i hoppe you'll create one

:D
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From remyjames on June 08, 2008
Wow! Man, I hope Byakuya realizes now what he has. Awesome ending to this particular chapter. I look forward to the next.
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From Shaylilin on June 08, 2008
This story is amazing. I keep looking for an update. You write really well. I love the pairing of Renji and Byakuya. Now I'm sitting on the edge of my seat again wondering what you've got coming next!
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From remyjames on May 28, 2008
FUCK!!!! This story is getting so good. I started reading this last night and couldn't wait to get home to finish it. It's that fuckin good. **pats you on the back** I anxiously await the next update :)
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From FieldsofHeather on May 25, 2008
GAH!! *pulls hair in frustration* You just had to stop there didn't you! Evil is what you are, Evil! *gives up on hair and starts biting nails* Hurry back, I can't wait to find out what happened.

P.S. Great story!!
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