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Reviews for The Playtime Mini-Series - COMPLETE!

By : Tsukineko9

From BlueUtopiah on August 26, 2005
Well...all I can say is WOW. I know that you are asking for constructive critisicm, but I feel that there is none to give, since this collection is truly phenominal! You write very steamy lemons and great plot and dialogue as well - a scary combination - you challenge other authors (including me) to better themselves.

Rukia and Ichigo's conversation at the end of vacation made me laugh out loud, Ichigo's statement of "this is the only button that Ishida doesn't hate" was wonderful, and - HOLY CRAP - you got Ichigo to be uke in a believeable way!

Your inclusion of Kon had me raising an eyebrow at first but then you wove this beautiful story around it, giving me a new view on Kon. Your threesomes are refreshingly original and, for lack of a better word - HAWT.

This is, hands down, the best story in the Bleach fandom, whatever you do, don't stop writing! :goes to mop brain up off keyboard:
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From ANON - Drisowen on August 24, 2005
That was a wonderful ending. I cant wait to read whatever else you guys put out. I think I've read everything up to this point. I love your writing and I'm a huge fan. So....I hope you update something soon. Have a good day/night/evening/afternoon/ whatever it is where you are when you read this!^^
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From ANON - Ouri (too lazy to log in) on August 23, 2005
Still loving this - did notice one minor error I have to comment on, though. The device that clamps tightly is a "vise"; "vice" is the sort of wonderfully naughty activity the boys are indulging in. ~,^ (Yeah, yeah, I'm a Princess of Word Priss, what can I say. The difference between "loose pants" and "lose pants" has been known to make me froth at the mouth. *sweatdrop*)

Having gotten that out of my system - I'll be watching for your next Bleach fic!
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From ANON - blisblop on August 20, 2005
N o reveiws for such boom ficcage!Shame people.I love the way you describe their physical responces to each other,its hot.Their fumbling towards intimacy is sweet but not mushy,thank kamasama.The places and situations you put them in without losing the care with fore mentioned detail is the most unique and very appreichiated part.Quality all the way.I am happy happy happy.Plus this is my fav pair for this series so happy ect.Thank You sooooo much.If you want a better group of readers come to Naruto and write some Uchihacest,Itachi/Sasuke (they can be flipped too)or Orochimaru/Sasuke, you will be whorshiped for this level of writing.Grins.Yup Yup.
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From ANON - Himemiya on August 20, 2005
What a world you created! The description of every scene was so full, I could really see where they were (and, um, what they were doing ^^; ) I love how Ichigo and Ishida still fight, even when in the middle of foreplay, it made them seem 'in character', you know? Besides it being a fanfic and yaoi, no one was OOC at all.

Kon's new body does seem to completely fit him. And Ichigo X Ishida X Ichigo (kon) is probably the hottest image ever.

Constructively, the only things I could find were a few misspellings (I can't even remember where they were now). And Ichigo had *pop*! O.O It took me a minute for my southern brain to figure out it was soda.
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From ANON - Mercedes on August 14, 2005
Chapter 6!

BTW, the previous comment that starts with "OMG!!!!!1111one! *fangirl-squeals*" is mine about chapter 5. ^.^;;; I was too overwhelmed. *LOL*

Wow... after all that near-pointless smut, you give us plot! Whee! I knew there were more reasons I like your fics, other than the excellent writing style, god characterzation, and attention to detail. I so want to see a picture of Kon's new body!

While I adore all the sweetness between the three of them and I like the way you finally gave Kon his own body, there were a few little details that struck me as odd. Mostly they had to do with when you talked about anything concerning Hollow-hunting. The biggest thing was the near-casual handing out the Spirit Phones. I always thought things like that would be a little harder to come by. Some how, the whole thing smacks of Scooby-Gang-ala-"Buffy The Vampire Slayer". HOWEVER, you did say it was an AU, so I'll forgive it. Besides, the fact that you have Ishida alive, well, and still a functioning Quincy gives me hope for what's going to happen in episode 45+ of the anime. ^.^

This was such a wonderful fic series... thank you soooooooo much for writing and posting it! I have been cravin a fic like this for ages and the fact that it was six, LONG chapters of smutty, detail-thick, imagry-soaked goodness just made it even better.

I can't wait to read what you come out with next! *camps on your author pages*
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From ANON - Anon on August 14, 2005
OMG!!!!!1111one! *fangirl-squeals* THREESOME! My fatal weakness... The proposal and their different personalities and ways of approaching things mixing... and all touching... and under and--and-- *whimpers and melts into a blithering puddle*

And with Kon! Such an unexpected twist! I seriously thought this fic was completely Ichigo/Ishida, I would have never even had thought of bringing Kon in! Though, it makes sense in the way that Ishida gets to full-fill a fantasy of having two "Ichigo's" making love to him. =^.^=

*purrr* Sweet threesome cuddling, too... Ah... I'm in heaven...
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From ANON - Mercedes on August 14, 2005
Chapter 4 - Go, Ishida-kun! ^.^

While I've never had the stomach for heavy BDSM, the occassional tying up is always a plus. ^.~ Again, it's the little details that get me, intellectually. Example, how Ishida had to leave Ichigo's boxers hanging off of one ankle because he didn't want to rip them off. *L*
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From ANON - Mercedes on August 14, 2005
Chapter 3!

*wipes up drool* It just keeps getting better. Wow... It boggles the mind how you're able to write these scenes with such a mix of emotions!
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From ANON - Mercedes on August 14, 2005
Chapter2!

*whimpers and fans herself*

Beach sex! Yay! I realy do like how the characters are developing in this fic and you're so careful with the details. Their surroundings, their habitual gestures, speech patterns, all very well written. *purrs* So happy... I love this fic...
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From ANON - Mercedes on August 14, 2005
God damn. O.o O.O o.O *dies, drowning in a puddle of drool*
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*is revived*

I swear, NONE of the fic authors I read can write smut scenes like you two ladies can.Seriously, you never forget anything; their reactions are imperfect and frenzied and exactly in character given the situation. *purrs happily* I SO needed to find a good smut like this, it's been too long since I read something with substance and enough erotica to make me practically melt out of my seat because of the hotness. Between this fic and "Spartan Ninjas", you two are officially the queens of smut in my mind. ^.^
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From ANON - Ryu_chan on August 14, 2005
i luuuuuuuuved this fic!!!!!!!!!! o*_*o
i luved the pairings and specially the situations xD
oh lord!this stories were TOO DAMN GOOD!!!!!!!!!! xD
hahahaha
you're a great writter ^^
i admit...i cried reading the last 2 chapters ;__;
luv happy ends ^^
luved your fic!
hope you write more fics like this :P
congrats!
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From ANON - sorviball on August 14, 2005
i'm so sad that this is over!!! Maybe you guys can randomly post one-shots as a treat for those who are refusing to believe that this series is over. honestly, i was a little skeptical about how the threesome would work out but you guys definitely pulled it off well. I think the dynamic between the 3 characters is great. It was so sweet to let Kon have his own body and his own life. I loved Hideki's character and how normal Kon's family was. It was also great that they all "came out." Of course, the lemon was really hot. Too bad Ishida didn't get to top Ichigo again, but Kon needed his time to shine. I think you guys did a good job giving Kon his own personality and his own role to play within the relationship. He was't just a third addition to the couple, but he really seemed like he belonged. You also did a great job balancing out Ichigo's loving side, and his sarcastic side. Honestly, all the characterizations were wonderful and on the spot. You guys did a wonderful job. Keep up the great work in all your future fics. If people weren't a fan of you writing before, then they definitely will be now.
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From ANON - Anon on August 13, 2005
I'm not sure how I missed his series, but I love it. It's fun and very much in keeping with the characters, all of them. Thanks for sharing!
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From ANON - T on August 11, 2005
ANOTHER brilliant chapter..but does that mean that the relationship will be a three way one? Either way is fine, so I was just wondering ^^. I can't really think of any other constructive criticism since my brain is fried from reading such a marvelous lemon! Woow. That's a nice idea to let Kon have his own body, but kind of sounds like a disaster waiting to happen, I just hope it can have a good ending. Oh! Uryuu's eyes are like a dark sapphire and is hair is like a really dark blue. ^^ I love this story and I can't wait till I read more. I wonder what Orihime or the other females would think about it? Please continue ^^
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